9.18独立作文。请大家点评借鉴~PLAYING SPORTS

巴西仔UID: 2845279

When it comes to sports, people could benefit a lot from this physical exercise which has emerged since the dawn of human civilization. Everyday when we pass a playground on campus, there are groups of matches fighting with sweat under scorching heat.It causes me thoughtful in why they are so fanatic in sports.My perspective is that in addition to the enormous health benefits that healthy promote, there are other benefits that we can learn important life lessons.

In the first place,through playing sports,we can in-depthly know the importance of the rules in our daily life.As we all know,becanse we live in the society,we have to obey the rules which not only restrict our behavior but also give us the protection from others.Similarly,every sports have a series of rules that make the comptition more fair.No sooner have we participate in the sports than we know about how the rules work and why we must obey it.The groups we play sports in is just like the society we live in.From the similarity,we can easily draw the conclusion that it is significant to obey the rules.Thus,we can behave better in society and notice that it is irrational to break the rules.

Secondly,playing sports can teach us about the team spirit,which is becoming more and more useful and essential in team work.Most of sports require the ability of cooperation without which we can never succeed in the competition. In team sports, the players need to depend on each other. When team spirit is lacking, the members play as individuals, weakening the whole team unit. For example,I often engage in football matches after school.There are always some individuals who don’t care about the team by means of keeping the football selfishly or being negative in the field.The whole team is prone to be depressed by this kind of people.However,if luckily,I am involved in a one-hearted team,not only will the team score a success but I will delightedly enjoy the match.

The last but not the least,I think we can learn a precious virtue during the process of playing sports together,which is we should never give up.On no account can we ignore the importance of persistence.The ultimate purpose of all kinds of sports is to win.In order to win,we can have no choise but keep going and fighting.Once we give up,all the efforts we made will become meaningless.I would like to take a great NBA player,Tracy Mcgrady,as an example.Once upon a time,the Rockets,which Tracy worked for,was 6 pionts behind.Many audience are ready to leave with disappointment.However,Tracy didn’t give in.He tried his best in the competition and scored incredible 13 points within 35 seconds,leading his team to victory.This lesson instructs us that we doesn’t fail until the time is up.We must try our best and never give up.

As a result,it is obvious that sports can give us invalueable lessons which will be indispensible in our daily life.

sherry1989007UID: 2705765

楼主语言很华丽~观点也和我写的差不多呢~
不过感觉论证逻辑还不是很强，比如第一个point楼主一直在说理，但是没有说清楚怎么发现并obey the rules，有几句话感觉意思是相近的，可以更加展开写~

巴西仔UID: 2845279

一语道破 确实我的逻辑比较短缺.        THX~去改去了 2# sherry1989007

jy0042032463857UID: 2671473

好不自然的华丽。。。。。。。。俗丽

lovecityUID: 2648982

感觉LZ是在套模板吧，用的不怎么自然