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All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. …………

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1# ppbbo
All work and no play [url=]makes[/url][o1] Jack a dull boy. The popular aphorism tersely reply to the doubting choice below: high salary with hard work and [url=]breviate[/url][o2] vacation compared with less income but few work and much free time. However, the modern world has brought us to an [url=]intensity[/url][o3] life style. More and more people have to work very hard, even without any rest [url=]time[/url][o4] . What they are suffering now [url=]seems[/url][o5] similar to the first kind of people described above.

In my opinion, it is agreeable, or even wonderful, that people pick the former choice in the crossing corner of our lives.

To begin with, it is nearly an unrealizable dream for common people to expect higher living standard without hard work. In the competitive society, a lot of intelligent staff have to do burdensome work. [url=]If only they are tired of it, would they be free of income. [/url][o6] Without high salary, they [url=]can not[/url][o7] enjoy vacation, can not enjoy delicious meals, can not pay the rent and be extruded by the landlord. However, if they [url=]devote to[/url][o8] the hard work and earn enough money, even during short free time, they can choose some comfort way to enjoy the golden days.

Secondly, more working practices can make one be an able person. Some working positions lean to the worker with working experience in some famous strict company. [url=]The[/url][o9] HR manager [url=]accept[/url][o10] these job candidates [url=]not only because they can endure hardships but also they can work much better[/url][o11] than the others as they have been trained strictly. In fact, although the tiring work time seems suffering, it will be a valuable experience in one’s life.

What's more, positive life style can make the endless task to be an enjoyable thing. According to some research results, the essence issue that decide whether one can live happily or not is not tired work. It is mainly decided by the states of mind. A person can enjoy every seconds on the condition that he or she can find happiness in daily tasks and try to make himself or herself happy, even without vacation time.

All in all, although it seems wonderful to choose some gravy jobs, the modern world has [url=]impel[/url][o12] us to adapt to some hard work and enjoy it. And what’s more, we can enjoy our lives better if we choose some heavy work.
总评：文章的用词还有待提高，不合适的地方比较多，很多有中文生硬直译的感觉。语法和用词都还需要改善。

[o1]Make?



[o2]这是动词或者名词，词性错误。



[o3]这是名词，形容词是不是好一些？



[o4]Time直接省略就好。



[o5]Seems to be？



[o6]能明白意思，但是后半句怎么看怎么别扭。。。直译的话就是：只要他们厌倦，他们就将远离收入？



[o7]Cannot,然后后面几个cannot省略就好。



[o8]Devote themselves to



[o9]这句话改成the reason why ……is that……比较好。



[o10]Accept



[o11]They can not only……but also……，这样比较好



[o12]Impelled

ppbboUID: 2537437

1 好像是对的 不知道错在哪里？
2-4   提的即是 佩服！！！
5 seems similar to  可以吗  seem可以作系动词吧？
6 free of 是不是不好~？
7 我是想强调  不知道可以不？
8 说得对
9 提醒的对 学习了~
10 managers accept   是不是不该用accept?
11 说得对
12 我没改出来  功底不够啊~

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3# ppbbo

你好~~不知道你几月考试,能不能QQ交流一下,我想建一个QQ上的作文交流小组,因为论坛交流不是很方便

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4# 177
我是十月底  你呢？