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9.14 suret.lee
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As the pace of the globalization is speeding up, there is a huge diversity of different jobs. Some are safe and permanent with, however, relatively low salary and others are considerably paid but the employee has to spend each second worrying about losing his job. So, which job is of more advantage? As for me, as a university student, I will definitely choose the highly-paid and risking job.

As far as I'm concerned, the reason that one is always at the risk of losing certain jobs is that there are huge amount of competitors and the condition and situation of the job is always changing and unrest. It is undeniable dangerous for some people, however, is means more opportunities for promotion to those who are ready to face up the challenge. These people are the exact employees the jobs need. In other words, the risking jobs are filters that keep the strong competitors and give up those weak ones.

Besides, risking jobs serve as warnings to stimulate workers to work hard in case of losing their job. For example, advertising field is such a cruel career. If you fail to put forward creative and appealing ideas and end up with poor result several times in a row, you may probably face with the unemployment. The threatening forces you to keep taking every nerve to come up with the best idea to keep your position. It is the similar case with many other jobs, such as lawyers, doctors and accouters. Although it is painful and exhausting, in some way, it is an efficient way to do your best in your career.

Finally, as I have mentioned, I am a university student, so young men like me are always ready for challenges and adventure, which is the youth all about. We are never afraid. By achieving my best, I can realize my dream this way.

However, as for old people, there is some low-salary but steady job to support their lives. They need peace and stability n their lives as well as the sense of security. These jobs can be their insurance.

In conclusion, jobs with high salary but being easy to lose are more suitable for we young people. Those jobs give us chances and strengths to stimulate our ability. On the other hand, the jobs with low pay but high security are for old people, who deserve a peaceful life.

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9.14 suret.lee
求助：怎么插入链接啊？
As the pace of the globalization is speeding up, there is a huge diversity of different jobs. Some are safe and permanent with, however, relatively low salary a ...
suret.lee 发表于 2010-9-14 20:24

词汇量挺大，就是句子结构好像怪。学习了。

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9.21 suret.lee
As someone puts it, "Education is a nation's greatest industry." Thus, there have been more and more discussion on the methods of education. Especially in China, the slogan of quality-orianted education has been put forward over years. So should school children be required to learn art and music in addition to math and science? In my opinion, they surely should.

Art and music are the most gorgeous flower blooming in the dense jungle of the human history. They expose the shining humanity: creativity, love and persistent, all the shining qualities that define us as civilized human beings. They also express the emotion spirit and thoughts. In the famous painting, starry night, Van Gogh showed us a night with twisted lines and burning colors, indication his love for nature; Beethoven’s fate also encourages us to fight against the misfortune for ourselves. In the popular 3D movie, Avatar, James made everyone's dream of their childhood come true: in the remote planet, the mountains are flooting above the sky, strange plants are flourishing in the jungle and the dandelions are swaying in the gentle breeze. So there is such necessity for anyone to learn about art and music.

Besides, art and music can also broaden children's horizon of the world. As there is no boundary for art and music, the children can learn about the cultures of other countries and areas through learning their art and music. Moreover, as art and music are often impressed with the features of local history, children can understand different periods of history better.

As for school children, the courses for art and music seem more important. With mere courses of math and science, children easily get bored by the formula and calculation. However, if the class tables are inserted with music and art courses, the situation will be quite different. Music and art can serves as relation and entertainment to relieve the children from the numerous remembering and computing. They can do better in their previous classes while have a lot of fun.

In sum, music and art courses are not only significant for their personal development, nut also promote their study in science and math. Hence, it is a wise choice to require children to study art and math in addition to math, science and language.

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As someone puts it, "Education is a nation's greatest industry." Thus, there have been more and more discussion on the methods of education. Especially in China, the slogan of quality-orianted education has been put forward over years. So should school children be required to learn art and music in addition to math and science? In my opinion, they surely should.（我觉得开头太发散了，应该紧扣主题比较好。）

Art and music are the most gorgeous flower blooming in the dense jungle of the human history. They expose the shining humanity: creativity, love and persistent, all the shining qualities that define us as civilized human beings. They also express the emotion spirit and thoughts. In the famous painting, starry night, Van Gogh showed us a night with twisted lines and burning colors, indication his love for nature; Beethoven’s fate also encourages us to fight against the misfortune for ourselves. In the popular 3D movie, Avatar, James made everyone's dream of their childhood come true: in the remote planet, the mountains are flooting above the sky, strange plants are flourishing in the jungle and the dandelions are swaying in the gentle breeze. So there is such necessity for anyone to learn about art and music.这说得太抽象了，反正我是不赞成的。形散应该是写英语作文最不好的一种吧

Besides, art and music can also broaden children's horizon of the world. As there is no boundary for art and music, the children can learn about the cultures of other countries and areas through learning their art and music. Moreover, as art and music are often impressed with the features of local history, children can understand different periods of history better.As for school children, the courses for art and music seem more important. With mere courses of math and science, children easily get bored by the formula and calculation. However, if the class tables are inserted with music and art courses, the situation will be quite different. Music and art can serves as relation and entertainment to relieve the children from the numerous remembering and computing. They can do better in their previous classes while have a lot of fun..

In sum, music and art courses are not only significant for their personal development, nut also promote their study in science and math. Hence, it is a wise choice to require children to study art and math in addition to math, science and language.

词汇量很大，但是写得时候没有考虑到美国人的理解思维。他们思维直接，你这么抽像。估计不好得高分吧。欢迎批我的，我英语也不好。有什么说错了，请见谅哈。

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9.28
There is the tendency that more and more university students are taking courses beyond their majors, many of whom major in art and marketing while attend the science class. So is it necessary to require all the university students to take basic science courses, regardless of their field of concentration? In my opinion, there is such necessity.

For starters, learning about science can help them broaden their horisons. As one of human's most great achievements, science is the symbol of wisdom and intellegence. It is hard to imagine that one can understand the world arroud him without any knowledge on science. As the globalization of world is speeding up, the education should take more responsibility to furnish the students with knowledge of science, whatever his major is.

More importantly, science adds to one's logical thinking. During the learning of science, the theory and logics urge the learner to take in these words and pictures and reconstruct them into thoughts in their brian. This proccess can play an important role in developing the logical thinking. It is no wonder that many great scientists are also good at poem or art, such as Newton and Einstain.

Moreover, learning about science, especially for those majorring in art, marketing and financs, is necessary to build up the interprincipal research. In today's world, the interprincipal studies are attracting more and more attention. For example, one of the most promising model as the combination between the art and science, the  3D movie, is given birth to by drawing technique into the movie producing. Avatar, Alice in the wonderworld and many such movies add new elements into the film industry, which is such a sucess in terms of connecting art with science.

The icing on the cake is that during learning the same kind of knowledge, one is prone to get bored and distracted. However, with science courses inserting into the major courses, the effect can be really promising. Thus, it is also a clever way for every students to improve their study efficiency.

In conclusion, all university students should take basic science courses, as long as they don't conflict with their major courses. The effect does not only lie in knowing about science itself, but also help students with their further development and relieve their from numerous major courses.

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10.5
09.01.17 NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

In the modern society, the diversity of food appeals to our eyes and mouths. No one can tear themselves from the numerous kinds of candies, ice creams and fast foods, which, however, leads to the problem of unhealthy eating habits. Far too often, I hear about the increasing rate of obesity across the globe as well as some kind of new-born diseases that are caused by unhealthy eating habits. Some people blame this problem to the advertising. In my opinion, advertising may take part of the responsibility; however, it is sad but true that our indifference and lack of self-control are the main causes of this.

At the first glance, since advertising is so prosperous and high-tech, it seems to provide everyone with the product it is promotion, no matter you pay attention or not, especially when it comes to food. As a person living in the modern society, it is barely possible to shut down the entrance to your apartment. The TV, the internet, or the posters on the street walls are all proper places for ads to open the door to your eyes. Thus, it seems reasonable that advertising is supposed to take the main responsibility to promote too much junk food to harm our health. Is it true? Of course not. The fact is that the ads are also promoting many other products, the clothes, the cars or even the real estate. I haven't heard that anyone who has little interest in art immediately bought a famous paint on the TV without any hesitation after he sees the ad. The problem lies in our disability to resist these foods while we can afford it at it low price, or at least the ad says so. Besides, there are also other reasons that form our unhealthy eating problem.

One of the major causes is the style of our modern life. Maybe everyone has such experience: when you wake up 7:30 in the morning that find that you are going to be late for school or work, will you still sit down and have a healthy set of breakfast with milk and full-wheat bread? The answer is no to most of us. We usually hurry our breakfast with a takeaway doughnut or grab a hamburger on our way. Besides, we spend our day driving to work, sitting in the office and drive home and sleep, instead of making time for enough exercise. When weekends come, we usually stay home watch TV or surf the internet hold a big bowl of pop corns. All the typical modern life style contributes to our obesity and unhealthy eating problem.

Moreover, the lack of healthy eating concept to some group of people adds to the very problem. This situation is more serious in some relatively poor areas such as some countries in Asia. Those people sued to suffer from hunger and poverty, and in some place there are even people starve to death. So when the living condition became a little better for them, they cannot help take meat and fish as their every meal instead of paying attention to the nutritious balance in the food. As the situation goes by, there usually come obesity and the companying disease. Thus, improve people's conception is another urgent to solve the problem

In summary, although the advertising seems to induce people in the unhealthy problem, the actual reason lies in the unhealthy life style of the modern society as well as the lack of balanced food concept. Merely blaming the advertising is unfair. However, there should indeed be policy to control the advertising and examine the food condition that is advertised to build a healthy eating environment for people.

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In the modern society, the diversity of food appeals to our eyes and mouths. No one can tear themselves from the numerous kinds of candies, ice creams and fast foods, which, however, leads to the problem of unhealthy eating habits. Far too often, I hear about the increasing rate of obesity across the globe as well as some kind of new-born diseases that are caused by unhealthy eating habits. Some people blame this problem to the advertising. In my opinion, advertising may take part of the responsibility; however, it is sad but true that our indifference and lack of self-control are the main causes of this.

At the first glance, since advertising is so prosperous and high-tech, it seems to provide everyone with the product it is promotion, no matter you pay attention or not, especially when it comes to food. As a person living （lives）in the modern society, it is barely possible to shut down the entrance to your apartment. The TV, the internet, or the posters on the street walls are all proper places for ads to open the door to your eyes. Thus, it seems reasonable that advertising is supposed to take the main responsibility to promote too much junk food to harm our health. Is it true? Of course not. The fact is that the ads are also promoting many other products, the clothes, the cars or even the real estate. I haven't heard that anyone who has little interest in art immediately bought a famous paint on the TV without any hesitation after he sees the ad（这两句话是多余的，偏题了）. The problem lies in our disability to resist these foods while we can afford it at it （with）low price, or at least the ad says so. Besides, there are also other reasons that form our unhealthy eating problem.
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One of the major causes is the style of our modern life. Maybe everyone has such experience: when you wake up 7:30 in the morning that find that you are going to be late for school or work, will you still sit down and have a healthy set of breakfast with milk and full-wheat bread? The answer is no to most of us. We usually hurry our breakfast with a takeaway doughnut or grab a hamburger on our way. Besides, we spend our day driving to work, sitting in the office and drive home and sleep, instead of making time for enough exercise. When weekends come, we usually stay home watch (watching) TV or surf (surfing) the internet hold a big bowl of pop corns. All the typical modern life style contributes to our obesity and unhealthy eating problem.; y2 e5 H4 D' I. z& d
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Moreover, the lack of healthy eating concept to some group of people adds to the very problem. This situation is more serious in some relatively poor areas such as some countries in Asia. Those people sued to suffer from hunger and poverty, and in some place there are even people starve to death. So when the living condition became a little better for them, they cannot help take meat and fish as their every meal instead of paying attention to the nutritious balance in the food. As the situation goes by, there usually come obesity and the companying disease. Thus, improve people's conception is another urgent to solve the problem
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In summary, although the advertising seems to induce people in the unhealthy problem, the actual reason lies in the unhealthy life style of the modern society as well as the lack of balanced food concept. Merely blaming the advertising is unfair. However, there should indeed be policy to control the advertising and examine the food condition that is advertised to build a healthy eating environment for people.

文章的结构不错
文章中有些词形式不好该用动名词的形式时没有用到
倒数第二段的认证不是很有力
第二段认证有些混乱