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The world today is moving faster and faster pace. And twenty first centuries is bound to different
                         我觉得这个and有点多余
from the previous. People’s value is indeed affected by mountainous media dramatically. One of
                                 influence比较合适 masses比较好~~
most makeable Medias is advertising. And all-pervasive advertisements have covered widely     我觉得efficient比较好            这句用的很好偶觉得
range which from dressing to diet, from speech to perspective.  However, there will be springing
我不知道这个which用的对不对，但我觉得不是很顺    however是然而，there will be?觉得不对啊~will be是说这将会开始么？             Wasting
up heated a discussion about whether advertising is a waste of time and money. In my opinion, advertising is one of special products for our life and it is indispensable in reality rather than waste of money.    直接写成a special product   for—in    不知道这个词用得好不好，额~水平低啊~~

In the fist place, advertisement is a kind of particular knowledge to people. The reason is that
              The reason ___For/because或者写The reason Why it is useful is
advertisements convey practical information in order to improve our quality life. Watching the
in order to?意思不太对          by watch the advertisements
advertisement, we can see successful man, beautiful and sexy women who are attractive with devil
复数吧。。我也不知道~~
slender and anger face, appealing delicious food which enlarges people appetite or even some sanitation of healthy common sense.  From them, we obtain desire to be success and stimulate our emotion.  Hence, the advertising will give us especial feeling which we can not find on our textbook.
个人觉得这个理由很牵强。。真的。。。。你可以因为广告我们知道了更多的新的东西，了解了更多不同的文化之类的，但是因为广告而想要成功，真的有点牵强诶。。。
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Furthermore, advertisements are expression of art creation. In modern life, many people become mechanic because of ^fast speed of life. Access to watching the advertisement, we get relaxingand
                 +the                            去掉                relaxed
release our pressure. In addition, the significant benefit is own to regain ability to appreciate
                 之前还以为用错了，谷歌了才知道，用的很好！
creation of art. Due to describing abstract and using art skill, colorful advertising define beauty
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which is ^kind of art. Take advertizing of Toyota car as an example, car with perfect appearance
                       advertising（拼错拉）我谷歌了的时候，好像没有这种用法~
and useful function. No one deny the designer is excellent for art. 1 a) U! u7 n) a- K
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However, we admit that, to some extent, the advertizing exaggerate products in commercial way.
the advertising exaggerated products in commercial way
Sometimes, we have already known the unity of product which is saying in advertising such as
                                          Which noted in ad
which medicine cure what symptom of patients. What is worse, in order to attracting customers,
attract customer eyeball
merchants use false information to innocent customers. As far as I concerned, thousand of young
                             mislead
ladies who pursue slender are hurt because of using false medicine which are in persuasive advertising.        a slender figure         

To sum up, we can not blame the advertising is waste of money and time. Because it is kind of art and contribute beauty for us. The advertising makes our life more meaningful.

结尾不是很好啊~~

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这个是用Word弄好的，你看这个吧~恩~加油哦。

如果改得不好的地方请一定告诉我，我的水平比较差！一起进步啊

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不好意思。我是补上分组的，现在给你发修改作文咯。如果有空，可以回去也看看我10月9日的。不过太久远了，如果不方便就算了吧。呵呵。