[求改]issue 131, 论证思路上感觉很局限，求指教~

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    每次写issue总觉得自己的观点就这些，再结合些例子写写就over了，最后感觉也挺单薄的，希望能提提意见吧！下面这篇文章可以一定程度上代表我目前的写作风格，如果看到语法错误也帮我纠一纠哈~ 对我的语法很不自信。。。

131. "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."

   In the course of history of human beings, the arts keep the development all the time. Some people including the speaker think that the hidden ideas and impulse of a society can be revealed by the arts. However, when it comes to me, the answer is not certain.

    It is sure possible that the art could reflect the ideas and impulses of a society in some sense. Because the lives and society at one time were un-ignorable resources for creating a piece of work of art, by the insightful looking into some social phenomenon, the ideas for creativity occur to the artists, which may mean the born of a great work of art. The Faust of Johann Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the greatest verse play, which reflect the desires and spirits of most people in the nineteen century in Europe, and the Guernica, a great piece of painting created by Picasso, which reflected the common people's real feelings and attitudes toward the war fire at that time, were the examples to confirm that the ideas and impulses of a society can be revealed by some arts.

    Nevertheless, not all arts that reflected the real situations of a society could be allowed to be created sometimes. In some despotic societies, in order to keep its domination, the governors may not want lives of people in affliction be recorded, thereby the art works that reveal the real ideas of the society may not be allowed to create. On the contrary, the pieces that reflect the distorted ideas such as the prosperity of society and the happiness of people were encouraged by the governor. Under this situation, some artist betrayed their heart and created their composition with a political goal in order to be prized or not to be punished. So from this kind of arts, how can the real ideas and the inpulse of the society be revealed?

    Furthermore, some substantial and particular notions of the artists would also be possible to be included in the works of some artists, which could not represent the ideas of society at that time. For example, the works of a great artist, Vincent Willem van Gogh, who was thought as an artist who left his time far beyond, were even not be recognized by most people at his time, not to say reflecting the ideas and impulses of that society, even Van Gogh was proved great years later. Apparently, these works could only express the ideas of the artists themselves and perhaps the opinion of the artists were quite different from the people at that time. So it is obvious that from these art works, we can see nothing about the ideas and the inpulses of the society.

    All in all, in order to know the real ideas and impulses of a society, only by the way of investigating the arts would one be possible to be misled, whether the arts reflect the ideas and impulses of the society or not greatly depends on the purpose and will of the artists.

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p1 hidden ideas&impulse可以通过arts 反映出来，但我不确定
p2正 可以反应社会ideas&impulse
p3艺术受到时局的限制，不可以反映真实的情况
p4艺术家不被认可，更不要说其作品能反映时局
p5只看艺术是不可以的，还要看艺术家的愿望和willing
大意是这样子的吧 首先看结构 很散 形散神也散 我说的很直啊 表介意啊
起码首尾应该概括其他的内容，这也是我今天才学到的。我看你的首段，answer到底指的什么，要不是我写过，我会会觉得很难奇怪。感觉你是想把首段一带而过，但又不想用太多花哨的模板。

其实思想都还是很到位的，但表达的颇有问题。就像人家看我的文不知我到底想说什么。我的问题就是太绕，你的问题倒不是绕，就是散。

例子什么的我觉得恰当就行，你还能想出那么多外国人的名字呢。我能品对的就没几个。主要是离子能够承载你的idea，让人读起来不觉得生硬。像vg那个我个人觉得有点不恰当。
TOPIC: ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."

Art, a vivid reflection of daily life, is everywhere and at anytime. It is a mirror to reflect reality, including revealing the concealed ideas, and in the meantime, expose impulses of the society unconsciously. Yet the major role lies in abstraction of explicit emotions and attitudes of folks.

Arts always serve as a tool to outlet one's inner feelings, usually outrageous and critical snarls, and it unconsciously represent the social hidden ideas and impulses. Many people suffer great pressure in a ever-smothering world, the speedy information high way, the overwhelming news, the endless conferences and etc, making them suffocated and gutless to confront. By various reasons, they cannot publicize their remonstrance aboveboard but psychologically need an approach to ventilate and catharsis, therefore, they choose art. We can come across many poses and cartoons embodied personal critiques and satirize on blogs, as a popular way to speak out one's deep voice. In some degree, arts free people living in the "closed wall" which is limited and refrained by laws and morality. Sometimes, when people want to live an abandoned life but they know they cannot as it conflicts with legal system, and ultimately, they resort to arts. Many masterworks are a tacit resist to the laws and regulations of that time like the Volga Boatmen, the three musketeers, destiny.
我水平有限，这一段写的挺精彩的，句子结构也错落有致，但有一个重要的问题，就是题目中是说艺术体现了，反映了…..但如果我没理解错的话，你在这一段中主要表达了人们用艺术的形式来表达内心不管是抱怨还是不满啥的，我觉得不是很切题，读完这一段只是让我感觉我可以用艺术来做这些事情，但艺术能不能反映社会理念和动力就不得而知了。

However, sometimes arts are not true voice of artists, so it can hardly mirror hidden social thoughts. As we know, scads of epics, annals, paintings are tasks performed by artists but imposed and created by authorities. They may come into being just out of someone's ostentation or self-abortion, instead a spontaneous reflection of the world. Like the Great Wall, a stupendous art, people gaped at its grand and spectacular outlook, and give compliments to Emperor Qin consequently, envisioning Qin dynasty was prosperous and blooming. But the hard and needy life of pariahs may overshadowed by Great Wall.

But arts do have its potential use in logging and abstracting explicit social ideas, which consists of civilization and is conducive for human beings having a better master of themselves. From stone to bronze, followed by emerald, iron and steel, it's an appreciable progress of human society, especially witnessing all these tools evacuated and showcased in a museum one by one. What's more, people begin to comment era by the arts belong to it. Experts draw conclusions of progress or stalemate of one time by analyzing its literature, music, paintings and etc. For instance, during the time of Renaissance, with the burst of idealisms and masterpieces, it stars in the galaxy of history as one of the fastest developing eras, in terms of art.

Art is a kind of tool, which can not only let off one's voice and emotion, but also keep down the vicissitudes of one's era. Whether it nurtures the ability to reveal the hidden ideas and impulses cannot be answered absolutely. It lies in the attitudes, status, and capacity of the artist, and sometimes, other elements should be taken into consideration, like authorities, power, social status. But as a whole, art is a ndispensable force to promote human civilization marching forward.
你从第三段开始就表述说艺术也不一定能反映社会理念和动力，但你的长城的例子我个人感觉正好违背了你的观点，正是通过长城我们不光看到了那些统治者想让后世传诵的丰功伟绩更看到了其中隐藏的人民的苦楚，这个例子正好支持了通过艺术作品可以发现隐藏的社会理念，这正好反了。
倒数第二段，我搞不太清楚这一段的目的，是要证明艺术还有其他作用吗，其实我觉得如果这一段写能揭示社会动力及理念的不只有艺术更为合适， 最后总结就可以说艺术在某些方面可以揭示社会动力以及理念，但有其局限性，比如说当艺术为当权者服务的时候，其就不再客观，只是一种工具，但我们还有很多的途径来了解隐藏在外表之下的社会理念和动力。
这只是我的想法，水平实在有限只能看到这里了，有什么不对我们再讨论哈～




In the course of history of human beings,in the course of human history,
the arts keep the development all the time这啥意思
艺术一直在发展？ the art keeps a lighting development这里用快速的发展不大合适吧？！形容technology比价好

Some people including the speaker think that the hidden ideas and impulse of a society can be revealed by the arts. However, when it comes to me, the answer is not certain.没有讲完，觉得是话中有话，具体answer什么，不清楚。
It is sure possible it is entirely possible that the art could can reflect the ideas and impulses of a society in some sense. Because the lives and society at one time were un-ignorable
?resource for creating a piece of work of art, by the an insightful looking into some social phenomenon a, the ideas for creativity occur to the artists, which may mean the born of a great work of art. The Faust of Johann Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the greatest verse play, which reflect the desires and spirits of most people in the nineteen century in Europe, 一句话一个句子就完了
例子和论据的关系总要多几句吧正说
反说
主观客观
总说
分说。。and the Guernica, a great piece of painting created by Picasso, which reflected the common people's realinner feelings and attitudes toward the war fire warfare at that time, were the examples to confirm that the ideas and impulses of a society can be revealed by some arts.

    Nevertheless, not all arts that reflected the real situations of a society could be allowed to be created sometimes. In some despotic societies, in order to keep its指的什么
是统治阶级为了捍卫自己的统治吗
还是别的什么 domination, the governors may not want lives of people in affliction be recorded, thereby the art works that reveal the real ideas of the society may not be allowed to create. On the contrary, the pieces that reflect the distorted ideas such as the prosperity of society and the happiness of people were encouraged by the governor. Under this situation, some artist betrayed their heart and created their compositions coerced by a political powerswith a political goal in order to be prized or not to evade from being be punished. So from this kind of arts, how can the real ideas and the inpulse of the
society be revealed?

Furthermore, some substantial and particular notions of the artists would also be possible to be included in the works of some artists, which could not represent the ideas of society at that time.some masterpieces may contain substantial and particular notions of the artists, but can not represent the ideas of society at that time For example, the works of a great artist, Vincent Willem van Gogh, who was thought as an artist who left his time far beyond, were even not be recognized by most people at his time, not to say reflecting the ideas and impulses of that society, 不被大多数人认识就不能反映社会脉动吗
那他反映的是什么，感觉不够贴切例子或者说你的逻辑还不足以让我信服。even Van Gogh was proved great years later. Apparently, these works could only express the ideas of the artists themselves and perhaps the opinion of the artists were quite different from the people at that time. So it is obvious that from these art works, we can see nothing about the ideas and the inpulses of the society.
    All in all, in order to know the real ideas and impulses of a society, only by the way of investigating the arts would one be possible to be misled, whether the arts reflect the ideas and impulses of the society or not greatly depends on the purpose and will of the artists.[其实结尾很有idea但前面都没有提到purpose and will of the artists.
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