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songyxUID: 118533

Too much emphasis has been placed on the need for students to challenge the assertions of others so that they can learn to criticize the views of others. In fact, the ability to compromise and work with others-that is, the ability to achieve social harmony-should be a major goal in every school.


Syllabus: disagree. 应该有质疑的精神，同时也要学会work with others.
1.        the spirit of inquiry is part and parcel to one’s ：列举重要性
2.        在科学面前不应该compromise:列举
3.        at the same time, should learn to work with others: 列举
4.        结论

The issue above-whether should we encourage students to challenge other’s assertion, or cultivate their ability to compromise and work with others- in character is one about the necessity of the spirit of inquiry. As a matter of fact, the spirit of inquiry is part and parcel to us to such an extent that it is indispensable not only for the progress of an individual but also for the society.

The spirit of inquiry, that is, to challenge the idea or view of others, is an important kind of quality that an individual, especially a scientist should have, because its advantages on adding our knowledge and improving our level of knowing the world. As is so often pointed out, we could learn more through those whose views different with ours. But have you ever think of the reason? It might be that people equipped with the spirit of inquiry would strongly inquire the validity of the different views of others, and then would try his/her best to search the causes. The process-from the start of inquiry to finding out the causes-would greatly expand our scope of knowledge if the result is that the view of others is right. However, we would also benefit a lot if we find the flaws with others, because the process of inquiry is one of improving our knowing of the subject, and your knowledge is added since you have the ability to prove others are wrong, right? Indisputably, it might be this spirit that equipped man to find discoveries one after another, and thus advance our society.

Contrary to the spirit of inquiry, to compromise whenever a different view or idea emerges is so dangerous that no progress might be achieved. Because the fact that you are always preparing to accept others’ views without inquiring the validity of them would prevent you from finding the truth: which one is right, or both are right. And as a result, your level of knowledge would not exceed that of others, not to mention the progress which might to be achieved through inquiry, since you fall short of the impetus which might inspire you to discover the truth, which, in turn, would motivate you forward.

Admittedly, we should have the ability to learn to work with others. In such an era filled with numerous information and ever-growing knowledge, it might be difficult for one to accomplish some task, which might be possible ago. The construction of a ship, for example, is complex to such an extent that numerous works of various kinds are required. And every individual is crucial to the accomplishment of the task, since the whole is composed of the work done by every individual. In such cases, the ability to work with others is necessary especially for the leader in order to hold people together to achieve the goal. But to work with others does not mean to compromise with others, because there are method of various kinds you could take apart from compromise.

In sum, much emphasis should be paid on the cultivation of the spirit of inquiry for students because of the great advantage above it has and benefit students might get, and resolutely object to the behavior of compromising, which, however, does not have the same meaning of learning with others. After all, making progress is our final goal no matter what conflict or unhappy might cause.(564)

天地无用UID: 112318

这个题目跟偶刚写过的题目好像哦,说一下我的对于这个题目看法吧.
我觉得这个题目应该这么理解:
学校太强调教学生怎么质疑他人的主张。实际上，培养折衷和与他人合作的
能力，也就是促进社会和谐的能力应该被作为每个学校的主要目标。
我觉得题目并没有说质疑他人的主张不好,只是说,作为a major goal ,作为主要的目标,应该是 the ability to compromise and work with others.展开分析的重点应该是两者相比较的后者,也就是ability to achieve social harmony.
你的三段论证中,从长度看第一段应该是重点,重点说明了the spirit of inquiry is part and parcel. 我觉得你话这么大力气强调了一个题目中并没有否认的事实,有点划不来阿.
总的说就是题目的切入点应该在想想,你说呢.
拙见,
参考.

songyxUID: 118533

我有仔细看了一下题目
感觉到审题确实存在问题
主要当时写的太着急了
没有认真想好
看来以后的注意了
谢谢你！！！！

天地无用UID: 112318

It is my pleasure.

suxieUID: 136748

The issue above-whether should we encourage students to challenge
other's assertion, or cultivate their ability to compromise and work
with others- in character is one about the necessity of the spirit of
inquiry. As a matter of fact, the spirit of inquiry is part and parcel
to us to such an extent that it is indispensable not only for the
progress of an individual but also for the society.

The spirit of inquiry, that is, to challenge the idea or view of others,
is an important kind of quality that an individual, especially a
scientist should have, because its advantages on adding our knowledge
and improving our level of knowing the world. As is so often pointed
out, we could learn more through those whose views different with ours.
But have you ever think of the reason? It might be that people equipped
with the spirit of inquiry would strongly inquire the validity of the
different views of others, and then would try his/her best to search the
causes. The process-from the start of inquiry to finding out the
causes-would greatly expand our scope of knowledge if (the result is that)可以省略吧
the view of others is right. However, we would also benefit a lot if we
find the flaws with（of？） others, because the process of inquiry is one of
improving our knowing of the subject, and your knowledge is added
since you have the ability to prove others are wrong, right?
Indisputably, it might be this（a？） spirit that equipped man to find
discoveries one after another（discover one thing to another）, and thus advance(什么是主语？) our society.

Contrary to the spirit of inquiry, to compromise whenever a different
view or idea emerges is so dangerous that no progress might be achieved.
Because the fact that you are always preparing to accept others'
views without inquiring the validity of them would prevent you from
finding the truth: which one is right, or both are right. And as a
result, your level of knowledge would not exceed that of others, not
to mention the progress which might to be achieved through inquiry,
since you fall short of the impetus which might inspire you to
discover the truth, which, in turn, would motivate you forward.

Admittedly, we should have the ability to learn to work with others.
In such an era filled with numerous information and ever-growing
knowledge, it might be difficult for one to accomplish some task,
which might be possible ago（before?）. The construction of a ship, for example, is
complex to such an extent that numerous works of various kinds are
required. And every individual is crucial to the accomplishment of the
task, since the whole is composed of the work done by every individual.
In such cases, the ability to work with others is necessary
especially for the leader in order to hold people together to achieve
the goal. But to work with others does not mean to compromise with
others, because there are method of various kinds you could take apart
from compromise.

In sum, much emphasis should be paid on the cultivation of the spirit of
inquiry for students because of the great advantage above it has and
benefit students might get, and resolutely object(s) to the behavior of
compromising, which, however, does not have the same meaning of learning
with others. After all, making progress is our final goal no matter
what conflict or unhappy might cause.(564)
个人意见：
观点很明确，结构也很清楚，但是有些语法错误，我帮你改出来，不知对不对
另外，觉得你的句式好像进步很多也，变化很多，不像我真么单调，有没有什么好书推荐一下
最近考试没碰英语了，感觉都没了，说不出逻辑有什么毛病了