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Under the increasing development of globalization, people are no longer content with studying Chinese culture, 这里要加个连接词and什么的吧they unviersally focusing on the foreign countries that they are interested in,including delicious food,traditional literature,fashion trendand some spectacular sceneries,etc.Many intermediate （这个是中间的意思吧，你是想表达intermedia???）could be chosed(chose) on learning a foreign country,and newspapers and magnize(s) are the two of which are recognized as effective ways,but it is incorrect(incorrected) to say that they are the best ways of learning a foreign country.
Newspapers andmagnize may convey people the latest news and events happened in the foreigncountry which they like,such as politics,army,entertainment,food and otheraspects written or drawn in the special columns.Readers will realize the latestnews by newspapers which report the vital events—often the economy,contruction,travel tips and law suits. Magnizes (magazines)will give their pursuers a world(比较抽象) on different special respects.For example,food magnizes(magazines) teach readers how to prepare various kinds of declious food if theylike,sport（s） magnizes record the matches of the sport stars to meet the fans’content, andother special magnizes (magazines)also play an important role in people’s life.
: G3 p$ v: L4 H1 f' O     However,It is hard for them to show (show sth to sb个人感觉这样用比较顺)readers most of the funny tales or momentous （这个单词表示重要的场合，决定或者日子等用在这修饰accident不妥吧= = ,我知道了，omg,你是想表达momentous incident吧~~~）accidents about the foreign country.So the limited scope of newspapers and magnizes omewhat 神马意思？？？你是不是不再word里打的。。。decrease their values,which adversely spur people convert their eyes onto computer or some world expositions, containing innumerable information, torealize the foreign country.Computer possesses a large amount of information, from which you can type the tips for searching the contents on the Internet, with the related ones.World expositions,such as the one held in Shang Hai not long ago exhabits as many traditional and fashional objects as people can imagine,not only one foreign country,but also the worldwide art and music included.
（好长的句子==总感觉后面那句加在这里语法不通，用such as 可能好一点）
      Besides,newspapersand
magnize printed in paper could not offer people a vivid impression of the country,which can be conveniently compensated （赔偿？？？）by movies and television.Characters molded in the movies and TV series may directly tell（表达让人们了解，用其他词可能更好） people the custom of citizen in  dressing, speaking, activity, traditional festivals, planting, etc.  And some live shows and broadcasts will give people visual presentations, as well as audio ones about the events going on in that foreign country. The British Broadcast Corporation— a world-influential television center — reports daily news, introduce the fantastic world through exploring shows, and they also make some interviews with the public figures around the world,from which audience will be rapidly familiar with the some major parts of England and other foreign country.
$ `( i" ?+ o1 f; e. L     From the two above flaws depicted, it is obvious to say that newspapers and Magnize are not the best channels of learning a foreign country, eventhough they are imperative in people’s life as a tool of knowing about what is going on all over the world at the moment.
恩在词汇方面的确比较多样化，但是可能语法和拼写上要注意一下下，还有就是整篇文章的结构比较散一点，优势需要回顾论点才能明白你想论证什么。。。一起加油吧。。。

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11月11日作业
  Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country？% @: K9 W& z) m2 W* u; ~

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   Under the increasing 这个多余了 development of globalization,最好是 :under the process of globalization people are no longer content with studying Chinese culture,they unviersally focusing on the foreign countries that they are interested in,including delicious food,traditional literature,fashion trendand some spectacular sceneries,etc.Many intermediate could be chosed on learning a foreign country,and newspapers and magnize are the two of which are recognized as effective ways,but it is incorrect to say that they are the best ways of learning a foreign country.! n) \& b9 C8 v" p4 g0 k6 S

     Newspapers and magnizes may convey people the latest news 我觉得网络更快吧 and events happened in the foreign country which they like,such as politics,army,entertainment,food and otheraspects written or drawn in the special columns.Readers will realize the latestnews by newspapers which report the vital events—often the economy,contruction,travel tips and law suits. Magnizes will give their pursuers a world on different special respects.For example,foodmagnizes teach readers how to prepare various kinds of declious food if theylike,sport magnizes record the matches of the sport stars to meet the fans’content,andother special magnizes also play an important role in people’s life ，一般来说第一段就开始支持本文观点，进行反驳了，这里拖得太长。 让步不要让太多，否则看着觉得你论证没底气。
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     However,It is hard for them to show readers most of the funny tales or momentous accidentsabout the foreign country.So the limited scope of newspapers and magnizesomewhat decrease their values,which adversely spur people convert their eyesonto computer or some world expositions,containing innumerable information, to realize the foreign country.Computer possesses a large amount of information, from which you can type the tips for searching the contents on theInternet,with the related ones.World expositions,such as the one held in Shang Hainot long ago exhabits as many traditional and fashional objects as people canimagine,not only one foreign country,but also the worldwide art and musicincluded.

     论证观点不清晰，最好每段开头就点出观点。

    Besides,newspapersand magnize printed in paper could not offer people a vivid impression of thecountry,which can be conveniently compensated by movies andtelevision.这样写就挺好Characters molded in the movies and TV series may directly tellpeople the custom of citizen in  dressing, speaking, activity, traditional festivals, planting, etc.  And some live shows and broadcasts will give people visualpresentations,as well as audio ones about the events going on in that foreigncountry. The British Broadcast Corporation— a world-influential television center — reports daily news,introduce thefantastic world through exploring shows,and they also make some interviews withthe public figures around the world,from which audience will be rapidlyfamiliar with the some major parts of England and other foreign country

       这样写也可以，但是有点不合常规来着，第一段写太多，如果计时，可能出现时间不够的问题
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     From the twoabove flaws depicted,it is obvious to say that newspapers and Magnizes re not the best channels of learning a foreign country,eventhough they are imperative in people’s life as a tool of knowing about what isgoing on all over the world at the moment.

语言很成熟了，写得很不错，接着要做的就是计时写了，一起加油吧
     

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E这次作文没有计时，多多指正。

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Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.



     Learning about a country that you are interested in involves lots of channels,including reading  newspapers and magazines,watching TV shows,traveling for the country,etc.Andgoing for a visit on the
museum  is also a effective way of knowing about the country,but it is not thebest way of learning about .
     As an exhibitionplace of history,museums merely showing people
the country’s golorious yesterday inhabit usfrom knowing about the modern times.While,this imperfection is made up bylooking through newspapers and magazines with special columns,which tell readers what have been or is happening in that country they are focusing on,themost supernatural thing only merged in that place,public figures in different domains,and it may even print most respects of this country,from politics,food,music,celebrities,vital events to various funny tips.In addition,this channel fundamentally permits readers realizing the country without wasting toomuch time and money on visiting the museum which is far away from where theylive.
     Besides, whatare displayed in the museums often contain a small part of the country,it,tosome extent,can not satisfy the curiosity of the visitors.Some information orculture which is abstract shouldn’t be found in the museums,such as foodculture,traditional living habit,communication manner,language and others.These apects may be absorbed by watching TV shows and disco.They will vividly talk onas many topics as possible to give audience both audio and visual impression. There are many channels for audience to choose,they will enjoy the culture theylike,only needs them using the remote controlers when they are sitting in thesofa at home.
     Compared with museums,traveling for the destination is without doubt a more incisive channelon studying the country.When people visit in the country and live for atime,they will unconsciously, subconsciously and consciously get mass information from the local people,as well as their experiences.This way offer travelers a notonly zero-distance but also direct chance to feel the grumous atmosphere ofthat place,which is the most incisive way of studying that .In this way it is alsobetter than visiting museums.
     Discussed by the above three factors,it is not hard to reach the disagreement on the best way oflearning about a country is visiting museums,even though antiques displayed inthe museums convey people the prescious history of the country that is farbehind modern men.


求重拍！一起加油！

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改好了哦，一起加油！！