issue5

happyman2000UID: 136936

Issue 5 "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."

Syllabus:  a well-organized education should have both general curriculum and selective courses.
   1, the ever-increasing general knowledge today makes it possible and necessary to set up a general curriculum that all students are obliged to study in a national level.
  2, the permission to freely arrange courses will lead to serious consequences.
3,general curriculum is helpful to guarantee the standards of education in different schools and districts of a nation.
  4, overemphasizing the general knowledge and general curriculum will hamper the healthy and full development of individual personalities


Confronted with the higher and higher requirements upon students before colleges for surviving in this intensely competitive society, a qualified education must surely provide its students with both general curriculum and elective courses.
In the first place, the ever-increasing amount of general knowledge today makes it necessary and possible to set up a general curriculum that all students in a national level are obliged to study. A significant consequence of rapid progress of science and technology is that, more and more knowledge has become so common and so general that anybody who failed to master it would run the risk of being called as “modern illiterate”. That is, although a person has the ability to write and read, being short of basic knowledge which is rudimental and necessary for higher education or going work, he still couldn’t get along with this high-technology society well. Given that this general knowledge should be learned and acquired by all the modern people, of course, it is quite reasonable to set up a general curriculum and require all the students to comply with it, whether they are willing or not.
If a nation permits its schools or regional governments to freely arrange their academic courses, out of many practical concerns such as shortage of teachers or educational apparatus, or even students’ disliking to a certain course, some critical general knowledge would possibly fail to be taught to students. As a result, these students will spend far much more time to make up for the loss than it should have been, and probably some of students will permanently lose the opportunity of obtaining this knowledge.
Moreover, the general curriculum is helpful to guarantee the quality of education in different schools and different districts of a nation. The same courses make it possible to set up general standards of educational quality, according to which, governments or social medium organizations could conveniently evaluate the quality of different schools or individual students. Simply put, if two person are doing the completely different things, how can one determine who is more efficient? Therefore, the general curriculum is able to act as a benchmark through which incompetent school would be eliminated, excellent students could be encouraged, and then a higher quality in education would be attained as a result of competitive. In western society, many people are puzzled over the high-qualified basic education in some Asian counties with their comparatively poor infrastructures. In fact, the secret of the Asian counties is simply that they designated their general curriculum all along and firmly enforced it.
However, despite its great necessity and importance of the general knowledge and the general curriculum, overemphasizing them and de-emphasizing the selective courses will contrarily hamper the healthy and full development of individual personalities. As is often pointed out, the best teacher is the interest. But, different people have different virtues and interests. It is really difficult for anyone to make success in which he is completely not interested, for finding no enjoys and encourages from it. If Einstein were forced to undertake polity, for instance, maybe he would never achieve what he had done as a physicist; Similarly, if the ex-president of America, Bill Clinton, were obliged to assume the that Einstein’s cause, surely he would not acquire the equal glorifies forever. In this sense, a qualified and well-organized education system must permit certain extent of freedom from which individuals have the opportunity to freely select some courses that they favor.      
In conclusion, the general curriculum ensures the students’ acquiring general knowledge by providing them the same courses and the same educational standards, while selective courses make possible the full development of individual’s free personalities. None of them should be neglected by a high-qualified education. (618 words)

suxieUID: 136748

Issue 5 "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."

Syllabus: a well-organized education should have both general curriculum and selective courses.
1, the ever-increasing general knowledge today makes it possible and necessary to set up a general curriculum that all students are obliged to study in a national level.
2, the permission to freely arrange courses will lead to serious consequences.
3,general curriculum is helpful to guarantee the standards of education in different schools and districts of a nation.
4, overemphasizing the general knowledge and general curriculum will hamper the healthy and full development of individual personalities


Confronted with the higher and higher requirements upon students before colleges for surviving in this intensely competitive society, a qualified education(指是题目里所说的进入大学前的教育么) must surely provide its students with both general curriculum and elective courses.
In the first place, the ever-increasing amount of general knowledge today makes it necessary and possible to set up a general curriculum that all students in a national level are obliged to study. A significant consequence of rapid progress of science and technology is that, more and more knowledge has become so common and so general that anybody who failed to master it would run the risk of being called as “modern illiterate”. That is, although a person has the ability to write and read, being short of basic knowledge which is rudimental and necessary for higher education or going work, he still couldn’t get along with this high-technology society well. Given that this general knowledge should be learned and acquired by all the modern people, of course, it is quite reasonable to set up a general curriculum and require all the students to comply with it, whether they are willing or not.（general curriculum是打基础）
If a nation permits its schools or regional governments to freely arrange their academic courses, out of many practical concerns such as shortage of teachers or educational apparatus, or even students’ disliking to a certain course, some critical general knowledge would possibly fail to be taught to students. As a result, these students will spend far much more time to make up for the loss than it should have been, and probably some of students will permanently lose the opportunity of obtaining this knowledge. 和上一段意思差不多吧
Moreover, the general curriculum is helpful to guarantee the quality of education in different schools and different districts of a nation. The same courses make it possible to set up general standards of educational quality, according to which, governments or social medium organizations could conveniently evaluate the quality of different schools or individual students. Simply put, if two person are doing the completely different things, how can one determine who is more efficient? Therefore, the general curriculum is able to act as a benchmark through which incompetent school would be eliminated, excellent students could be encouraged, and then a higher quality in education would be attained as a result of competitive. In western society, many people are puzzled over the high-qualified basic education in some Asian counties with their comparatively poor infrastructures. In fact, the secret of the Asian counties is simply that they designated their general curriculum all along and firmly enforced it. 总觉得这个观点的例子不够具体。
However, despite its great necessity and importance of the general knowledge and the general curriculum, overemphasizing them and de-emphasizing the selective courses will contrarily hamper the healthy and full development of individual personalities. As is often pointed out, the best teacher is the interest（觉得怪怪的，是chinglish么）. But, different（换别的词吧，如various等） people have different virtues and interests. It is really difficult for anyone to make success in which he is completely not interested, for finding no enjoys and encourages from it. If Einstein were forced to undertake polity, for instance, maybe he would never achieve what he had done as a physicist; Similarly, if the ex-president of America, Bill Clinton, were obliged to assume the that Einstein’s cause, surely he would not acquire the equal glorifies forever. In this sense, a qualified and well-organized education system must permit certain extent of freedom from which individuals have the opportunity to freely select some courses that they favor.
In conclusion, the general curriculum ensures the students’ acquiring general knowledge by providing them the same courses and the same educational standards, while selective courses make possible the full development of individual’s free personalities. None（neither?） of them should be neglected by a high-qualified education. (618 words)
我也是新手，看的范文比较少，因此对一些地道的讲法not sure，但是结合我自己的写作经验提点建议：
我觉得你写的结构比较清楚，但是语言不够精炼，我自己写怕字数不够也是一个意思反复讲，这样并不利用降道理说清，还会暴露出词汇量太少的弱点；
其它我能指出的也就一些语法错误了，但愿对你有帮助

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感谢susie的参与！