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As an old saying, life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you will get. Therefore， it is inevitable for common people to encounter variety of frustration during their daily life. Some people contend that to keep a happy and optimistic mood is beneficial for them to get though those tough things and even more important than achieving success. Others, however, take an opposite view and argue that it not always useful for people who catch in that case.As far as I concern, I can not agree with the former view any more for several reasons as follows.

Admittedly, on one hand, it does have some significant effect for us to live our lives with positive and optimistic attitude, when we get pay by our several year’ hard work and eventually carve out the way to success. On the other hand, it also bring about some side-effect, such as make us easily form some bad habits of pride and indolence, which will prevent us keep going to achieve further success.

Nevertheless, people who equip with good state of mind will more easily overcome the difficulty they meet in their daily life, which is definitely essential for their whole lifetime. On the contrary, if someone who lacks of those equalities mentioned above, he will easily lose his life goals, insolate himself form others and even do some harmful things to our society. For instance, several years ago, a university student in YunNan province killed his roommate just for his outrages of having quarrel with his classmates.

In addition, Optimistic people will not care much about their failure that frequently happen in one’s daily life. They will cheer up themselves and learn lessons from past loss to avoid confronting it again. A good case in hand is the most famous American inventor Tomas Edison, who had thousands of patents during his life time, he had tried almost all the material he could find and did countless experiments to finally invent the lamp which facilitate our life in a large extent.

Take above discussed, we will safely draw into conclusion that it natural for human beings to feel happy and cheerful when they make success and it more important for us to keep a good state of mind when we meet obstacles and failure.

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Nowadays, with the great promotion of the society,(with de great promotion of the society好像没有这种搭配吧,至少好像我没有看到) the people’s life pace are greatly accelerated that lead (to) increase(increasing) number of person to feel (feeling) stressful about their lives. The overwhelming majority of people contend the best way for us to get rid of the feeling of anxiety is to stay alone with no one else to bother us. Others including me, however, take the opposite view and assume that several ways, such as have fun with family and friends and visit doctor, may have a better effect to resolve the problem.(effect in doing sth)

Admittedly, spending time alone is one of the best ways to relieve ourselves, especially in the condition that we need calm down ourselves and have to face with(with去掉) something of our own. For instance, (when) some one meet a difficult math problem, he can(need to,表达他必须在一定时间内完成) fix it in a short period. A quiet atmosphere may beneficial for him to deal with it.

Nevertheless, a great number of things can count for the reasons of person’s stress, hence spending time alone does(is) not always useful to help us deal with the feeling of angst, even would exert unfavorable impact on our mental health. Our parents and friend can give us a hand and help us get though (through) those tough things(problems) we meet in our daily life. Take me for example, when I was a freshman, I could not acclimate myself to the university life well and had a bad mood about this. My parents continued encouraging me and roommate often give me some useful tips. Now I feel enjoyable about my campus life

In addition, having a conversation with a psychological doctor is also an effective way to relieve our mental burden. Just image one encounter some misfortunes, for example, one of his/her relatives passed away which may be a big strike for him/her and is not easily to tackle down by other means. In this condition, one receiving some psychological therapies provided by doctor in corresponding field will definitely have a more satisfying result to relieve that issue." n2 C( ?  x) v. f+ H
Take above mentioned, we may safely take into conclusion that several methods can be choose to handle the stressful problems we suffer from our daily life besides spending time alone.
个人感觉文笔虽花但是有很多语病
文章的结构可以,正2反1型的
结尾段少了点
每段尾最好加一句总结的句子再次申明下自己的观点

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As an old saying, life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you will get. 【用的好】Therefore it is inevitable for common people to encounter variety of frustration during their daily life. Some people contend that to keep a happy and optimistic mood is beneficial for them to get though those tough things and even more important than achieving success. Others, however, take an opposite view and argue that it not always useful for people who catch in that case. As far as I concern, I can not agree with the former view any more for several reasons as follows.

Admittedly, on one hand, it does have some significant effect for us to live our lives with positive and optimistic attitude, when we get pay by our several year’ hard work and eventually carve out the way to success. On the other hand, it also bring about some side-effect, such as make us easily form some bad habits of pride and indolence, which will prevent us keep going to achieve further success.

Nevertheless, people who equip with good state of mind will more easily overcome the difficulty they meet in their daily life, which is definitely essential for their whole lifetime. On the contrary, if someone who lacks of those equalities mentioned above, he will easily lose his life goals, insolate himself form others and even do some harmful things to our society. For instance, several years ago, a university student in YunNan province killed his roommate just for his outrages of having quarrel with his classmates、

In addition, Optimistic people will not care much about their failure that frequently happen in one’s daily life. They will cheer up themselves and learn lessons from past loss to avoid confronting it again. A good case in hand is the most famous American inventor Tomas Edison, who had thousands of patents during his life time, he had tried almost all the material he could find and did countless experiments to finally invent the lamp which facilitate our life in a large extent. 这个例子和你说的有什么关系？

Take above discussed, we will safely draw into conclusion that it natural for human beings to feel happy and cheerful when they make success and it more important for us to keep a good state of mind when we meet obstacles and failure.

第三段例子好像没有说完吧？句子表达没有问题。值得学习。
题目是Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success
你要选择其中之一啊， 没有看到你选了， 而是另有一个观点

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Nowadays, politics plays a vital role in our common people’ daily lives. The overwhelming majority of persons assume that it is indispensable to teach teenagers some political knowledge in the form of let student realize teachers’ political position. Others including me, however, take an opposite view and contend that it is difficult to distinguish right from wrong, especially in some political or social events, in a short period.
Admittedly, students need to acquire several political and social knowledge to culture themselves critical thinking. Teachers can help them develop those qualities by offer youngster their own standpoint about certain political or social event and conduct some discussion about it to encouraging students to express their opinions. Nevertheless, in my view the advantages mentioned above are outweighed by the disadvantage it brings about.
Firstly, almost every political and social incident has some deep reasons which are not easily discovered by common people. Without unbreakable testimony, it is impetuous for us to make a comment about those events. Therefore, it will exert negative effect on students which would prevent them foster the ability of objective analyzing. In addition, students will just accept teachers’ views instead of form their own thought.
Secondly, teacher showing their political attitude in class may stimulate tension between teenagers. What is worse, it may also impair teachers’ authority in students’ heart. For instance, each youngster grows up in a relatively different culture and background. It is no denying to say that their views about certain issue are varied. It is hard to judge which view is more convincing. Therefore, what promote teacher do is conduct teenager to think the issue on the standpoint of others rather than show their own opinion.
Take what have discussed above, it does have some merits for teacher to express their own idea about social or political views. Due to its drawbacks bring along, we can safely draw the conclusion that teachers should not show their social or political views in the classroom.

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In contemporary society, with the promotion of science and technology, advent of computer and other devices do exert far-reaching impact on students’ reading custom. Some researches show increasing number of teenager use less time on reading books compare to the counterpart of the past. Therefore, some people assume that students will not read material printed on paper in the future. Others including me take an opposite view about this issue for several reasons as follows.

Admittedly, traditional way of reading has going though a tough time with the invention of computer and reading machine which facilitate students’ daily lives in a large extent. We can easily get access to a variety of information we need by way of searching on the internet. It greatly relieves us from tedious manual work of looking up in the library to find certain books we acquire. However, printed books will still play a dispensable role in our learning period.

First, using printed books is the most effective way for teenagers to learn knowledge they need for their future career. A book only contain the knowledge in certain field that will enable us to form a deep understanding about certain subject we want to study and help us concentrate on them without distracting by other things. In contrast, internet is filled with a large mount of things which are relatively difficult for students to distinguish useful information from useless ones.

In addition, there are some important knowledge and technology which we can not find by other means. Only by looking up books, can we find these things we need. It is no denying to say that the history of using paper to memorize ancient people’s great thought has last thousands of years. That is to say, if we want to apply those knowledge to solve our problems today, the best way is to look up these old paper heritages given by our ancestor.

Take above mentioned into consideration, it is delightful for students to apply internet and other reading devices to facilitate their learning. However, we can not neglect the affect of printed books that bring to our students. Therefore, we can safely draw a conclusion that books will still exert a magnificent influence in the future.

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