Javen 8.17 作文

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Nowadays, both telephone and television have become the indispensable necessity of our daily life. However, I think telephone has more effects on us than television, which enhances our ability to communicate effectively with others and make the relationship between our relatives or friends and us much closer than ever before.

Firstly, telephone technology makes us to communicate efficiently with others. Because of this technology, we can easily access others when necessary. For me, when I want to discuss some questions I do not know very well with my friends and classmates. I just need to call him or her and set up a meeting time and place, and then we can meet each other and discuss my question in time. If there is something happened, my friends or classmates can not come for our date in time. He or she just needs to call me before the meeting time we made before. Telephone technology truly makes our life more convenient and efficient. However, television is only a kind of entertainment in our daily life.

Secondly, telephone technology makes us keep a great relationship with our relatives and friends. For instance, last year I got a chance to go to America to study there as an exchange student of my university. During this year, I did not feel alone at all. The most important reason is that telephone technology let me communicate with my parents and relatives and friends whenever I want. It really helps me to reduce my solitude. Even though I have some American friends, they can not know very well what I need in my spirit because of our different culture. What is more, on the New Year’s Eve, I call my relatives and friends to express my best wishes to them. No matter how long the distance between my relatives or friends and me, the telephone technology can transform distance into nothing.

In conclusion, even though telephone and television are both irreplaceable to our daily life, television is solely a means of entertainment. Telephone has a more heavy effect on our daily life.

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umichristinaUID: 2600819

Nowadays, both telephone and television have become the indispensable necessity of our daily life. However, I think telephone has more effects on us than television, which enhances our ability to communicate effectively with others and make the relationship between our relatives or friends and us much closer than ever before.9 j" l: a) \5 k9 u+ c

Firstly, telephone technology makes us to communicate efficiently with others. Because of this technology, we can easily access others when （if） necessary. For me（ for example）, when I want to discuss some questions I do not know very well （感觉有点重复）with my friends and classmates. I just need to call him or her and set up a meeting time and place, and then we can meet each other and discuss my question in time. If there is something happened, my friends or classmates can not come for our date in time（make it on time）. He or she just needs to call me before the meeting time we made before(有点多余). Telephone technology truly makes our life more convenient and efficient. However, television is only a kind of entertainment in our daily life.1 \! q! u( ^8 z- g0 ^

Secondly, telephone technology makes us keep a great relationship with our relatives and friends. For instance, last year I got a chance to go to America to study there as an exchange student of my university. During this（that） year, I did not feel alone at all. The most important reason is that telephone technology let(allows) me tocommunicate with my parents and(,) relatives and friends whenever I want to. It really helps me to reduce my solitude(loneliness是不是更好点，loneliness指的是feeling). Even though I have some American friends, they can not know very well what I need in my spirit because of our different cultures. What is more, on the New Year’s Eve, I call my relatives and friends to express my best wishes to them. No matter how long the distance between my relatives or friends and me, the telephone technology can transform distance into nothing（though there lies a distance of the pacific ocean between my family and I, telephone shortens our phycological distance and makes home a neatby place to me不知道是不是更好点）.

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In conclusion, even though telephone and television are both irreplaceable to our daily life, television is solely a means of entertainment. Telephone has a more heavy effect on our daily life.
文章逻辑很清晰，例子也都很贴近生活，

umichristinaUID: 2600819

我看到你给我修改的文章，改的很仔细，很认真，说的问题也很对，我的文章逻辑确实有问题，谢谢你的批改