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searainbowUID: 2722397

10月23日。。。求拍。。求狠拍。。。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is a waste of time and money because customers already know what they want.3 k( @1 d6 `(

Advertisement as the product of modern business society has played a significant role in people's daily life. However some people argues that advertisement does not make sense, for customer has a clear idea about their preference, which means advertising is a waste of time and money. But from my perspective, advertisement is really important in our society. I will specify it in details.

To begin with, advertisement does provides good choice for our shopping. In modern society, advertisement is a best method for company's marketing. Although the customers may already have a choice. But when a new product with better function comes out, how can we know it without the advertisement. It is impossible for us to know the new features and function of new product. At this time advertisement will give us great help. Besides, when we stand in the supermarket facing with rows of products displayed with almost no specific difference, how can we choose? Well, again advertisement will stand out and be helpful for us.

In addition, advertisement is sometimes a feast for eyes and full of creations Nowadays the advertisement is not just only a simple promotion for the product, but, in most times, are full of creations and fantastic pictures which gives us a wonderful experience. For example, the adidas advertisement in the 2010 FIFA world cup not only make us see the loveliness and football skill of the world famous football players like Messi, but also let us experience the fantastic view of great Africa. Besides, in most fashion advertisement, there are always attractive ladies and handsome gentleman which will give us a feast for eye.

Besides, the advertisement can let us experience a different cultural background. Advertisement is sometimes the window onto the life a different culture. By enjoying the advertisement like a TV programme or a film, we can have an idea about another country. For example, if the advertisement are usually about food, clothes and other necessities of life, the country may be not very affluent. But on the other hand, if the ads are full of luxury items like BMW cars, OMEGA watches, that may mean the country is a rich one and people here enjoy the luxury lifestyle.

To sum up, we can conclude that advertisement is really helpful in our daily life. Admittedly, it sometimes does waste lots of time and money. However, the advantages outweigh, for the advertisements is a perfect shopping guidance, a feast for eye and an access for different culture.

jessamine_ysqUID: 2767264

1009作文修改by 西子霓裳飞

Advertisement as the product of modern business society has played a significant role in people's daily life. However some people argues that advertisement does not make sense, for customer has a clear idea about their preference, which means advertising is a waste of time and money. But from my perspective, advertisement is really important in our society. I will specify it in details. 4 ^& Y9 P! C) v$ E: W6 `* v8 R, P" e8 p
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To begin with, advertisement does provides good choice for our shopping. In modern society, advertisement is the best method for company's marketing. Although the customers may already have a choice. But when a new product with better function comes out, how can we know it without the advertisement. It is impossible for us to know the new features and function of new product. At this time advertisement will give us great help. Besides, when we stand in the supermarket facing with rows of products displayed with almost no specific difference, how can we choose? Well, again advertisement will stand out and be helpful for us.
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In addition, advertisement is sometimes a feast for eyes and full of creations Nowadays the advertisement is not just only a simple promotion for the product, but, in most times, are full of creations and fantastic pictures which gives us a wonderful experience. For example, the adidas advertisement in the 2010 FIFA world cup not only makes us see the loveliness and football skill of the world famous football players like Messi, but also lets us experience the fantastic view of great Africa. Besides, in most fashion advertisement, there are always attractive ladies and handsome gentlemen which will give us a feast for eyes.4 g; x6 U: r" C9 ?! W' b: p" B2 L
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Besides, the advertisement can let us experience a different cultural background. Advertisement is sometimes the window onto the life a different culture. By enjoying the advertisement like a TV programme or a film, we can have an idea about another country. For example, if the advertisement are usually about food, clothes and other necessities of life, the country may be not very affluent. But on the other hand, if the ads are full of luxury items like BMW cars, OMEGA watches, that may mean the country is a rich one and people here enjoy the luxury lifestyle. , q6 C9 ~9 k1 l# _7 H
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To sum up, we can conclude that advertisement is really helpful in our daily life. Admittedly, it sometimes does waste lots of time and money. However, the advantages outweigh, for the advertisements is a perfect shopping guidance, a feast for eye and an access for different culture.

advertisement是可数名词，所以要不用复数advertisements，要不就要加定冠词或者不定冠词在前面。

无与伦比小茉莉UID: 2910370

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is a waste of time and money because customers already know what they want.3 k( @1 d6 `(4 F# b  W& |' a
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Advertisement as the product of modern business society has played a significant role in people's daily life. However some people argues that advertisement does not make sense, for customer has a clear idea about their preference, which means advertising is a waste of time and money. But from my perspective, advertisement is really important in our society. I will specify it in details. （第一段简洁明了，十分给力）
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To begin with, advertisement does provides good choice for our shopping. In modern society, advertisement is a best method for company's marketing. Although the customers may already have a choice. （although 后面没有主句）But when a new product with better function comes out, how can we know it without the advertisement. It is impossible for us to know the new features and function of（a） new product. At this time advertisement will give us great help. Besides, when we stand in the supermarket facing with rows of products displayed with almost no specific difference(这句句式多变却流畅，写得很好), how can we choose? Well, again advertisement will stand out and be helpful for us.
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In addition, advertisement is sometimes a feast for eyes and full of creations Nowadays the advertisement is not just only a simple promotion for the product, but, in most times, are full of creations and fantastic pictures which gives us a wonderful experience. For example, the adidas advertisement in the 2010 FIFA world cup not only make us see the loveliness and football skill of the world famous football players like Messi, but also let us experience the fantastic view of great Africa. Besides, in most fashion advertisement, there are always attractive ladies and handsome gentleman which will give us a feast for eye. （这段多次用了fantastic 和 a feast of eye 第一句感觉眼睛一亮，最后一句也用就不是很好了，但段落结构和句式依然很好）" O# J* B6 b) {Z

Besides, the advertisement can let us experience a different cultural background. Advertisement is sometimes the window onto the life a different culture. By enjoying the advertisement like a TV programme（拼写有错误） or a film, we can have an idea about another country. For example, if the advertisement are（单复数用法有误） usually about food, clothes and other necessities of life, the country may be not very affluent. But on the other hand, if the ads are full of luxury items like BMW cars, OMEGA watches, that may mean the country is a rich one and people here enjoy the luxury lifestyle. (观点很新颖，不流于俗套)

To sum up, we can conclude that advertisement is really helpful in our daily life. Admittedly, it sometimes does waste lots of time and money. However, the advantages outweigh, for the advertisements is a perfect shopping guidance, a feast for eye and an access for different culture.


楼主文章，简洁有力，风格成熟，句式多变，言语富有表现力，语法错误较少，不失为一篇优秀的美文，学习了
还有，谢谢你给我改的，我为我频繁的语法错误和贫乏的用词表示严重惭愧…..

searainbowUID: 2722397

Sports can teach people life lesson.

Sports, as we all know, has played a significant role in amusing people and making us healthy. Despite this, some people believe that sports can also give people a life lesson, while others refutes it. From my perspective, sports does have a effect on the people's attitude toward life.

To Begin with, sports can enhance one's recognition of team spirit. Team spirit, which is one of the most important social skills in today's world, can be well cultivated when often playing team sports with others. For example, in a football game, only in the situation when any parts of the whole team cooperate well can a team win. In such sports, one learn to trust others, cooperate with others, learn from others and even compromise for the whole team, which is greatly beneficial for one's development.

In addition, sports enables us to learn from the mistakes and failures. When we first contact with one sport, we may not have a good grasp of it which means we may lose, fail or even hurt, for no one is born to be the sports championship.However, we can learn from the mistakes and failures and make it valuable for our next try, which I believe is core spirit for sports and even the most valuable social lessons we should have. In the real life, we may have lots of mistakes and failure. Please do not feel panic or even feel frustrated. From learning the spirit of sports, we can eventually make a progress.

Moreover, sports teaches us to hold our dreams however difficult it is. Many sport players have an extremely hard environment for their sports career. But their dreams always encourage them to move forward. When China's volleyball team was first built, the team players even did not have a good place for exercise. Actually they were faced with many difficulties, some of them want to give up. But they finally hold and succeed to win the World championship. This kind of spirit called "Volleyball Spirit" has influenced generations of Chinese to pursue their dream. We will be faced with numerous difficulties and dilemmas in our daily life.But sports tell us to hold on and our dreams will come true.

In all, sports is not only a perfect way for entertainment and health, but also plays a imperative role in our social life, for it is can teach us to value the team spirit, to learn from the  failure and to hold our dreams.

searainbowUID: 2722397

TPO14 综合作文



The author in the passage believes that the salvage logging has numerous benefits on the damaged forest and economy. However, the lecturer in the listening casts doubt on the perspective of the author. His position is that the salvage logging has made serious and longer-term environmental damages and the economic benefit is questionable as well.

To begin with, the author argues that the salvage logging enables the forest to recover. This is because it can remove the dead trees, which will give the new ones enough space to grow. However, from the perspective of the lecturer, he disagrees that these dead trees can create the right condition for trees to grow, in which the news can absorb the rich nutritions from dead ones. But the salvage logging's removal will make the trees lack in nutrition.

In addition, the authors claims that the salvage logging can minimize the insect infestation. Decaying land is a perfect habitat for harmful insect to grow, which will pose a threat on the forest health. But the lecturer refutes the author by reasoning that these insects will have more positive effects than negative ones. The insects have lived in the earth for so many years and it does not create major damage to forest Besides, the insects and birds that inhabitant dead trees are vthe important contributor for longer development of forest.

Finally, the authors believes that the salvage logging will be beneficial to the economy. This is because the dead wood can still be used by some factories. And the salvage logging can create more employment opportunities. However, the lecturer casts doubt on it by saying that the economic benefit is small and does not last long. The reason is that the use of damaged trees is based on the high expense. Besides the employment is just temporary and most of the jobs are for the outsiders with trained skills.

searainbowUID: 2722397

Some people think one’s working is more important than being with one’s family. 071020

Nowadays,continuously social developments have brought about severer competitions to people. They have to work hard to realize their life value, which leads to little time for their family. Some individuals believes this is actually right, for without working we will not enjoy a perfect life. However, from my perspective, being with our family is more important than one's working, fore family plays a significant role in one's life.

To begin with, family is the closest people in one's life. Everyone is born with family, who will accompany you in the whole life. We share sorrow, happiness, success and even failure with them. The time spent with family is always memorable and maybe the happiest for ourselves. We can tell them everything about ourselves, they are the people who are closest to our heart. But work sometimes is just one part of our life. They will not follow us the in the whole life, not mentioning the close to heart. Accordingly ,family is more important than working.

In addition, family will give us support when we are in dilemma. The life does not only mean success or satisfaction, but also difficulty and failure. When we are faced with a dilemma, family will always give us support and encourage us to move forward, just like the light in the dark sea for the coming back ship. The family will comfort our hurted heart and get prepared for next try, which the work can not give for us. Therefore, I believe family is more important.

Moreover, family is origin of happiness. Some people believe it is the achievement of work that can make them really happy. But just imagine a scene when you sit alone in a large dining hall without any families. I believe that is not the consequent that anyone ever wants. However, spending time with family, you can chat with with your parents, cooking with your wife, or even play toys with your child which all can bring you happy.

Consequently, being with family is more important than working. Admittedly, the work does matter, for it can enable us to live a enjoyable life without poverty. But family stands out, for it can give us support, happiness and comfort. Therefore we should spend most of our time with our families to experience this colourful world.

suting1214UID: 2924575

The author in the passage believes that the salvage logging has numerous benefits on the damaged forest and economy. However, the lecturer in the listening casts doubt on the perspective of the author. His position is that the salvage logging has made serious and longer-term environmental damages and the economic benefit is questionable as well.

To begin with, the author argues that the salvage logging enables the forest to recover. This is because it can remove the dead trees, which will give the new ones enough space to grow. However, from the perspective of the lecturer, he disagrees that these dead trees can create the right condition for trees to grow, in which the news can absorb the rich nutrition from dead ones. But the salvage logging's removal will make the trees lack in nutrition.

In addition, the author claims that the salvage logging can minimize the insect infestation. Decaying land is a perfect habitat for harmful insect to grow, which will pose a threat on the forest health. But the lecturer refutes the author by reasoning that these insects will have more positive effects than negative ones. The insects have lived in the earth for so many years and it does not create major damage to forest Besides, the insects and birds that inhabitant dead trees are the important contributor for longer development of forest.

Finally, the author believes that the salvage logging will be beneficial to the economy. This is because the dead wood can still be used by some factories. And the salvage logging can create more employment opportunities. However, the lecturer casts doubt on it by saying that the economic benefit is small and does not last long. The reason is that the use of damaged trees is based on the high expense. Besides the employment is just temporary and most of the jobs are for the outsiders with trained skills.

论点很全，语言也比较准确
写得不错了，加油啊！

米爆爆UID: 2892134

改好了噢~~~

searainbowUID: 2722397

谢谢，改得很认真，继续加油！！！ 8# 米爆爆

taylor.1023UID: 2713071

改好了。没有太多的修改，因为也参考了米同学的。觉得她的很仔细到位。就提了一些行文、结构上面的建议。