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In 20 years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.


Is it justifiable to assert that in twenty years, much less cars will be in use than today? To some people, the answer is "Exactly". Yet, in my view, I can not totally agree with this claim, since there are still some possibilities that the traditional cars would be improved to the extent that can be continually used in the future.


It is true that, in the future there would probably be new types of vehicles that replace nowadays cars. After all, there are many drawbacks of traditional cars. For example, the fuel they need, namely, the fossil energy, would possibly be exhausted sooner or later, especially if modern people keep on regard these energy as their major power. What is worse, the greenhouse gases resulted from the fossil fuels would do harm to our environment as well. Fortunately, however, owing to technological as well as scientific development, new ways of transportation with new sort of energy, like special planes with solar energy, as I imagine, may be introduced and embraced by human beings. Therefore, the popularity of today's cars might be declined.


However, as people are progressive creatures, they would not likely ignore that fact- many people have realized that the crisis of conventional energy will definitely occur, if they can not find other alternative energy. What is more important is that with the new discovered energy, manufactures would not allow their product, their cars, to be easily replaced by their potential competitors, the new types of vehicles. In another word, these companies, compelled by the possible enemies of their business, would have no choice but to make their cars improved with new type of energy. For example, at present in China, there are increasing trend in car industry, that a new type of car with magnetic power, or solar energy, as the “fuel” of the car's engine, has been introduced through the nation. These new cars are becoming increasingly popular, as they not only meet the customers' demand that they want an alternative power for their cars, but also satisfy their mental need that the car is the symbol of vehicle, which means that to these customers, cars are the No.1 choice as their transportation tool.


Besides, although it is indeed disappointing that one day the fossil energy would be probably used up, these cars companies may not abandon their traditional products easily. They still have other choices. For instance, they could just improve the efficiency of their cars' use of fuels. In this way, traditional cars are still accessible for many customers. Thus, traditional cars would possibly not disappear in such a shifting speed of twenty years.


In sum, I admit that in some day cars would be replaced by other more advanced vehicles. But I believe that as a major transportation tool for hundreds of years, it will still serve people for more than 20 years.

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The lecturer completely refutes all of these three assumptions that what the Chaco Canyon was used for, no matter for dwelling, storing or ceremonial ritual.
很好的耶~学习~

First, the reading material indicates that the Chaco Canyon was used for residing since it had a similar structure as famous "apartment buildings" at Taos, New Mexico. However, the speaker argues that in the large "apartment places" there were few fir(e) places, which were the significant feature of dwelling place.

Subsequently, the professor goes on to refutes the statement in the third paragraph (part of passage) (可以直接说第几段？) that the Chaco Canyon was used for storing food, probably maize. On the other hand, the speaker indicates that it lack of any relic of containers for storing, in that case, these places would not be used to maintain crops.

Finally, contrary to the assumption in the passage that the Chaco Canyon was used for ceremonial reason since there were a lot of broken pots, which are always used for ceremonial ritual. The speaker in the lecture introduces us evidence that, in these houses, archeologists also have found some other building materials, such as sand, stone or other something,(or other something就不用了吧。。。) all of those cannot be used for ceremonial ritual. Furturemore, the professor points out that the broken pots probably used for storing meal or some(t)hing.（这里最好说明教授认为broken pots只是垃圾。）

文章很不错，语句流畅，有点小的拼写错误。阅读和听力的比例也可以。
很好~学习啦~

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2010年2月13日---Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
In a cooperation of team, the people who cannot accept criticize couldn’t be successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea。

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O(∩_∩)O谢谢你改了我的作文~




题目：ISSUE31 - 10年2月13日---Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
In a cooperation of team, the people who cannot accept criticize couldn’t be successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea。
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日期：2011-7-14

Does the membership（member） who cannot accept criticize in a cooperation team will（两个系动词了，去掉其中一个？） not get success, as the speaker claims? Perhaps some people might agree with this opinion, but others would have a negative attitude,
and I will probably always be one of them（which one?）. As far as I am concerned, this question is a much disputed one, we should not take any assertion before we taking（take） a glance at the both sides of the argument.

Gnerally speaking, it is quite easy for ordinary people to support that people could not be successful if they cannot accept criticize for the reason that all people have self respect(不太理解这句话是什么意思==“因为大家都有自尊心，所以普通人支持不能接受批评的人不会成功”感觉逻辑关系上缺了一环，“自尊心强的人不易接受批评，同时他们也不易成功”置换一下概念). They would argue that if people are frustrated by other's criticize, they will loss the confidence and motivation to move on. To be frank, it is true that people cannot achieve any feat if there is no intention to incite them to keep moving.

However, in the meantime, although the criticize has a such remarkable negative effect to（on） people, striking down their self-confidence, but the positive influence also cannot be underestimated; in other words, the negative effect is overstated（缺点和优点不是归一山不容二虎的关系，他们可以都强，比如有很多治疗癌症的药物有很强烈的效果但也有很严重的副作用~）, and if we notice the invisible benefits of criticize, we would understand the question more deeply.（这里的态度和句首态度不太一样吖，句首是观望，到这里就变成倒向一方了，然后被倒向的这一方究竟有什么好处还没有被说明。在没有完全讨论的基础上倒向一方只能证明作者从一开始就是支持后面这个的，那么开头那句话就没有意义了吖，理由虽然写了很多，但却是看到这句话的一瞬间想到的，很明显的倾向感） Here I will explain a few of （感觉有点怪，of是表示许多中的某些还是误笔呢？）most importan reasons.

One principal argument the people who opposes the theory that no success will be gotten if people could not accept criticize might cite has to do with the revising program. They would argue that with the criticize, the members could find team's defects or shortcomes of their project, then they could revise it in the later operation. （还是觉得逻辑上少了一环）Any people, with proper intelligence, would confees that without recognizing the weak points, no one could achieve success at the end.

Furthermore, another equivalent compelling reason for opponents to disagree with the author's assertion is that criticize would encourage people to pay more attention and effort into work. Indeed, facing with other's criticize, people will feel ashamed, and then they would try hard to do better to prevent frustration.这个理由很不错呀~能扩展一下就好了~

To sum up, from what was discussed above, we could finally draw the conclusion that although criticize might have a negative effect to（on） people, the person who cannot accept criticize also could achieve success as well.

我觉得你的文章结构都很复杂吖，其实如果到后期字数能上去，对每个部分都有详尽而富有逻辑的阐述，肯定会有好成绩的~
不像我脑袋里只有两个理由，不够再让步一下......
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