norra的独立写作作文贴

942wadeUID: 2948617

11月18日交

it is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends.

  
People barely stay in a place for their whole life, that(把逗号删去，你后面的不是非限制定于从句吧，或者在that前加上and) means a meaningless（没意思表达的感觉太直白，太绝对了） life. When the vice chancellor of Oxford University come（过去） to our university to give an address, he told the young man（感觉不妥，像是对某个特定的年轻人说的，前面有没有提及，可能用us youths比较好）:" Keep moving,（and或者分成两句话） never rest. "What he want（s to） infer is moving to other places means more opportunities for better education and（or会比较好一些吧，我也不清楚） good jobs. So from my point of view , to move to a new city or a new country is a good thing（Is good就好了，否则的话好事情感觉太中国化了 ）. My reasons （just as 去掉此处加include后what面的include可以去掉了）not only just as I have mentioned above, but also include the followings.

Moving（后面的主语应该是move的发起者） to a new place ,the soaring technology can make us keep in touch with old friends. Now we get（have got可能好些吧） internet and mobile phones. We can connect with each other in a very convenient way on account of that the scientists have invented Windows Massagers, ICQ or send short massage to other（s 感觉这句逻辑不通）, even（even if，even自己不能作连词的） we live in different cities. One of my friend（s） in high school flied to United States, and stay there for further study. We still keep in touch until now,缺连词 we chat on the QQ and exchange information on the social network sites like Facebook, 连词we （are）still best friends.

Plus, may be(maybe才是副词) people do（do后不可以加情态词的） will lose connect with some of the old friends when they move to other places. That is pity. However, They may gain more things. They will meet some new friends. I studied in a university located in north China One of my classmates in universities moved to a city located in south China when he graduated. He had send massages to us said that he miss us because he feel lonely there, but after not very long time he made several new friends and met a girl there .She became his wife one year later. So it is not bad thing to move to new places.

Make a change of living places, moving to other city or countries. People will got more opportunities for job or education ,and they still have the chance to keep in touch with old friends , besides ,they can meet some new friends. Hence ,why not keep moving? just go ahead, more gorgeous opportunities is waiting you in the corner.

没有看完，下周末就考试了，任务还很重。简单说一下啊，说实话语法错误比较多。建议多练习一些。个人粗评，我也有很多类似的问题，共同努力吧！！！

ilovevickyUID: 2937658

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不好意思，现在才把1111的作业批好。


11月11日交


Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country？




Different culture and landscapes in foreign countries attract people because they are strange and full of mystery. There are many ways to learn about foreign country: newspapers ,magazines, radios ,TV and internet, but not all of them are the best, which one is the best? Hence, if someone states that magazines and newspapers are the best way of gaining knowledge about a foreign country, they will meet serious disagreement from me. 开头简洁明了

When people are children, they can not read , they acquire the knowledge from parents or TV. Most of the children may ask their parents the beautiful views of the picture located where ,their parents may tell them it is the view of Southern Africa ,and
tell them some stories about that area, such as the wild elephants or gorillas live on that land. These children also can get those knowledge from TV programs, the lecturer may tell them the story of Paris ,and introduce the history of France to them, such as the time of empire Napoleon. （T）to the contrary, they can not read ,so they can not get those thing from newspaper or magazines.
这段很有说服力，视角独特。
Plus, if people grow older, they will go to school and the teachers will teach them knowledge about foreign countries. They may gradually familiar different cultures of different countries. My younger brother Lin Tao ,often discuss the history of world war 2 with me .His teacher teach him the evils did by Hitler and his fellows ,so he get to know that the Germany have passed though a extremely hard time ,when Nazi control its government.
我发现你写的细节很棒。但是这里如果能像上一段一样再踩报纸和杂志一脚就更棒了。
If peoples are adults, they spend most of their time surfing on the internet, searching different pictures ,texts and videos about foreign countries .They prefer internet and TV to magazines and newspapers when they want to learn more about foreign countries.
我觉得这样按年龄分类很有条理，以前有老师也这么讲过，感觉你实践地蛮好。
On account of that the children, teenagers and adults are have their preference when they try to learn about foreign countries, I strongly agree that magazines and newspapers are not the best way to acquire knowledge of other country. Actuall0y , there is no particular way which is the best, the fittest is the best. 恩这句话总结得好！
总体来说词汇语法结构都很好，我要向你好好学习。Adults那段个人认为以你的水平还能扩充。加油！！！