jiroushiren 9月14日的 作文作业

jiroushirenUID: 2890685

       Currently, some may hold the opinion that having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to have a job with low paying salary and being high secure My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
       One of the primary causes is that a huge number of people lost their jobs due to the economic crisis. When they stay at home and send their resumes to new company, the helpless, scare , anxiety would around with them. At that moment, they aspirated only a job no matter how much the boss will pay them . They just want have something to do and do not stay at home . A job with high secure is satisfying their needs and they don not want to lose the job forever.
       But there is a further more subtle point we must consider when the employee feel secure about their jobs, they will be more loyal to the company. In their eyes , the company is a big family ,the other employees are their brothers and sisters and they are a part of the company. Under the easy atmosphere , they will work harder and pay more attention on their jobs . The results are employees bring more profits to the company and they feel satisfying with their company and their jobs.
        What is more , when we compare with the two kind of jobs . We found that the employee whose jobs with high salary will be easier to lose their jobs. Due to the jobs with high salary are every people wanted. So the competition of the jobs is more aggressive   and   competitive . The  employee  of  the job  have to  face more  pressure  and  have to work harder than others ,ensuring  they will not lose the job. As you know, too much pressure is unhealthy to our bodies. When we compare money with healthy, money is tiny and useless.
         In a word, taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that the most important thing is the employee satisfy to their jobs . So jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost.

littleecho33UID: 2876349

Currently, some may hold the opinion that having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to have a job with low paying salary and being high secure My arguments for this point are listed as follows.(没有什么语法错误，就是模板套用太多)
       One of the primary causes is that a huge number of people lost their jobs due to the economic crisis. When they stay at home and send their resumes to new company, the helpless, scare , anxiety would (spill out)around with them. At that moment, they aspirated only a job no matter how much the boss will pay them . They just want have something to do and do not stay at home . A job with high secure is satisfying their needs and they don not want to lose the job forever.
But(however) there is a further more subtle point we must consider when the employee feel secure about their jobs, they will be more loyal to the company. In their eyes , the company is a big family ,the other employees are their brothers and sisters and they are a part of the company. Under the easy atmosphere , they will work harder and pay more attention on their jobs . The results are employees bring more profits to the company and they feel satisfying(ied) with their company and their jobs.5 I1 |! `% ]5 E1 s) h/ q5 K8 |
        What is more , when we compare with the two kind of jobs (compared with 2 kinds of jobs,). We found that the employee whose jobs with high salary will be easier to lose their jobs. Due to the jobs with high salary are every people wanted. So the competition of the jobs is more aggressive   and   competitive . The  employee  of  the job  have to  face more  pressure  and  have to work harder than others ,ensuring  they will not lose the job. As you know, too much pressure is unhealthy to our bodies. When we compare money with healthy, money is tiny and useless.
In a word, taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that the most important thing is the employee satisfy to their jobs . So jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost.
文章没有什么大错，简单句太多。还要好好练

dailiangzhenUID: 2679058

文章大意很通顺，没有太多的语法错误。就是和littleecho33说的一样，模板太多了。供参考，共同进步.:D