10.17托福，深夜第一篇作文习作，求拍砖！

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Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life

Everyone likes to play sports. Kids play for fun; Youngster plays for strengthening body; Olds play for health care. Lots of benefits sports bring to us. However, we may fail to forget the most significant merit which playing sports produce, and that is we can learn from these sports.

Escaping from the work and study filled with pressure and constraints, playing sports brings sunshine which warms us and lets us be optimistic. Take myself for instance, after a whole day's heavy work, I usually ride my bicycle to some rural or mountainous areas for a relaxation. Riding, not only physically builds my body, but also cheer me up mentally. Along the road to my destination, fresh air, singing birds, blooming flowers, magnificent mountains, all these beautiful scenery rush into my eyes and drive away my pessimistic thoughts got from work and study.  As Albert Einstain says that, the true joy of life is to be optimistics about life. Due to the ignorance of unpleasant trifles under the help of my bicycle, I become delighted and optimistic, and get to konw that life is transient, but joy is longlasting.

Furthermore, except for letting you be delightful, playing sports lets you realize the importance of team corporation. Since every sport participant takes his own responsibility as different roles which may not be independent, every participant should know his own role clearly: Where is my position? What is my duty? What can I do? I may take the soccer team. We all know that a soccer team consists of goal keeper, backs, midfields and forwards. Indisputably, goal keeper is to keep the goal; backs guard the back yards; midfields control the middle yard and manage the attacks; and the forwards' mission is to score. If any role of the soccer team fails, a whole team would lose, and if performance of each role is all excellent, the championship is just around the corner. So, playing sports will let me understand team spirit thoroughly. Because you inevitably will make contact with other people in the society, and if you know your position and how to communicate with the man you are contacting with, this will contribute a great deal to your life.

Additionally, sense of competition is another more lesson playing sports teaches us. As is universally acknowledged that the final result of a game is either to win or to lose, and everyone is definitely unwilling to get failure. So they must learn to compete. Just like a football player, he must score as many as he can; like a runner, he must run as fast as he can; like a gun shooter, he must shoot as precise as he can. Sense of competition is an attitude towards life, for it can improve yourself and your life.

All in all, Life is like a game. Despite playing sports contributes your health a great deal, I believe it plays a more important role in teaching people lessons about life: How to keep optimistic? How to corporate with other members? And How to compete in your entire life?

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还不错。但是第一个论点好像和主题不负 哦
另外produce 似乎改为bring in

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还不错。但是第一个论点好像和主题不负 哦
另外produce 似乎改为bring in
曾庆红01 发表于 2010-10-12 08:56

领导说的是，第一个论点在最后没有做好总结，对此我多加了一句话（红色的）^^

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