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8.31独立   
At present, many parents are trying to determine their children's future themselves. They insist that they themselves, as the older generation, have experienced more things than their kids, and thus are more likely to design a "perfect" future for them. However, I strongly oppose that point of view. As far as I am concerned, parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than prearrange a so-called "perfect" or "correct" future for them.

First of all, parents, grown up in a society quite different from now when their children are growing, what they deem correct or proper might turn out to be a mistake in their children's eyes or vice versa. For instance, parents may take it for granted that children should study hard to achieve a higher mark, then enter a well-known university and receive a highly-paid job offer after graduation. That's the only way to success. While their children hope to explore more other approaches to success which is defined differently from their parents'. On the contrary, what the children consider common might seem unreasonable from their parents' perspective. Nowadays, the youth will change their jobs frequently if they think the current job isn't suitable for their future career. However, their parents, having stuck to a certain job for decades, tend to take this phenomenon incomprehensible or simply odd. What makes the gap of concept even larger is the fast development of information technology, some parents, having difficulty keeping up with this tendency, often fail to think in their children's interest even if they attempt to.

Furthermore, children should be given a chance to learn to make their own choices independently. It is children's right which no one can deprive of. If parents determine everything for children, an obvious result is that these young people eventually lose the ability of independent thinking. They may end up feeling confused about which to select before so many choices. One undeniable fact is parents will get old one day when they need their children to care for them and make decisions for them. How can we rely on such a group of youngsters, who cannot even decide for themselves, to decide for their parents?

With the reasons listed above, I am convinced that parents should allow their children to determine their own future instead of making decisions for them. Even though all parents are anxious for the success of their children, one fact that they should be aware of is success is mainly earned by children's own effort, but never is prearranged by parents.
   

dukenuneeUID: 2859326

水平有限，个人意见，莫怪莫怪。

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谢谢2楼！

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1# dreamdpt

如果 楼主您能整个附件 就太好了哈  

At present, many parents are trying to determine their children's future themselves. They insist that they themselves, as the older generation, have experienced more things<中国式英语> than their kids, and thus are more likely to design a "perfect" future for them. However, I strongly oppose that point of view. As far as I am concerned, parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than prearrange a so-called "perfect" or "correct" future for them.

First of all, parents, grown up in a society quite different from now when their children are growing, what they deem correct or proper might turn out to be a mistake in their children's eyes or vice versa. For instance, parents may take it for granted that children should study hard to achieve a higher mark, then enter a well-known university and receive a highly-paid job offer after graduation. That's the only way to success. While their children hope to explore more other approaches to success which is defined differently from their parents'. On the contrary, what the children consider common might seem unreasonable from their parents' perspective. Nowadays, the youth will change their jobs frequently if they think the current job isn't suitable for their future career. However, their parents, having stuck to a certain job for decades, tend to take this phenomenon incomprehensible or simply odd. What makes the gap of concept even larger is the fast development of information technology, some parents, having difficulty keeping up with this tendency, often fail to think in their children's interest even if they attempt to.
我水平有限, 但是我觉得 您这段说的忒绕了. on the countrary前后其实说的是一个内容没有区别 还是来点实际的例子 哪怕是编的

Furthermore, children should be given a chance to learn to make their own choices independently. It is children's right which no one can deprive of. If parents determine everything for children, an obvious result is that these young people eventually lose the ability of independent thinking. They may end up feeling confused about which to select before so many choices. One undeniable fact is parents will get old one day when they need their children to care for them and make decisions for them. How can we rely on such a group of youngsters, who cannot even decide for themselves, to decide for their parents?
嗯 这段说的挺好的

With the reasons listed above, I am convinced that parents should allow their children to determine their own future instead of making decisions for them. Even though all parents are anxious for the success of their children, one fact that they should be aware of is success is mainly earned by children's own effort, but never is prearranged by parents.

觉得其实作者功底应该不错的
但是议论部分稍显weak 和 not convincing了
我觉得写作文 要么不说 要么就说到点子上 这个就是 八股文

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谢谢！
其实我也想附件，但是初来乍到，积分不够。 4# longxue26

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9.2 独立
一拿到这题目就觉得很纠结，不知道选哪一方。找理由就找了半天。。。。结果写出来还是觉得有很多问题，大家很拍吧！
It has been widely debated as to whether the government should spend money on art museums and concert halls or recreational facilities like swimming pools and playgrounds. While some people place a higher value on the former, I regard the two as equally important.

Nowadays, art museums and concert halls are gaining in popularity in cities. A multitude of urban inhabitants choose to enjoy concerts to spend their spare time rather than just watch TV at home now. In their eyes, the experiences at an art museum or a concert hall are really amazing and impressive, which can not be provided by reading books or watching videos. By looking at miscellaneous delicate exhibits at such a close distance, museum visitors can really feel the beauty of arts; by listening to the music without any disturbance, audience of a concert will truly be absorbed in the euphonic sound. Besides, the building of art museums will make the city more attractive to travelers. The museums and concert halls, if presenting the local art and music forms, are a desirable way to make the city known to more people.

While at the same time, the significance of recreational facilities also cannot be neglected. With the improvement of living standard, people today are unprecedentedly concerned about their own physical health. Exercising regularly has been a habit of increasing citizens. Elder residents do exercise on the playground every morning; students participate in all kinds of sports from basketball to table tennis; adults go to gyms every weekend to keep themselves fit. There is a great demand for a series of highly equipped and accessible sports facilities in modern cities.

With those reasons above, it really seems hard to decide which, between art museums or concert halls and recreational facilities like swimming pools is more crucial to our society and thus deserves more money from the government. In the developing countries, the demand for a gorgeous art museum or concert hall seems to be not so great. Hence, the building of a swimming pool might be a more preferable choice. Nevertheless, in the highly developed areas, where art and music appeal to a large number of citizens, the government should spend more money on the construction of an art museum or concert hall.

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6# dreamdpt

您可以去灌水 就能填附件了. 到时候我也能改的专业点

It has been widely debated as to whether the government should spend money on art museums and concert halls or recreational facilities like swimming pools and playgrounds. While some people place a higher value on the former, I regard the two as equally important. come on, 貌似这样写不行啊.. 中庸的观点. 我之前写的就是中立 昨天都重写了

Nowadays, art museums and concert halls are gaining in popularity in cities. A multitude of urban inhabitants choose to enjoy concerts to spend their spare time rather than just watch TV at home now. In their eyes, the experiences at an art museum or a concert hall are really amazing and impressive, which can not be provided by reading books or watching videos. By looking at miscellaneous啥意思?? delicate exhibits at such a close distance, museum visitors can really feel the beauty of arts; by listening to the music without any disturbance, audience of a concert will truly be absorbed in the euphonic sound. Besides, the building of art museums will make the city more attractive to travelers. The museums and concert halls, if presenting the local art and music forms, are a desirable way to make the city known to more people.

While at the same time, the significance of recreational facilities also cannot be neglected. With the improvement of living standard, people today are unprecedentedly concerned about their own physical health. Exercising regularly has been a habit of increasing citizens. Elder residents do exercise on the playground every morning; students participate in all kinds of sports from basketball to table tennis; adults go to gyms every weekend to keep themselves fit. There is a great demand for a series of highly equipped and accessible sports facilities in modern cities.

With those reasons above, it really seems hard to decide which, between art museums or concert halls and recreational facilities like swimming pools is more crucial to our society and thus deserves more money from the government. In the developing countries, the demand for a gorgeous art museum or concert hall seems to be not so great. Hence, the building of a swimming pool might be a more preferable choice. Nevertheless, in the highly developed areas, where art and music appeal to a large number of citizens, the government should spend more money on the construction of an art museum or concert hall.

作者的功底还是蛮好的  但是 agree 和 disagree 的问题应该还是来个你死我活

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7# longxue26
嗯，谢谢！下次一定用附件交了！

dandan17UID: 2812933

今天才发现昨天写成9.1的文章了。你又没写9.1的文章。等明天我写完9.2这篇再改你的可以吗？
多多包涵哈~
还有9.1的这篇你也写写吧。挺好的题，写完跟你讨论哈。我写的有问题，还要重写。

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9# dandan17
嗯，没事的
我最近是隔天写。呵呵，有点颓废。发现我每次写都很慢，至少一个小时，多则两个小时。一天一篇是实在是有点。。。（见笑了）
不过既然您推荐，那我还是写写看吧。
初来寄托，还望前辈指点！:)

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我也晚了，sorry 9.2 dreamdpt.doc (28 KB, 下载次数: 3)

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请大家多多指教！

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12# dreamdpt
请查收 我真不知道这个附件能不能传上来

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收到了，谢谢！ 13# jjooyy

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9.8 independent