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Veronique~UID: 2627304

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Veronique~UID: 2627304

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life


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There is no denying the fact that plying sports is beneficial to our body. Nevertheless, contrary to a large majority of people whose view point is that playing sports only brings people good health my firmly-held perspective is that playing sports teaches people more lessons about a life, which can be substantiated in the following parts.
Sports can show us the power of determined will. Most people must have the ordeal of struggling for the terminal during a long-distance running which calls for courage and perseverance. Only the people who has a iron will can get the destination even be the champion while other people relinquish just a few steps away from the ends becoming losers. Thus how playing sports teaches us that to hold a determined will and persist no matter how hard life is.
Furthermore,playing sports can also teaches us how significant teamwork is which I inferred form my own observation.During my middle school time, my class was place full of competition on study even the costs of clothes and where was no cooperation at all.In our class, rare classmates sat together disgussing the difficult questions,either about academic or daily life.This changed after a small fun-games competition during which we learned the importance of teamwork. The game,which rule is to tie up each people's calf and run together,was a huge challenge for us the people who did not have the sense of cooperation.After along period training,we all got the point of collaborating ,since even if there was a single people who ran faster or slower we would fall down together, although we didn't get the gold prize.
People say sports make life better. Sports is not only a good hobby which brings good health but also give us inspiration of life. Based on the above-listed evidence of issues discussed here.I may safely and firmly restate my stand point that playing sports teaches people more lessons about a life.

Veronique~UID: 2627304

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2# Veronique~ 1127 Revised by Kitther(1) " while other people relinquish just a few steps away from the ends becoming losers"
谓语应该是become，而不是relinquish.   
(2)"Thus how playing sports teaches us that to hold a determined will and persist no matter how hard life is."
How playing sports 可以做主语吗？
(3)"my class was place full of competition on study even the costs of clothes and where was no cooperation at all."
看不懂。。。
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