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发表于 2010-11-29 23:32:23 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-11-30 06:05:26 |显示全部楼层
I think you should state your view clearly in the first paragraph, that's better. just my own point of view

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发表于 2010-11-30 14:04:29 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2011-6-15 21:59:59 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2011-6-16 13:07:53 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 piggy.6408 于 2011-6-16 13:09 编辑

6,15 Only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth watching...agree or disagree(09,9,11)& P) M- }( T1 h, t* C# R0 R
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When it comes to the question whether only the movies that can give us something about realities are deserve our appreciation or not, some people may hold the opinion positively and agree with this statement, while others feel in a opposite way, based on their different education backgrounds and experiences, etc. As far as I am concerned, however, I have the same viewpoint with the later ones, the reasons of which are listed in the following.

In the first place, there arenumerous of movies from all over the world, no matter they are reflecting the real life are gorgeous and meaningful. A good case in point is the movie Harry Potter which comes from the fantasy novels Harry Potter series that are written by a famous British author J. K. Rawling. These series of booksare far beyond the real life, but they bring great happiness and joy to all the audiences on earth, even for those who do not understand English. At the same time, the fable stories make us to contemplate, and enjoy ourselves. And the products made the peoplelike book-publishers, movie-makers and the writer herself earned a lot from Harry Potter. It cannot be denied that these movies benefit a great many of people and they are worth watching.

In the second place, some movies which are not telling something about the real life are demonstrating the beautiful aspects of the life, the hope and the dreams of the people. Not all people can realisze our dreams in reality because they seem to be impossible, and their dreams can come true only by leaning others in the movies. For instance, as young, I dreamed to become a pilot fighting against the enemies in battle fields someday until the day when I realize that it is impossible in an era of peace. Whereas, by seeing the movie Star War, in whichI learnhave learned a lot about the war that is not so desirable for us. Hence, isn’t it a bless for me to learn all of these in the movies?

Admittedly, myriad of movies that can tell us something about real life are favorable and can illustrate people like historical ones. We should appreciate them as our valuable materials. But never should we exclude the other excellent ones, no matter what kind of movies they are.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that it is not the case what the arguer says. We should differentiate the good movies from the bad ones, and appreciate the good ones to enrich our life-gaining delight and learning from them.

我传不了文档,如果你需要的话在群里面m我,我传给你。。还有就是由于水平有限,改的不足之处希望你能指出来让我改进。。谢谢了阿

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发表于 2011-6-16 18:14:57 |显示全部楼层
个人观点,如有异议,欢迎联系。

6.15 rlj revised by xiangtuo.doc

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发表于 2011-7-25 23:51:19 |显示全部楼层
rlj021兄,我想帮你改作文,可是你好像写的题目不是今天要写的呀。今天的题目是:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If children want to do well at school, parents should limit their hours of watching TV programs or movies. 对不起噢,你写回今天的题目吧。
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发表于 2011-7-26 00:24:51 |显示全部楼层
In my opinion, you are kind off the topic.
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发表于 2011-7-26 20:33:38 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 wilsonchen2011 于 2011-7-27 15:32 编辑

rlj028兄,老实跟你说,综合作文可以用模板,但如果连独立作文都固定用一个模板很可能会出问题,特别是在一些逻辑论证上。当然你的观点是没有什么问题咯,但文章一定;牢记要写得让人明白,每段开头就要大声告诉读者你这段主要观点是什么,接下去采用一步一步符合逻辑的推断来论证。一些句式都是要靠积累,目前备考积累你就按照寄托所说的精读TPO阅读文章,真的可以学到很多有用的写作技巧。你那篇文章我按照你的意思稍作改变写了一遍,希望对你有帮助,至少我在改的过程中也学了不少。

Opinions seldom vary on the issue of working place, because for a majority of people, working at home using computers or telephones sounds more comfortable and less stressful. For me, however, working in the office would be much more beneficial. There are a couple of reasons to name.

First of all, it is in the office that communication and cooperation with other people take place. When one is puzzled by a difficult task in the office, he or she just needs to turn around and ask the colleagues for help. When one comes up with a good idea for a project, what he or she has to do is to start a discussion group only within a minute and pool the participants' resources. This kind of working style is often supported and highlighted by companies because the spirit of teamwork in the office is of great importance to the development of corporations, while working at home may not live up to such long-term effects.

Furthermore, employers can easily supervise their employees in the office. It is unclear whether the home-based working employees are performing tasks relevant to their job. Nevertheless, the managers have to know what is going on with the projects allocated to each individual and take such aspects as working conditions of the staff into consideration. Only within a limited area can the superintendents have a good command of the employees. Therefore, apart from the office, isn't it just impossible to find another working place convenient for supervision?

Finally, work efficiency in the office is obviously higher than that at home. Working closely to the employers and competing with other co-workers both increase people's concentration on the work itself, whereas the long distance between home-based employees and the office offers people much freedom to distract from their job. Most people working at home can hardly resist Coke in the refrigerator, computer games, or text messages from friends.

In all honesty, almost everyone dreads the stress of going to work, referring to the long queue waiting desperately for the coming bus as well as the terrible traffic jam in rush hour. But in the modern society, the social relationships and the work efficiency are what matter the most at work. That is why office remains my preferred working place instead of home.
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发表于 2011-7-27 15:30:39 |显示全部楼层
不用谢。其实我原来在文章改过的地方都用不同颜色来标记,但是放上来就没有了那个颜色。下次我用添加附件来把修改过的文章放上来吧。
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