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用大板砖把脸拍成板砖形状后，就再也不怕被拍了。

请大板砖伺候。

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沙发上热个身。

Why people attend college

Main point of mine:
1 good salary
2 have more opportunities to find a good job
3 extend his social relationship net


Lots of students who graduate from high school are willing to attend college instead of finding a job immediately. That’s because after studying in college for several years, people find better offers with higher salary with holding the degree , they become more competitive while finding a job and have more opportunities to find a good job, they can also wider his social relationship net which is beneficial to his life in the future additionally.
First the people who get a degree in college are more possible able gain the offer with high salary. People who holding college degrees, such like computer science, biochemistry, archeology, have more option to enter into a high-tech company or research institution where can provide higher salary. Besides this people will find more attractive offer with higher salary after accumulating several years experiences when they want to change another high-tech company.
Second, people holding college degree are more likely to find a job than people without a degree. For example, company which involving international trade would rather desire a people who have foreign language degree than a people without a degree, even if the previous one got a little bit lower score of entrance quiz or interview. People with college degree have more opportunities to find a job according to his interest.
Third, absolutely, people will make at least several friends during the campus life. People extend his social relationship net in the college which is beneficial to his life in the future. In the modern society, there is no big project can be implemented only by one kind of science. People who study in college increase more probability which they can cooperate with each other in the future. They can find their best cooperating company when they were in college rather than in after several years’ cooperation with fraction.

topics_jasonUID: 2859308

11月20日交
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities

11月20日交
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?
孩子
1 文盲多，人性变坏—》犯罪 失业 不稳定
2 孩子扫盲后 成年可以靠自学
3 孩子是范才教育，大学是专才教育

When asked how to measure the integrated national power of a country, some people believe that it is the military, such as how many soldiers the country has or whether it has the nuclear weapons, the other people believe that it is finance, such as how much of gold the country stores or how much of improving rate of the GDP in a country. But I would say it is the education. The education is the most standard to measure a national power of a country because it symbolizes the technology and civilization of a nation and determine the hope and future of a nation. For successful development of a country, government should focus its budget more on different educations, such as children education, universities education, remote education and so on.  Focusing on which kind of education is actually a problem,I believe it shoud be that government should focus its budget more on very young children education for several reasons.

First of all, whether more young children can obtain education is bounded up with the stability of a society. Assuming a smallyoung child, if he has no opportunity to take education, it is very hard for him to survive in the today’s competitive society when he grows up, not mention to find a good job. So tTo the surviving natural of human being, he would likely to rob others or deal some criminal business which endangers the stability of society seriously. According to an official statistic, it is said most of criminals don’t (gain) obtain good children education in their childhood, especially in the country with higher unemployment rate. So young children education is essential to the stability of the society.

Second, compared with the university education as a further education, young children education, on the other hand ,as a basic education, takes more fundamental function for people’s growth. For example, after taking a young child education, the child has lots of choices to choose for his further development. He can choose to study in the special cook school, study in the art school, or enter the normal high school. If he has no opportunity to take the children education, it is hardly for child to take any kinds of further education. Only providing better and more opportunities of young children education, children can haveobtain more choices for his further development in his life.

Besides, compared with the universities education which is a kind of special orientational education, young children education is sort of a prevalent education, its education range is so wide and the content is mainly about common acknowledge of the life which is essential for intelligence development. I believe that children who have no opportunity to have children education are likely to be not only rude manner and lack of communication skills, but their behaviors tend to be more awkward than the children who take good advantages of a good children education. For example, children without good children education usually won’t say “thank you” when someone help them, and they have no patience to read a newspaper or other books to acquire latest information. So it essential for each child to take a good children education because of prevalent meaning. On the other hand, the universities education takes special area researches into account, it’s not for every one to go further study.

topics_jasonUID: 2859308

非常感谢你的耐心和对我的帮助。不好意思，等级不够，无法黏贴附件。
11月22日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.Disagree
1 失实 ，都被编辑过 代表政府目的
2 不是实时，跟不上形势
3 信息量有限，面窄，

When asked about which of the best way of learning about a foreign country, majority of people claim the newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning because I can acquire a great deal of information, events and fashion trends in foreign country. But in spite of this belief, I doubt whether it is the best way of learning a foreign country in today’s society.Because they are less credible, outdated and not
comprehensive.I do not agree with the statement that newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning foreign country.

First of all, the content of newspapers and magazines is usually edited by the reporters for sort of purposes which are bound up with business or politics, it is not easy to verify or distinguish the truth just by reading the newspapers and magazines. To understand the point of this, it is necessary to analyze an article of newspaper. Taking an article named “Fish oil’s function in foreign country” as an example, it describes a kind of fish oil sold in US which is very popular in US acoording to the article. At first it comes into my mind directly that the fish oil is a kind of necessary nutrition food to people rather than an optional food. After checking the author’s background, I find the author is just the consultant of an oil fish company and my friends in US said that fish oil is not as popular as the description in the article at all. Obviously the article in the newspaper is sort of a kind of advertisment and doesn’t reflect the real information in foreign country. In conclusion, some newspapers and magazines usually present some articles for business purpose which is difficult for readers to acquire the most truly information of foreign country.

Second, compared with the internet which can offer you the real-time news and events happened all around the world, the newspapers and magazines can’t reach it. we usually obtain the news and information which delayed at least one day, not to mention some magazines is monthly. However as long as the development of the world nowadays, it is necessary to obtain the latest and real-time news happened in foreign country, which can help me to appreciate the foreign country completely, not only just the fashion trends or entertaining gossip of stars in foreign country.

Besides, the board of information of newspapers and magazines is so narrow, which can’t satisfy my demand for acknowledge of foreign country. As we know, different kinds of newspapers put emphasizes on different fields, such as economic newspapers, health magazines. I must pay more money on buying other newspapers and magazines if I want to acquire information about other fields. It is inconvenient for me to appreciate foreign country in this way. On the other hand, compared with newspapers and magazines surfing on the internet to obtain the information, civilizations and geography acknowledge of foreign countries is a much better. In addition, lots of pictures and videos on the internet are much more impressive than reading newspapers and magazines.

In conclusion, newspapers and magazines is not the best way of learning foreign county because it is less credible, outdated and no comprehensive. Maybe internet is a good choice of learning foreign country.

topics_jasonUID: 2859308

11月18日交it is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends

Disagree
因为不能常见面，没有交集，联络少。
1 网路 –》保持联络
2 朋友的定义 不需要每天在一起，精神层面 反而会加强
3 新环境有新朋友，如果好还能把老朋友带过来。

People used to think that it is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of old friends because people have little overlap with their fiends in lives which is thought as the fundamental base between friends. But I disagree with the statement. There is no denying that there is actual a risk of losing an old friend, but along with development of today’s society we have more approaches to maintain or establish the fundamental base between friends by taking advantages of new communication tools, besides we should refine the definition of friend nowadays.

First of all, to understand the point of my argument that development of technology contributes to making friends, it is necessary to recall the communication method among people in the past. We should still remember the days before when we communicate with our families or friends by writing letters before. It has an obviously weakness that we must wait for a long time to get a reply letters from our friends. Even though the widespread application of telephone or cell phone, people seldom communicate with long distance friend because of the high price of the communication fee except some emergencies happened. So moving to a new city far away and lacking of communication do lead to lose old friends. However, along with the development of technology, we have lots of approaching to get in touch with our old friends anywhere and anywhere. For instance, I can use QQ and MSN to communicate with my old friends not only they are completely for free, but they integrate the video chatting function which make chatting looks like we chat face to face. Also, the drastic reduction of communication fee makes people communication more common, we don’t worried about losing friend because of lacking communication.

Moreover, definition of friends should be reconsidered because I think the real friends won’t lose each other just for the reason of distance and less frequency communication. The essence of friendship should reach the psychological and spiritual plane rather than the physical plane. For example , I moved to BeiJing which far away from my hometown because I studied there, for many reasons , such as hard study and researches in the lab, I seldom connected with my friend who still studied in my home town. But when I returned to my home town, we didn’t feel unfamiliar to each other at all, on the contrary, we feel more intimated to each other.

In addition, the nature of the spirit of friendship is sharing happiness, I would share all of the happiness with my old friends, such like the local snacks, traditional civilizations in BeiJing. It is said that friends have the same interest and hobbits, maybe my old friend would come to the new city as well for my introduction of the new city.

For what have been discussed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that moving to a new city won’t lead to people to lose old friends.

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5# topics_jason When asked about which of the best way of learning about a foreign country, majority of people claim the newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning because I can acquire a great deal of information, events and fashion trends in foreign country. But in spite of this belief, I doubt whether it is the best way of learning a foreign country in today’s society, because they are less credible, outdated and not comprehensive. I do not agree with the statement that newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning foreign country.

First of all, the content of newspapers and magazines is usually edited by the reporters for sort of purposes which are bound up with business or politics, it is not easy to verify or distinguish the truth just by reading the newspapers and magazines. To understand the point of this, it is necessary to analyze an article of newspaper. Taking an article named “Fish oil’s function in foreign country” as an example. It describes a kind of fish oil sold in US which (指代的是鱼油，但which接在the USA后就错了) is very popular in US, according to the article. At first it comes into my mind directly that the fish oil is a kind of necessary nutrition food to people rather than an optional food. After checking the author’s background, I find the author is just the consultant of an oil fish company and my friends in US said that fish oil is not as popular as the description (mentioned) in the article at all. Obviously the article in the newspaper is sort of a kind of (重复了) advertisement and doesn’t reflect the real information in foreign country. In conclusion, some newspapers and magazines usually present some articles for business purpose which is difficult for readers to acquire the most truly information of foreign country.

Second, compared with the internet which can offer you the real-time (current?) news and events happened all around the world, (while) the newspapers and magazines can’t reach it (report in time?). We usually obtain the news and information which delayed at least one day, not to mention some magazines is monthly. However as long as the development (?) of the world nowadays, it is necessary to obtain the latest and real-time news happened in foreign country, which can help me to appreciate (? Catch up with) the foreign country completely, not only just the fashion trends or entertaining gossip of stars in foreign country (, but also…).

Besides, the board of information of newspapers and magazines is so narrow, which can’t satisfy my demand for acknowledge of foreign country. As we know, different kinds of newspapers put emphasizes on different fields, such as economic newspapers, health magazines. I must pay more money on buying other newspapers and magazines if I want to acquire information about other fields. It is inconvenient for me to appreciate foreign country in this way. On the other hand, compared with newspapers and magazines surfing on the internet to obtain the information, civilizations and geography acknowledge of foreign countries is a much better. In addition, lots of pictures and videos on the internet are much more impressive than reading newspapers and magazines.

( G2 K5 P) p$ S0 cIn conclusion, newspapers and magazines is not the best way of learning foreign county because it is less credible, outdated and no comprehensive. Maybe internet is a good choice of learning foreign country.
有些词的理解不准确，使用不太恰当。论点不错。但论述较多，例子很少。优点就不说了，说了些缺点，见谅。
大家继续一起努力吧。

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When asked about which of the best way of learning about a foreign country, majority of people claim the newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning because I can acquire a great deal of information, events and fashion trends in foreign country. But in spite of this belief, I doubt whether it is the best way of learning a foreign country in today’s society. Because they are less credible, outdated and not comprehensive. (你这是想说?)I do not agree with the statement that newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning foreign country.; u5 Z# J0 z; G
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First of all, the content of newspapers and magazines is usually edited by the reporters for sort of purposes which are bound up with business or politics, it is not easy to verify or distinguish the truth just by reading the newspapers and magazines. To understand the point of this, it is necessary to analyze an article of newspaper. (Taking an article named “Fish oil’s function in foreign country” as an example; it describes a kind of fish oil sold in US which is very popular in US according to the article. At first it comes into my mind directly that the fish oil is a kind of necessary nutrition food to people rather than an optional food. After checking the author’s background, I find the author is just the consultant of an oil fish company and my friends in US said that fish oil is not as popular as the description in the article at all. Obviously the article in the newspaper is sort of a kind of advertisement and doesn’t reflect the real information in foreign country.)(这一段的内容有点太多)。In conclusion, some newspapers and magazines usually present some articles for business purpose which is difficult for readers to acquire the most truly information of foreign country.
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Second, compared with the internet which can offer you the real-time news and events happened all around the world, the newspapers and magazines can’t reach it. We usually obtain the news and information which delayed at least one day, not to mention some magazines is monthly. However as long as the development of the world nowadays, it is necessary to obtain the latest and real-time news happened in foreign country, which can help me to appreciate the foreign country completely, not only just the fashion trends or entertaining gossip of stars in foreign country.
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Besides, the board of information of newspapers and magazines is so narrow, which can’t satisfy my demand for acknowledge of foreign country. As we know, different kinds of newspapers put emphasizes on different fields, such as economic newspapers, health magazines. I must pay more money on buying other newspapers and magazines if I want to acquire information about other fields. It is inconvenient for me to appreciate foreign country in this way. On the other hand, compared with newspapers and magazines surfing on the internet to obtain the information, civilizations and geography acknowledge of foreign countries is a much better. In addition, lots of pictures and videos on the internet are much more impressive than reading newspapers and magazines.

In conclusion, newspapers and magazines is not the best way of learning foreign county because it is less credible, outdated and no comprehensive. Maybe internet is a good choice of learning foreign country.( 你这句式领一个观点了)
改好了，注意：吧文章句子内缩短的缩短。

topics_jasonUID: 2859308

11月24日In the busy and crowded world today, we should not expect people to be polite to each other
Disagree
1 polite is是一种从小养成的习惯manner 与是否busy无关， ceo president 排队
2 politeness，传统友谊，有助于促进工作效率，不用协调关系
3 politeness 机会更多

In recent years, there is a general view that in the busy and crowded world today, we should not expect people to be polite to each other. Although this view is popular to some extent, there is little evidence that people can accept politeness behaviors, such as jumping queues or taking advantages of somebody without saying “thank you”, because there is not enough time to behave in politeness manner. In my opinion, I do disagree the previous statement , I think being polite to each other is a kind of custom that formed in one’s childhood and is a measurement of the modern society, even a kind of the marked civilization of the human beings. But it has nothing to do with the limited time or crowded world.
First and foremost, Politeness is a kind of good manner which formed in one’s childhood or trained in one’s familiy. A person lived in the world has being influenced be other people surround him since he was born. There is no denying that each parent will teach their kid to be polite in one’s childhood, such as must say “Thank you” when received presents from other people, must say”excuse me” when disturb others. As long as the grown up, the politeness behavior and character has formed in children, and children will find a the trace to be a gentleman or a gracful lady by themselves. No matter what kind of situation, they will take the politeness behavior. Takeing the President of my college as an exmaple, he gave a lecture to our fresh student and will attend to next meeting. But we still have lots of questions to ask about him. To solve this problem, he leave the e-mail adress to our fresh students and make the permission that he will anwer all of our questions.I think this is a kind of polite behavior and respect to each other, but does not have any business with limited time.
Moreover, being polite to each other is a kind o f manner or rules which your must complied, expecially in the busy and crowded world, people need to be much more polite to each other, otherwise the rude and tough behavior will cause much more trouble to people’s busy life. Peole lived in the politeness circustmance for many many years, along with the development of human society, from neolithic to the modern society, we learn that politeness behavior is the symbol of progress in the history of human being, which give respect and confidence to each other. In the mordern society, people has to burden lots of pressure frome many aspects and stay in a intension statue, so politeness behavior to each other can relieve the strees to some extent, or will bring terrible consequence. For instance, a person hurried to buy the train tickets, as he was too busy to keep in the queue, then he jumped the queue, the people in front of him quarlled with him, the situation upgrade to fighting of several people , fiinally they were taken in to police station. I can easily find out expecially in the busy and crowded world, people need more politeness behavior, maybe if the person can explain to other people gentlely, the concequence may turn over.
In addition, being polite to each other can earn lots of chances and respect from other people, which can bring benefit for him and embody the essence of the poeple. To understan the point of this, I will give an exmaple to inllustrate that, in china, thers is a national officer exmination, there is interesting test in the interview sction, the interview set a secen that a old man stand out side of the test room where all of the interview taker wait, but there is not enogh chair for the old man to sit. Interview want to test whether the taker has politeness behavior to the old man spntaneouly. Finally, the interview taker who gave the sit to the old man passed to the interview.
For what has discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion, being pollite to eachi other has nothing to do with the busy and crowded world, our life need more and more politenes behaviors.

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10月30日交It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life, agree or disagree.Disagree
1 exaggerate –》造成ideal 想法 冲突与现实romantic love
2 illusion
--》superman 摔死
--》鬼害怕
3 不合常理
There is general view that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life. In my opinion, I strongly disagree the statement for several reasons. Although people can learn from the characters and obtain some truth from fascinating plots of movies, the movies can not inflect the real life like a mirror. There is a huge gap between the real life and movies.


First and foremost, the plots create a kind of ideal scenes which can not be finding in real life. It influences the viewers inconsciouslyunconsciously, they imitate the behaviors of movies to deal with the event happened in the real life. In addition,Eventually, the movies form aan ideal trend for which people to follow hope to happen in their real life, but in actually it hardly happen in real life. The confliction between real life and virtual plotillusory plots cause many people into trouble. For instance, for more atrraction from people director portraey a romanticeromantic love story which involves diliciousdelicious food, gentle servants behavior and vague candle in a luxurious restaurant, needless to say some elaorateelaborate plots of coincident meeting with a noble boy or being fallen love by with a handsome man. However,But it will not merely happen in the real life, viewers always deal with the confliction between real life and ideal scene from moviesso the movies always take the confliction and suffering to the viewers.
Furthermore, the movie will take lots of peoplebring illusions to viewer which willviewers and may cause terrible trouble. Especially to kids, they usually can’t distingushdistinguish the real life and illusoryvirtual movies. Director use lotskinds of impletmentimplements tools and special methods toeffects to reach exggeratexaggeratinge the effects of the movies for different purposes, such as horrible voice voicesand , scared music backgroudbackground and a walking man without head. If small kids deem the illusion as a real life, they will get into trouble. For example, a small kid jump from sixth floors of the building, because he thought superman in the movie can flyied andto save him. What is worse, is that, when the reporter interview the views of other small kids to the view of the event, the other small kids saidanwered maybe his action of calling superman is wrong. What a riediculous answer! So, to the youth we should not give them the illusion movies to watch. we should prevent small kid from indulging into the illusion of movies.
Last but not least, more and more movies nowadays are not reasonable to real life. In pursuit of money, directors preferare likely to invite famous movie stars to act in their movies regardless of reasonablilityreasonability of the plots. For example , the famous movies stars will never die even if he was shot for more than ten times, even the main character can come alivebe alive again after he died for three times. I think people would rather read books than watch movies with unreasonable plots.
In sum, it is not worth watching movies that can teach us something about life, I highly recommend that people should read more books or biographies to learn more about real lives..





There is general view that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life. In my opinion, I strongly disagree the statement for several reasons. Although people can learn from the characters and obtain some truth from fascinating plots of movies, the movies can not inflect the real life like a mirror. There is a huge gap between the real life and movies.
First and foremost, the plots create a kind of ideal scenes which can not be finding in real life. It influences the viewers unconsciously, they imitate the behaviors of movies to deal with the event happened in real life. Eventually, the movies form an ideal trend for people to follow in their real life, but in actually it hardly happen in real life. The confliction between real life and illusory plots cause many people into trouble. For instance, director portray a romantic love story which involves delicious food, gentle servants and vague candle in a luxurious restaurant, needless to say some elaborate plots of coincident meeting with a noble boy or being fallen love with a handsome man. However, it merely happen in the real life, viewers always deal with the confliction between real life and ideal scene from movies
Furthermore, the movie will bring illusions to viewers and may cause terrible trouble. Especially to kids, they usually can’t distinguish the real life and illusory movies. Director use kinds of implements and special effects to reach exaggerating effects of the movies for different purposes, such as horrible voices, scared music background and a walking man without head. If small kids deem the illusion as a real life, they will get into trouble. For example, a small kid jump from sixth floor of the building, because he thought superman in the movie can fly to save him. What is worse, when the reporter interview other small kids to the view of the event, the other small kids said maybe his action of calling superman is wrong. What a ridiculous answer! So, we should prevent small kid from indulging into the illusion of movies.
Last but not least, more and more movies nowadays are not reasonable to real life. In pursuit of money, directors prefer to invite famous movie stars to act in their movies regardless of reasonability of the plots. For example , the famous movies stars will never die even if he was shot for more than ten times, even the main character can come alive again after he died for three times. I think people would rather read books than watch movies with unreasonable plots.
In sum, it is not worth watching movies that can teach us something about life, I highly recommend that people should read more books or biographies to learn more about real lives.


11.26  想S...

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1107  写的不好，请狠拍。
disagree
1 跟年代无关，例子 距离 辐射死 盖茨
2 成功的定义。

When it comes to success, there is a general view that it is easier to be successful in the past than it is today. Actually I do not agree with the view because reaching success has nothing to do with the environment or external elements, such as the period when you birth or circumstance where you live. The only path approaching to success is
striving for the goal.
It is said “Success equal to ninety-nine percentages of hardworking plus one percentage talent”. It is obvious that how important of hard working. No matter people live in the past or today, the external propulsion can not be the decisive factors of reaching success while the internal motivation determine whether people can get the goal To understand the point of this, it is necessary to analyze some examples about success. Maria Curie who is the famous physician in the history, she got Nobel Prize for finding the radioactive elements of radium and uranium. This discovery took her several years and injured her body seriously. It is impossible for her to success without her enthusiasm on the science and hard working. What worse is that she devotes herself under the radioactive rays! Is it easy for people in the past to be successful? At least on the point of devotion of life is a sort of hard choice time. With rapid development of today society, it is impossible to get success without hard working and diligent attitude like in the past as well. When it comes about the dot-com booming, people can easily mention Bill Gates. People would say that he grasps the great opportunity of dot-com booming and good luck helps him a lot. However, we can find an opposite answer by reading his biography. It is said “Opportunity is always for people who is ready”. By reading his biography, I learned that Bill Gate
spent all most two quarters of his time on coding before he established the greatest company of Microsoft. He is sophisticated in software analysis on both shortcomings and advantages, such as DOS
and UNIX operation system without unfriendly graphic interface. Without his hard working
and analysis, he can not propose the concept of Window operation system which has the friendliest graphic interface and conquers world since that moment. So
hardworking, creation ability and spirit of persistence are the main decisive factor of success to people in past and today.
Last but not least, I would refine the definition of success. What is the real meaning of success? The great invention on science or founding the greatest company?
Neither of both I think. I believe the true faith
of life is devotion. No matter how tiny of the contribution I have done to the society or human, it is can be recognized as success. For instance, my dream is to be a doctor in the future. At that time I can not only cure people in my country, but also I can fly to other countries, especially some poor countries in Africa, and help the children who have been suffering disease when they were born.
In sum, being successful all depends on the internal motivation of people themselves, no matter in the past or today when you live, you can reach success eventually through hard working.

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It is said “Success equal to ninety-nine percentages of hardworking plus one percentage talent”. It is obvious that how important of hard working. No matter people live in the past or today, the external propulsion can not be the decisive factors of reaching success while the internal motivation determine whether people can get the goal To understand the point of this, it is necessary to analyze some examples about success. Maria Curie who is the famous physicist and chemist in the history, she got Nobel Prize for finding the radioactive elements of radium and uranium. This discovery took her several years and injured her body seriously. It is impossible for her to success without her enthusiasm on the science and hard working. What worse is that she devotes herself under the radioactive rays! Is it easy for people in the past to be successful? At least on the point of devotion of life is a sort of hard choice time. （没读懂这句,总感觉这句话缺主语，似乎 on the point of devotion of life 是状语，要当主语的话是不是应该去掉on？也可能是我没理解的问题）With rapid development of today society(google 了一下，似乎都是 today’s society 或者 society today 或者nowadays society), it is impossible to get success without hard working and diligent attitude like in the past as well. When it comes to the dot-com booming, people can easily mention Bill Gates. People would say that he grasps the great opportunity of dot-com booming and good luck helps him a lot. However, we can find an opposite answer by reading his biography. It is said “Opportunity is always for people who is ready”. By reading his biography, I learned that Bill Gate 8 `1 ~' \( n' d6 v3 [5 \
spent all most two quarters(为什么不直接写half？) of his time on coding before he established the greatest company of Microsoft. He is sophisticated in software analysis on both shortcomings and advantages,（没懂，没有图形化界面难道就是所谓的analysis on shortcomings么） such as DOS and UNIX operation system without unfriendly graphic interface. Without his hard working and analysis, he can not propose the concept of Window（Windows） operation system which has the friendliest graphic interface and conquers world since that moment. So
hardworking, creation ability and spirit of persistence are the main decisive factor of success to（纯感觉，介词for比to合适） people in past and today.这段例子很丰富，呵呵借我偷来用用~谢谢，不过建议把这样长的一段分成两段，居里的例子更侧重说以前的人成功靠投身精神不容易，比尔的例子侧重说现在的人成功靠内在努力也不容易。
Last but not least, I would refine the definition of success. What is the real meaning of success? The great invention on science or founding the greatest company?Neither of both I think. I believe the true faith of life is devotion. No matter how tiny of the contribution I have done to the society or human, it is can be recognized as success. For instance, my dream is to be a doctor in the future. At that time I can not only cure people in my country, but also I can fly to other countries, especially some poor countries in Africa, and help the children who have been suffering disease when they were born. 感觉这段definition 放在靠前一点的地方比较好，都已经讨论半天了再说我是在这样的definition 的基础上，似乎有点不合逻辑。
In sum, being successful all depends on the internal motivation of people themselves, no matter in the past or today when you live, you can reach success eventually through hard working.
总体感觉你的语言不错，用词丰富，例子充实有说服力。
建议在文章的整体结构上再多构思一下。观点很重要，观点以什么样的顺序排列达到的效果也不一样。
我也喜欢不同意任何一边的写法，但组里有人建议一边倒得写法，在一篇幅不长的文章中不容易做到两方面都顾及周全，面面俱到。比如人家要你在时间的层面上比较，你要跳出这个层面，还要做到没有跑题嫌疑，实际上是自己加大了难度。
想问一下你是不是之前写过几类固定的话题，然后任何话题都可以套用的那种，就像tony教授的9个万能topic那样？我一直犹豫要不要采用这种。
仅是个人之见，有不可取的地方舍弃之~一起加油！

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement： Young people should try different job before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term
Agree
1 没人知道那个position合适 motto Dim tim Dunca
2 不断地更换可以更了解自己，认识更多朋友，帮助自己做决策
3 换很多工作可以让自己的阅历更丰富，增强各方面的能力，例如顾问
When it comes to finding a job of young people, there is a heated discussion that whether young people should try different jobs before they decide which job they will do in a long time. In my opinion, I agree with the statement for several reasons below.
First and foremost, no one can make sure the first job is
the most suitable to him. Since different people have different character, unless try different job can people
find a proper job. My motto is: you will never know what you can do till you try. Take a celebrity as an example, Tim Duncan, who is the most famous NBA star, before he joins
the NBA, he is a good swimmer. Since his reasonable changing on career choice, he reaches the success on court of NBA. Besides that, the characters play an import role on career choosing to people as well.. For example, a man who is open mind takes a library officer job. But he does not get any achievement feeling on that boring position, he decides to be a salesman as the second position. No doubt on the decision, he is so satisfied with contribution to company and earn more confidence in the
position of salesman. So it can easily draw the conclusion that young people should try different position until find the most appropriate career to them.
Furthermore, most of young people can not estimate and recognize themselves properly, so they can find more people to help them to estimate them during changing jobs. Actually, young people are more likely to lose confidence for failures. Due to the depression on the job, it is the right time for his colleagues or boss
to help them to analyze the problem or matching degree of the job. For example, I find my previous colleague has strong leadership during the parties and activities, but he always makes mistakes on coding of software, which need more patience and inspiration. I eagerly persuaded him to take the job of being a project
manager rather than to do coding jobs. After my boss received my recommended letter, he was transferred to another position of project manager. He wins great plausible triumph in that position. I think he must get acquainted with other people who can give him more valuable advice on the job decision.
Last but not least, people can take advantages of more experience to find more good jobs. Take the consultant as a example, with the development of the today’s society, more and more industrial fields interact with each other and overlapped industries emerge rapidly, if people have plenty of experience on different fields, the most hot position is being consultant.. The most famous consultant company is Mckensey, it is unbelievable that Mckensey CEO of Asian region has changed ten jobs before since he was a teenager.
In sum, young people should try their best on different job positions, but it is more important to find the right position which suits for himself.

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