7月27作业

shengzhi86UID: 2757306

7月27作业
ID：shengzhi86


09.1.17北美
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits.






Recently, a discussion about whether advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits has been heated and different people may have distinct opinions according to their various backgrounds, emotions and characters.Contract with the opinion of some people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that the unhealthy eating habits are primarily caused by advertising, though some disadvantages of it are taken into account.

On one hand, I concede that it is an undeniable fact that some advertisements play a negative role in people’s eating habits. For instance, advertisements, concerning some kinds of junk food such as instant noodles, fried chicken, hamburger, coke and so forth, are so attractive that plenty of people most of time yield to the temptation and form a few unfit habits, which may even induce several types of illness. Especially, children are much easier to have an affinity for these good looking advertisements of junk food. Thus, it is essential for people to resist some unhealthy food advertisements.

On the other hand, though the disadvantages of the advertisements can not be negligible, they can not compete with the benefits that advertisements bring about, when take some helpful influences of those in our life into consideration. Some advertising tells people the way to cook and the suitable time to eat some food. For example, the best time to take milk and eggs is morning time. Cook carrot with eggs could resist some small diseases. Thus, advertising could regulate and correct people’s wrong and unhealthy habits just as a teacher instruct people in usual life.

Furthermore, some people believe that a few insalubrious habits are generated only because the junk food is advertised. However, the crucial reason may not be that. Perhaps, a person is originally lazy, or perhaps a person is too busy to have little time to cook and eat more nutritive food. In the second case, if there were no advertising for fast food, the person may eat nothing at all, which is far worse for his or her health.

All in all, in accordance with what has been discussed above we could safely draw the conclusion that, although advertising may cause some unhealthy habit, it could be benefit people to keep health in many ways. Moreover, we could not say the unhealthy habit mainly caused by advertising.

王亚冉UID: 2758328

Contract ingwith the opinion of some people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that the unhealthy eating habits are primarily caused by advertising, though some disadvantages of it are taken into account.
这句有两个动词，真正的应为is吧~
For example, the best time to take milk and eggs is morning time.“morning time”应该为“in the morning”好像没有这么说的吧，不地道，time 重复了，chienglish~ps:这些建议貌似也不是广告上说的吧？！理由不够充分呀~
In the second case, if there were no advertising for fast food, the person may eat nothing at all, which is far worse for his or her health.不做广告，就不吃了？什么逻辑？
除了个别小错误以外，整体结构很清晰，有连接词标注；词汇使用很高级，例如insalubrious~我的能力有限，批的不好，见谅。
还有就是这个作文的题目是从哪里选的，哪个北美呀？大家不是都用的李笑来的185那个题库吗？

cairen1986UID: 2599310

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Recently, a discussion about whether advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits has been heated and different people may have distinct opinions according to their different (various,用在表达不同的意思在此，不好) backgrounds, emotions and characters.Contacting （Contract） with the opinion of some people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that the unhealthy eating habits are primarily caused by advertising, though some disadvantages of it are taken into account.( T5 c, r1 s' i& C, G2 Q




On one hand, I concede that it is an undeniable fact that some advertisements play a negative role in people’s eating habits. For instance, advertisements, concerning some kinds of junk food such as instant noodles, fried chicken, hamburger, coke and so forth, are so attractive that plenty of people most of time come into （yield） to the temptation and form a few unfit habits, which may even induce several types of illness. Especially, children are much easier to have an affinity for these good looking advertisements of junk food. Thus, it is essential for people to resist some unhealthy food advertisements.' W9 ^5 g) t9 P6 Z4 N# l




On the other hand, though the disadvantages of the advertisements can not be negligible, they can not compete with the benefits that advertisements bring about, when take some helpful influences of those in our life into consideration. Some advertising tells people the way to cook and the suitable time to eat some food. For example, the best time to take milk and eggs is morning time. Cook carrot with eggs could resist some small diseases. Thus, advertisement （advertising） could regulate and correct people’s （wrong and ）unhealthy habits just as a teacher instruct people in usual life.



Furthermore, some people believe that a few insalubrious habits are generated only because the junk food is advertised. However, the crucial reason may not be that. Perhaps, a person is originally lazy, or perhaps a person is too busy to have little time to cook and eat more nutritive food. In the second case, if there were no advertisements （advertising） for fast food, the person may eat nothing at all, which is far worse for his or her health.+ \& @( ]9 @; Q( O/ q5 j2 Z4 E
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All in all, in accordance with what has been discussed above we could safely draw the conclusion that, although advertising may cause some unhealthy habit, it could be benefit people to keep health in many ways. Moreover, we could not say the unhealthy habit mainly caused by advertising.


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