Daily Writing - WoYaoChiJiTui的作文本

兔子加油UID: 2908816

LZ, 看到你改的作文啦，谢谢，改得很认真，那个倒装句帮我改得很好f哦
真觉得光这样在作文批改里交流很不方便，因为LZ的意见有一些我想跟LZ讨论一下，TO MAKE EVERY THING BETTER。。。比如说advocates我用的是名词，楼主想成动词的意思了，呵呵，还有voice是opinion的意思，如果用adopt搭配不好，用什么词跟voice搭配能有采纳意见的意思呢？还有，以前上课的时候老师有给我们指出effectiveness是有效果的，efficiency是有效率的，所以我把两个都放上来了，应该不算重复吧？下次如果有机会再互改希望我们能互相讨论多点互相进步，对了，你给我写的倒装句我很喜欢！BTW，我也12月考T，但是我现在写作文还会超时呢，真烦恼

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

11月29日作业 1篇综合TPO4

兔子加油UID: 2908816

e.....a little mistake

kaolaliangUID: 2758807

已改好，请查收

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

11月30日作业 1篇
综合TPO5

5huihuiUID: 2285610

积分不够发附件，所以贴在这了，请原谅哈~

The lecture completely refutes the reading passage since it claims none of three hypotheses(复数形式比较特殊，注意) about the usage of Chaco canyon in New Mexico is really convincing.

        According to the reading, the Chaco structure was a habitat for local residents. However, the professor points out that though its outside appearance seems like an apartment building, the inner situation is totally different. If hundreds of people had been living in this place, there must be a considerable number of fireplaces for cooking. Actually, even in the largest house the discovered remains of fireplace are proved to be available for only ten families at most.（原句没有表达出炉子不够多的感觉，所以我加了only）

        Then the professor casts doubt on the second interpretation that this canyon functioned as food storage, which was used to store food supplies. Since several exhibitions（这里听错了，应该是excavation） suggest not enough traces of grains or large containers have been discovered, he argues if this house was really used to store grains, there should have been be a great mount of maize and container remnants on the floor.

        Finally, the speech offers a different perspective on broken pots. It is said （这里最好指明是文章说还是lecture说）these old pots were used to build up the big house while now lying with them are some stones and other construction materials. They may be used to cook meals as well as contain water.(这里我把两句分开了，不然感觉一个完整简单句后面又跟一个and加after状语，感觉不对劲儿) And after the entire progress, the staff went away with these pots left there.(最后一段没有提文章的观点啊)

整体感觉没什么大问题，就是拼写错误有点多，基本上我红字标出来的单词大多是拼写错误。

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

12月1日作业 1篇
综合写作TPO6

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

12.2作业 1篇 综合TPO7

grandyangUID: 2730087

改好了

猪猪快跑UID: 2852764

23# WoYaoChiJiTui
改好嘞~~
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WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

12月3日作业 2篇
TPO8综合+独立

robertxjUID: 2645881

26# WoYaoChiJiTui
独立改好~

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID: 2850295

12月4日作业 2篇
独立+tpo9

robertxjUID: 2645881

综合改好~

cckkll1994UID: 2952719

10.03 independent
revised by Colin