由于一战的杯具98，所以决定果断重考，把复议的结果留到考后再看……
但是因为当时fair+good22的作文，所以我觉得是不是我的作文格式有问题，虽然我觉得我的点都应该达到了，字数也应该是差不多的，当时一战写了400+和500+……
所以今晚上随便找了篇TPO3的综合和OG1上的独立按时用txt打出的原稿……大家帮我看看问题可能出在哪把……因为是原稿，所以问题可能多点，大家重重的拍就是了……谢谢各位了……
PS：初来乍到，不会上传，所以直接贴这里了……麻烦各位了
我觉得我还是把综合的文章贴一下：
Integrated writing 3—Rembrandt Reading
Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt because of its style, and indeed the representation of the woman's face is very much like that of portraits known to be by Rembrandt. But there are problems with the painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt.
First, there is something inconsistent about the way woman in the portrait is dressed. She is wearing a white linen cap of a kind that only servants would wear-yet the coat she is wearing has a luxurious fur collar that no servant could afford. Rembrandt, who was known for his attention to the details of his subjects' clothing, would not have been guilty of such an inconsistency.
Second, Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together. The face appears to be illuminated by light reflected onto it from below. But below the face is the dark fur collar, which would absorb light rather than reflect it. So the face should appear partially in shadow-which is not how it appears. Rembrandt would never have made such an error.
Finally, examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together. Although Rembrandt often painted on wood panels, no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses a panel glued together in this way from several pieces of wood.
For these reasons the painting was removed from the official catalog of Rembrandt's paintings in the 1930s.
以下是我的综合
Well, according to the reading material, we could know that a woman portrait is being doubted in 3 ways that it might not belong to the paintings of Rembrandt though the style seems so. They are the inconsistent dress, the light and shadow and the panel problems. But, the professor in the lecture has given evidence to disprove them all like the following.
Firstly, the inconsistent dress is not the painter's fault since according to the examination, the fur collar were actually added 100 hundred year later. The possible reason for this addition might simply because of the intention to make the woman inside the painting looks like a laddy to increase the value of the painting. Say, the woman inside the painting is indeed a servant wearing a white linen cap.
Secondly, about the light and shadow, the reason why the face might not seems to be able to be illuminated could also be attributed to the added things. In fact, according to the professor, the woman in the original painting was wearing a simple light-colored collar instead of the dark fur collar. And this could explain why the light source seems to be so strange.
Thirdly, the wood panel could be again the result of the addition to the portrait. And the sample of the panel, said by the professor, is demonstrated by the examination that it came from the same tree as another self-portrait of Rembrandt with a hat. It seems that the 2 painting could have a same origin and demonstrate the reality of this painting.
In all, the reasons given by the reading passage doubting the reality of the painting could all be explained by the addition things 100 years after the painting was actually painted.
这个是独立
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Which is better for young adults, live alone or live with families? Well, in my opinion, it might not be that good to live parents too early. I'll tell you why.
Yes, we could not deny the fact that being apart from parents would help the young grow-ups learn how to be independent quickly when they are already a grow-up. And the importance of the independent of a man is indeed very significant. You would have to live your parents someday, no matter you want or not, you have to begin your own creer, new family and new life. The earlier you try to live alone, the better you could be able to take care of yourself. You could be able to know the hard of life and begin to value the life you have now, and this might never be thought about when you are under the protect of your dear family.
But, this does not mean that you need to live them as soon as possible! What is the advantage of our mankind compared to other species on this planet? Why could we develop so fast compared to the long envolving history? The experience! The experience passing down from the former generations makes us possible to avoid the same problems or solve the same situation. And this could be easily gained from your dad and mum inside your family while you might need several times more efforts and time if you try something simply by your own. We humans are such life-shorted kind that we need to take advantages of every minute in our life. Why not just simply wait some time and stay near the elders to learn how to handle things maturely and sophisticatedly when us young are often too easily to be not calm. The old could be more experienced and calm than us when facing something.
Moreover, besides the social skills we need to learn from our family members for our individuals' surviving in the big and complex society, we also need to learn the way we treat our families. We are not always a single man in the world, and we would have our families as well some time. Though we grow up in the same family, we might not just ever think about knowing how to manage a family especially when we are the only child of our family. We were born with special care from all the members in the family and accept them naturally. But now, it would be the time we form our own family with our wifes or hunsbends and it's time to express our love and care to others no matter your pair or kids. And this could be totally different roles as the sons or daughters. Thus we need to learn them from our families.
In conclusion, I think the young adults like us still need to stay aside our families for some time. We do need the concept of being independent, but we could be independent in many ways, not simply leave the parents. And we still have a lot to learn from our families. | 
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