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10.7
1、        第一段书的例子有点绕了；
2、        应该学习的应该是我，因为我没有发现太大的问题。

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写得很好～学习了～

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10.12~

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10.9_09.03.07NA    Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not show their social or political views in the classroom.
We are living in a world where the policies and social standards are transparent (various什么的会更好一点). To better carry out obligations and maintain rights, we need to have a fair and objective view toward politics and society.（这句话有点大了，勉强可用） Considering that students are influenced most by their teachers, some people assert that teachers should show their social and political views in the classroom, helping students form their own attitude to society and the government. On the contrary, this idea is strongly opposed by the numerous people who hold the opinion that it is inappropriate to allow teachers show their political and social situation in front of the students. They stand on the ground that there are risks that teachers may lead students into a wrong way. From my point of view, it should be supported that teachers show their own opinions to students in some conditions.
Admittedly, it is quite possible that teachers mistake opinions of their students. On one hand, some teachers lack the right stand of the politics and social rule themselves. How can we anchor our hope on their instruction to their students? The students under these teachers guidance may be one-side and extreme. On the other hand, proper even though the teachers’ views are, they may convey their spirits inefficiently. Students are likely to garble their statements. （来个例子！）On both occasions, it is a failure of education.
But at the meantime, although disadvantages and risks exist during the process of teachers’ statement of their own attitude to the government and society, the benefits should not be ignored. Students are too immature to form a complete conception of the world. The lack of the ability to know the real truth behind the phenomenon results that they exactly need someone to help them analyze and eliminate confusion. Just reading books, watching televisions or listening radios cannon arrive a perfect result. There is no doubt that teachers will be the optimal men to offer help. The essence of their job are not only imparting knowledge, but also dispelling ignorance and passing on truth. What’s more, they are admired and respected by students. Under their instructions, students are easy to be moved.
Therefore, to ensure the students getting educated properly, the teachers’ political quality and skills to show political and social views should be enhanced. As long as the teachers possess objective and unbiased opinions and impart these in a right way, they can bring a positive impact on students’ lives.
1、        第一段阅卷官是很难带着兴趣读下去的，这种结构还是谨慎使用的好；
2、        言语上出彩的还是不多，可考虑多背点程度副词，显得论述全面而精彩；
3、        理论之上得添加合适的实例，简单又加分；
4、        （题外话）我的破题没有什么特别的方法，我手写我心，想到什么就写什么，带着情绪写，情绪强烈其实无妨，只要自己觉得论证充分，一定要套个格式的话，可以这么说：一段起，二三并列承，四段反面论述再转折，五段总结