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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
There always be a heated discussion that students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not. As an old Chinese saying goes, “people who make themselves in order can get their lives in order”. I, indeed, totally favor the idea that student who keeps a good habit are closer to the door called success. To demonstrate my idea, I would use two leading reasons as follow.
First, the scientist says peoples’ brains can work more efficiently in the neat area than in a mess. This point of view is definitely reasonable. For examples, students have to find some particular reference books when they do their homework or write a paper, it saves more time if the place is well organized. In addition, psychologists claim than people who work in neat environment usually have good mood which makes them do thing more efficient. As for a student, he or she will surely do their studies in shorter time than the others which will lead to the better marks in examinations or other aspects.
Second, people who keep that habit can use the same manner in the studying case. If a person can makes his books well organized in bookshelf, he can also organize his study in the same way or even organize his life in a good way. When comes to the question that what is the key to success, many people say attitude. I think students who keep their room clean and tidy obviously have a good attitude to life and that means they are optimistic to their lives which ensure they way to success.  
In conclusion, we can see one’s characteristic through his behavior. No one can deny that a neat environment really help one to success at the beginning.

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There always be a heated discussion that students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not. As an old Chinese saying goes, “people who make themselves in order can get their lives in order”. I, indeed, totally favor the idea that student（students） who keeps a good habit are closer to the door called success. To demonstrate my idea, I would use two leading reasons as follow.


CFirst, the scientist says peoples’ brains can work more efficiently in the neat area than in a mess. This point of view is definitely reasonable. For examples, students have to find some particular reference books when they do their homework or write a paper, it saves more time if the place is well organized(这里偷换了主语啊，前面是students后一句变成it了，可以用they can save more time……). In addition, psychologists claim than（that）people who work in neat environment usually have good mood which makes them do thing more efficient. As for a student, he or she will surely do their studies in shorter time than the others which will lead to the better marks in examinations or other aspects（完成作业比较快就能得高分吗，这个似乎没什么逻辑啊）.+ V0 d) K& `. ]' @7 s

second, people who keep that habit can use the same manner in the studying case. If a person can makes his books well organized in bookshelf, he can also organize his study in the same way or even organize his life in a good way. When comes to the question that what is the key to success, many people say attitude. I think students who keep their room clean and tidy obviously have a good attitude to life and that means they are optimistic to their lives which ensure they way to success. （没有发现什么错误但是也没有什么亮点，用词太单一，good ，organized 什么的第二次用时可以用其他的词替换 ）



In conclusion, we can see one’s characteristic through his behavior. No one can deny that a neat environment really help one to success at the beginning （结尾比较平凡不能给人留下深刻印象）

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11月22日 独立与综合
我作文在电脑里我电脑现在上不去网。。
先拿同学的电脑占个座。。
明早之前肯定交

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:) 1122独立作文 谢谢大家的指导:)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.
There are some special methods for parents to educate their young children. The mothers listen to Mozart’s music in order to give the babies some former education. No one can deny that people who are well- educated acquired knowledge in different fields. When comes to the topic whether playing sports teaches people more lessons about life, I, personally, totally acclaim that people learn a lot about the life in the process of doing sports. I will support my point with three persuasive reasons.
First of all, playing sports teach us a lesson about how to communicate with the others. While we have a sport activity, we have to find other players to act as our teammates or rivals Majority kinds of sports can not played by only one persons, for examples, soccer need twenty-two players for a real game and basket need ten players. That is to say, when you play sports, you have to make good communication with your coaches, teammate or even rivals. During the process of playing we use body language and words to understand the emotion of each other. This is really an important skill in our whole life and maybe will influence our relationship with others.


Secondly, playing sports also raise our responsible sense of teamwork. There is always a captain in each team and he or she is the center of the team. Players in the same team listen to the captain and help each other in order to beat other teams. As a team, players have to focus on certain goal or agree to the best method which will lead to their success. If you are playing for a game, you can not just think of yourself. Sometimes you have an excellent chance to get a score or maybe you are going to be the MVP of the game, but as a member in your team, you have to give the opportunities to the other members.

Finally, what contribute most to us is that playing sports rebuild our characteristics. There are always some good qualities for us to learn from an athlete. Scientist found that people who play sports are more patient than others. In addition, majority of they are out-going and easy to talk with.
All in all, playing sports teach us lessons in different fields, not only in the internal parts, but also in the way how we get well along with the others.

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11.22独立已改

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There are some special methods for parents to educate their young children. The mothers listen to Mozart’s music in order to give the babies some former education. No one can deny that people who are well- educated acquired（acquire） knowledge in different fields. When comes to the topic whether playing sports teaches people more lessons about life, I, personally, totally acclaim that people learn a lot about the life in the process of doing sports. I will support my point with three persuasive reasons.

First of all, playing sports teach us a lesson about how to communicate with the others. While we have a sport activity, we have to find other players to act as our teammates or rivals Majority kinds of sports can not played by only one persons, for examples, soccer need twenty-two players for a real game and basket need ten players. That is to say, when you play（are playing） sports, you have to make good communication with your coaches, teammate or even rivals. During the process of playing we use body language and words to understand the emotion of each other. This is really an important skill in our whole life and maybe will influence our relationship with others.

Secondly, playing sports also raise our responsible sense of teamwork. There is always a captain in each team and he or she is the center of the team. Players in the same team listen to the captain and help each other in order to beat other teams. As a team, players have to focus on certain goal or agree to the best method which will lead to their success. If you are playing for（in）
a game, you can not just think of yourself. Sometimes you have an excellent chance to get a score or maybe you are going to be the MVP of the game, but as a member in your team, you have to give the opportunities to the other members.(好像没什么逻辑啊，为什么明明有很好的机会进球却必须要把机会给别人呢，万一别人那里不好投球呢，我不太懂)

Finally, what contribute most to us is that playing sports rebuild our characteristics. There are always some good qualities for us to learn from an athlete. Scientist found that people who play sports are more patient than others. In addition, majority of they(them) are out-going and easy to talk with.

All in all, playing sports teach us lessons in different fields, not only in the internal parts, but also in the way how we get well along with the others.
觉得你写的很好呀，几乎没有发现什么错误。不过虽然内容不差但是也没有什么出彩的地方，比较中规中矩
25# tuxinyi

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1123 独立一篇
谢谢大家帮我批改。。

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1123
独立一篇

谢谢大家帮我批改:D

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1123
综合一篇

谢谢大家帮我改作文:D

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11.23 作业批改完毕

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加油哈！~

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1122 revised by ttuuttuu
sorry  自己有點問題沒上來改~~報歉~

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.

There are some special methods for parents to educate their young children. The mothers listen to Mozart’s music in order to give the babies some former education. No one can deny that people who are well- educated acquired knowledge in different fields. When comes to the topic whether playing sports teaches people more lessons about life, I, personally, totally acclaim that people learn a lot about the life in the process of doing sports. I will support my point with three persuasive reasons.

與主題不相關的充字數的廢話 OG 有明確表示 建議不要!!!


First of all, playing sports teach us a lesson about how to communicate with the others. While we have a sport activity, we have to find other players to act as our teammates or rivals Majority kinds of sports cannot be played by only one person, for examples, soccer need twenty-two players for a real game and basket need ten players. That is to say, when you play sports, you have to make good communication with your coaches, teammate or even rivals. During the process of playing, we use body language and words to understand the emotion of each other. This is really an important skill in our whole life and maybe will influence our relationship with others.


Secondly, playing sports also raise our responsible sense of teamwork. There is always a captain in each team and he or she is the center of the team. Players in the same team listen to the captain and help each other in order to beat other teams. As a team, players have to focus on certain goal or agree to the best method which will lead to their success. If you are playing for a game, you cannot just think of yourself. Sometimes you have an excellent chance to get a score or maybe you are going to be the MVP of the game, but as a member in your team, you have to give the opportunities to the other members.
這段有點與上段的論點一樣~何不把兩段合在一起寫~讓teamwork的功能性更完整

Finally, what contribute most to us is that playing sports rebuild our characteristics. There are always some good qualities for us to learn from an athlete. Scientist found that people who play sports are more patient than others. In addition, majority of they are out-going and easy to talk with. 太短了  可以再放個例子讓他更有說服力


All in all, playing sports teach us lessons in different fields, not only in the internal parts, but also in the way how we get well along with the others.

結論句
OK~ 但可以再加強自己 支持的論點

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1124 独立交作业啦。。。

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上面是。。1125交作业。。日期打错了。。请大家帮我改哈。。

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11.26作业Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country
As technonlogy developed in the tweteenith century, people now have various kind of ways to learning about a foreign country. The way of which is the best for us to get informations about a foreign contury is definitely a hot issue, Some people hold the view that movies and tevesion shows contribute a lot to the spread of foreign culture, while others do not agree with ir. As far as I am concerned, newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning a foreign contury. I would like to used a couple of reasons to illustrate my idea.
First, newspapers and magazines are more accessible than other aproach in our daily life. Thanks to the vast numbers of the newspapers and magazines published, people can buy one at the book store in the street conner or the bus station. That is to say, the information about the foreign contury are more accessible for us than those culture spreading forms like movies or lectures. Therefore, the form of culture spreading as newspapers and magazines is quite an excellent way for people to get knowledge on the foreign countury.
Besides, the information in newsspapers and magazines are up-dated. Due to the publish periods of most newspapers and magazines are daily, weekly, or at least monthly, we can get the latest information to learn about a foreign country. Compared with other forms which we can acquie informations about foreign country, newspapers and magazines do have a shorter publish period and latter news.
Finally, newspapers and magazines are quite an easy-reading forms for us. There are some literature books which are really difficult to understand. When we come to learn about a foreign country, that means we know little about it and we can begin with the basic information. In addition, the information in the newspapers and magazines are quite close to our daily life and esay for us to understand.
Taking all the factors as I mentioned above, we can draw a conclusion that newspapers and magazines are the best way for us to learn about a foreign country. It is undenible that newspapers and magazines benefit us a lot when we learn about a forerign country, not only for it’s accessible, but also for the latesr and detailed information.