2010.10.09作文

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Nowadays many people hold the idea that the advertising is a waste of time and money for customers already know what they want. For my part, this position misses the point. Among countless factors which influence my decision, there are two conspicuous aspects as follows.

The former reason for my penchant is that not all customers already know what they want. Without the advertising, people might not know the function of the new product and thereby they are not likely to buy them. The example in point is the development of the computer. It is the advertisements that induce people to get to know it such as its function, operation and realize the significance of it. On the other hand, we can not decide which size, brand we should choose if we don't see the advertisements of sellers, even though we but know we want that. Suppose that we plan to buy one mobile phone, the first thing we do may be searching the advertisements of all kinds we are interested. After we have a general outlook of the information, we will decide which we will buy.

The latter reason can be seen by people is that advertising is not a waste of time and money. Advertising could spread a variety of information all over the world. Here the information not only includes the commercial promotion, but also the culture. It is increasingly popular that the advertisements develop along with the culture. For instance, the advertisement of the tea could take the culture of the tea overseas. When it comes to the mere commercial promotion, we should see the positive side. The existence of the advertisement could reduce the cost of the newspapers, predicals and the television programs. And, all kinds of advertisements could bring the fierce competition among the sellers, which could eventually benefits the customers.

Admittedly, sometimes people buy useless things under the persuasion of the advertisements. Besides, the over popularity of the advertisements sometimes waste the resources of the society to some extent. However, we should miss the importance of the advertisemnts.

Above all, advertising has its own function in the society which could not be ignored and is not a waste of time and money. The information of advertising makes shopping more convenient and cheap. The excessive development of the advertising should be in control in the future and the balance would benefit us more.

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1# lovelgb

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Nowadays many peoplehold the idea that the advertising is a waste of time and money for customers who already know what they want. For my part, thisposition misses the point. Among countless factors which influence my decision (purchase decision), there are two conspicuous aspectsas follows (below two aspects are most conspicuous, 和前句的主语同一，介词短语among thefactors 中隐藏的主语为factor, 所以主句的主语应该也为factor ). 8 x; J: t"A6 u

- a# ?1 B9 O/ g( A$ p$ b7 kTheformer (不推荐用former,改用first,因为前文没有提到到底是哪一个)reason for mypenchant is that not all customers already know what they want. Without theadvertising, people might not know the function of the new product and therebythey are not likely to buy them. The example in point is the development of thecomputer. It is the advertisements that induce people to get to know it such as（推荐and also， such as 表示的是同一性质的东西，但前者包含后者） its function,operation and realize the significance of it. On the other hand, we can notdecide which size, brand we should choose if we don't see the advertisements ofsellers, even though we but know we want that. Suppose that we plan to buy onemobile phone, the first thing we do may be searching the advertisements of allkinds we are interested. After we have a general outlook of the information, wewill decide which we will buy.
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The latter （2nd）reason can be seen by people is thatadvertising is not a waste of time and money. Advertising could spread avariety of information all over the world. Here the information not onlyincludes the commercial promotion, but also the culture. It is increasinglypopular that the advertisements develop along with the culture. For instance,the advertisement of the tea could take the culture of the tea overseas. Whenit comes to the mere commercial promotion, we should see the positive side. Theexistence of the advertisement could reduce the cost of the newspapers,predicals and the television programs. And, all kinds of advertisements couldbring the fierce competition among the sellers, which could eventually benefitsthe customers. + D" o) U' T. M4 ]: D! p* d" u/ Z& v

! G" q: c' F# z1 ~Admittedly,sometimes people buy useless things under the persuasion of the advertisements.Besides, the over popularity of the advertisements sometimes waste theresources of the society to some extent. However, we should miss the importanceof the advertisemnts.
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$ T/ O" r+ H% X$ d4 K; SAboveall, advertising has its own function in the society which could not be ignoredand is not a waste of time and money. The information of advertising makesshopping more convenient and cheap. The excessive development of theadvertising should be in control in the future and the balance would benefit usmore.

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