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2009.9.11NA  agree or disagree it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life


Almost all people like to watch movies,no matter old or young.But have they ever thought whatkind of movie is worth watching?
With no doubt,watching movies that can teach us something about real life really helps us a lot.Because those movies are reflections of what is going on in the society that just we live in,we can gain a lot of experience.Moreover,those movies usually go much deeper,which means they do not show the real life itself but also give us an image of what is the nature of human andwhat is in people's deep heart,so that,we will have a lot prepared in mind before we go to the society and have to deal with all kinds of complicated relations among different people.
However,is it only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life?Perhapsit is too absolute to say like this.
First and foremost,to learn something about real life is not the only purpose that we watch movies.Perhaps,we just watch movies to have fun and relax ourselves,which can also do a lot of good to both our physical and mental health.
Additionally,a movie is just a piece of art rather than the record of the real life,it can reflect the real world,but usually what shown in the movies differs from what actully happening in our real world.If we just copy what we learn in the movies completely,even if they teach us about real life,we will pay for that.
Last but not the least,a movie can just teach us part of the life,the conclusions we made from it can not always be applied to every situation.We should think twice before we start to use the conclusions.
In a word,I am not agree with the statement that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life.

primrose0519UID: 2887617

Almost all people like to watch movies, no matter old or young. But have they ever thought what kind of movie is worth watching?+ P% D4 f. k/ Y0 E5 Z* c5 k
With no doubt, watching movies that can teach us something about real life really helps us a lot. Because those movies are reflections of what is going on in the society that just we live in, we can gain a lot of experience. Moreover, those movies usually go much deeper, which means they[url=] do not[/url][S1] show the real life itself but also give us an image of what is the nature of human and what is in people's [url=]deep[/url][S2] heart, so that, we will have a lot prepared in mind before we [url=]go to[/url][S3] the society [url=]and have[/url][S4] to deal with all kinds of complicated relations among different people.
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3 P! {  C1 S8 mLa t but not the least, a movie can just teach us part of the life, the conclusions we made from it cannot always be applied to every situation. We should think twice before we start to use the conclusions.
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第二段写的很好，把你的反驳观点的让步铺垫的很好，可是后面的论证不够有说服力，而且，你应该论证的是“不只是有价值看的电影教我们生活道理，其他电影也可以教”，可以再斟酌一下。总体思路很清楚，细节再雕琢一下会很好~~个人观点，仅供参考，继续加油！

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primrose0519UID: 2887617

如果看得不够清楚，我可以发给你word版的 1# zsy2912371

wttyuseUID: 2755832

http://www.rayfile.com/zh-cn/fil ... -ae4d-0015c55db73d/  批改在此，麻烦下一下

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3# primrose0519
很赞同你的意见 谢谢~ 这篇有点赶~见谅~

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4# wttyuse
你的意思  是不是先直接说主旨 三段展开后 再简要一些说让步段 会更好一些呢？

zsy2912371UID: 2852365

2009.9 25NA do you agree or disagree: having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost.

There are some heat discussions on which kind of job is better, a job  with low pay and high secure or one with high salary but being easily to lose.It's really hard to have a choice,but if I have to choose one,I prefer the latter.

Admittedly,high secure is something that so significant we can not ignore.It is human's nature that we always want to be safe and not change from place to place.Moreover,we can have more time to be together with our families,love and happiness are the last thing we are going to give up.

However,as far as I am concerned,it is a better choice to choose a job with high salary,even if it is much easier to lose.

First of all,the main purpose I try to get a job is that I want to earn more money and live a better life.Since I am a guy from a normal family,and the first thing I should take in account is to survive in the society.We all know that money  can not buy anything,but in fact,without enough money,you have to struggle for survival all the time.In that situation,what you think of every day is how to deal with the three meals,how can you have to time to enjoy the happiness of your family?

Aditionally,working in a company with high salary is a chance to improve yourself and keep up with the pace with the changing world.In order to survive in the heat competition,we have to keep updating the knowledge about the career,so that we never stop improving ourselves.We are young people, we should never be afraid of the competition we will confront in the jobs with high salary,even if it's usually much more fierce than that in a small company with lower pay and higher secure.

Moreover,if you are capable enough to satisfy the demand of the company,your position is going to be stable.Whether you will lose your job or not does not depend on how much salary you get,what really matters is the capability of your own.For instance,Jim,a schoolmate of mine,used to work in a company with a low salary, there are only 10 people working in the company and it 's very safe frombeing fired since  the company is really small.But,finally he got fired because of his disresponsibility and lack of enthusim.

In conclusion,I prefer to choose a job with a high salary,because it's going to be really good for me.

tracyqian17UID: 2768321

There are some heat discussions on which (a) kind of job is better, a job  with low pay and high secure or one with high salary but being easily to lose.It's really hard to have a choice,but if I have to choose one,I prefer the latter.
Admittedly,high secure is something that so significant we can not ignore.It is human's nature(?) that we always want to be safe and not change from place to place.Moreover,we can have more time to be together with our families,(so that) love and happiness are the last thing we are going to give up.However,as far as I am concerned,it is a better choice to choose a job with high salary,even if it is much easier to lose.

First of all,the main purpose I try to get a job is that I want to earn more money and live a better life.Since I am a guy from a normal family,and the first thing I should take in(into) account is(去掉) to survive in the society.We all know that money  can not buy anything,but in fact,without enough money,you have to struggle for survival all the time.In that situation,what you think of every day is how to deal with the three meals,how can you have to time to enjoy the happiness of your family?

Aditionally,working in a company with high salary is a chance to improve yourself and keep up with the pace with the changing world.In order to survive in the heat competition,we have to keep updating the knowledge about the career,so that we never stop improving ourselves.We are young people, we should never be afraid of the competition（and）we will confront in the jobs with high salary,even if it's usually much more fierce than that in a small company with lower pay and higher secure.

Moreover,if you are capable enough to satisfy the demand of the company,your position is going to be stable.Whether you will lose your job or (not does?)not depend on how much salary you get,what really matters is the capability of your own.For instance,Jim,a schoolmate of mine,used to work in a company with a low salary, there are only 10 people working in the company and it 's very safe (frombeing fired since  the company is really small)去掉吧，感觉很罗嗦？.But,finally he got fired because of his disresponsibility and lack of enthusim.7 h8 l; f, y2 L5 m; l

In conclusion,I prefer to choose a job with a high salary,because it's going to be really good for me.
Admittedly后面是另外一段嘛？如果是第一段就有点长，要是另外一段的话，你可以放在倒数第二段那里，让步说一下！
从first开始三段层次逻辑不错！
个人水平有限有什么问题尽管拍砖，共同努力！加油
PS你怎么写了这么多字？学习学习

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8# tracyqian17
写了一个小时，当然多了...

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9月16日交

2009. 10. 17 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.（PS:网速有点问题 文字一长 传上来就死机...郁闷....等等我吧）

yankee11233UID: 2764801

我很想回改,可惜怎么没有12楼````