“great与众不同”的写作楼，尽请大家指教！

great与众不同UID: 2558121

2010-01-07
题目：Do you agree with the following statement? Newspapers and magzines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.

Recently, people have been discussing that whether newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country. While some people claim that learning a country all by newspapers and magazines is the easiest way, but I take the opposite side that only by living in a country, could one know it well.

The first reason why I hold this opinion is that living in a foreign country could give one a good experience. To learn foreigner's life, one should go to live with them, because a person could get much information,such as foreign customs and hobbies, by everyday life. To learn a foreign society, one also should live in it, because living in a society is the most direct way to experience events happen in it. These experiences can't be gotten from newspapers and magazines.

In addition, going to aboard to learn foreign life is beneficial to the world, because it may develop the world wide economy. Nearly all the countries on the world want to attract tourists, they know that tourists may spend much money on eating, living, and shopping during a tripe. By that way, many citizens could earn much money.

Admittedly, reading newspapers and magazines is much more convenience than going to aboard, but the issue are not always show the truth. In some country, like China, the medias are controlled by the government, so newspapers and magazines often show the positive side of a country which friendly to it, such as North Korea, and show the negative side of a unfriendly country. For example, hasn't my father's friend travel to North Korea, we never know how a hardship North Korean people live with. Most of them are very thin, because of lack of food, they living with hunger. According to newspapers in China, North Korean people's life is happy and rich.

In sum, I disagree with this quote that people should learn a foreign country just by newspaper and magazines since they couldn't let people know a country comprehensively and fairly. On the other hand, going to aboard to learn a foreign country is the best way.

坠坠芙蓉影UID: 2815408

抱歉啊，昨天去学校理东西了，很晚回来，所以没给你改。

great与众不同UID: 2558121

2011-01-12
题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The teacher should be paid according to how well students perform.

Recently, people have been discussing that whether a school should pay teachers according to how well students perform. While some people claim that this rule may encourage teachers tech hard, but I take the opposite side that teachers should be paid equally.

The first reason why I hold this opinion is that paying teachers distinguishably is unfair for both teachers and students. For teachers, they can't determine whether a students could perform well or not, because it mostly depend on a student work hard or not. A popular notion is that, there are both well-perform and bad-perform students in the same class, and all of them were teach by same teachers, how could things goes like that? I believe it's some students study hard however others not. For students, they can't achieve education source equally, because teachers may take more attention to students who study well and ignore other students, and bad-perform students may even be punished terribly due to they decrease the teacher's income.

In addition, paying a teacher according to students' perform is harmful to the society. In the short term, people may even like to complain about each other, such as parents complaining about the school and teachers can't teach their children well, and teachers may complain about the low salary and naughty students. In the long term, there may be few talents in the society, because few and few students could go to universities to achieve high education. Students who can't catch up with others at beginning may feel so upset without teacher's encouragement, then give up their study.

Admittedly, teachers may try to their best to teach well to get a high salary, however, most teachers may focus all their energy on teaching no matter how much they were paid. Teaching all the students well is a teacher's responsibility.

In a word, I disagree with the quote that teacher should be paid according to how well students perform since it may bring so much negative influence and no benefits. I believe paying teachers equally is the best choice for schools.

great与众不同UID: 2558121

2011-01-12
题目：TPO4 综合

The lecture discusses the fact that dinosaurs are not endotherms, which differs from the opinion in the passage.

First, the professor argue that polar were warmer than today during dinosaurs' living time. This refute the belief in the reading that only animals that can maintain a temperature well above that of the surrounding environment could be active in such cold climates.

Second, according to the listening passage, animals which need to support a large weight also need their legs positioned underneath the body. This challenge the opinion in the reading that legs' position underneath the body strongly suggests that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Finally, the listening materials holds the point that Haversian canals can't improve dinosaurs are endotherms, because the facts maybe like that dinosaurs may grow quickly sometime and grow slowly then. So dinosaurs may have no Haversian canals. This doubt the viewpoint in the reading that fossilized bones of dinosaurs are usually dense with Haversian canals.The lecture discusses the fact that dinosaurs are not endotherms, which differs from the opinion in the passage.

gamyUID: 2748678

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juliagoUID: 2912431

改好了!
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Recently, people have been discussing that whether a school should pay teachers according to how well students perform. While some people claim that this rule may encourage teachers tech（这是名词） hard, but I take the opposite side that teachers should be paid equally_

The first reason why I hold this opinion is that paying teachers distinguishably is unfair for both teachers and students. For teachers, they can't determine whether a students could perform well or not, because it mostly depend on a student work hard or not. A popular notion is that, there are both well-perform and bad-perform students in the same class, and all of them were teach by same teachers, how could things goes like that? I believe it's（这里有两个V词了!） some students study hard however others not. For students, they can't achieve education source equally, because teachers may take more attention to students who study well and ignore other students, and bad-perform students may even be punished terribly due to（后面不能接句子） they decrease the teacher's income.7 o* K. J8

In addition, paying a teacher according to students' perform is harmful to the society. In the short term, people may even（even不要） like to complain about each other, such as parents complaining about the school and teachers can't teach their children well, and teachers may complain about the low salary and naughty students.说清楚，老师抱怨对社会怎么有害了 In the long term, there may be few talents in the society, because few and few students could go to universities to achieve（接受教育一般用receive ） high education. Students who can't catch up with others at beginning may feel so upset without teacher's encouragement, then give up their study这句话是对前面原因的解释怎么没有连接词?.

Admittedly, teachers（some teacher） may try to（不要to） their best to teach well to get a high salary, （让步段太少了意思没表达清楚）however, most teachers may focus all their energy on teaching no matter how much they were paid. Teaching all the students well is a teacher's responsibility.:

In a word, I disagree with the quote that teacher should be paid according to how well students perform since it may bring so much negative influence and no benefits. I believe paying teachers equally is the best choice for schools.（这段句子太单一，I disagree… I believe…）

great与众不同UID: 2558121

2011-01-13
综合：TPO5

The lecture discusses the fact that people can't determine how the "great houses" were used.

First, the listening passage believes that the Chaco structures can't be residential, because there are not enough rooms for hundreds people. What's more, there are few fire places, and if it was an "apartment building", there should had many fire places. This refute the belief in the reading passage that in the Chaco, many people have been living for centuries.

Second, the lecture argue that the Chaco structures aren't food stores, because in an food store, there should be many uncovered maize and counters, but the Chaco structures don't have these characters. This strongly doubt the author's viewpoint.

Finally, the professor points out that nothing could improve the Chaco structures were ceremonial centers, because the pots found in the buildings may be construction materials hadn't been used up. Furthermore, the materials used in meals may be in people's regular trips.

fengyanhongUID: 2941762

1.12独立
Recently, people have been discussing that whether a school should pay teachers according to how well students perform. While some people claim that this rule may encourage teachers（’）(encourage sb to do sth如果后面是teach的话) tech hard, but I take the opposite side that teachers should be paid equally.

The first reason why I hold this opinion is that paying teachers distinguishably is unfair for both teachers and students. For teachers, they can't determine whether a（单复数） students could perform well or not, because it（it 指代的是performance么还是teacher？） mostly depend on a student work hard or not. A popular notion is that, there are both well-perform and bad-perform students in the same class, and all of them were teach by same teachers, how could things goes like that? I believe it's（it is because否则原句有两个谓语） some students study hard however others （do）not. For students, they can't achieve education source equally, because teachers may take more attention to students who study well and ignore other students, and bad-perform（ill-performed） students may even be punished terribly due to(due to 是介词短语不是连词短语，后面只能加名词不能加句子) they decrease the teacher's income.

In addition, paying a teacher according to students' perform is harmful to the society. In the short term, people may even like to complain about each other, such as parents complaining about the school and teachers can't teach their children well, and teachers may complain about the low salary and naughty students. In the long term, there may be few talents in the society, because few and few students could go to universities to achieve high education. Students who can't catch up with others at beginning may feel so upset without teacher's encouragement, then （they）give up their study. then是连词后面要跟一个主谓宾齐全的句子，所以要加they

Admittedly, teachers may try （to去掉） their best to teach well to get a high salary, however, most teachers may focus all their energy on teaching no matter how much they were paid. Teaching all the students well is a teacher's responsibility.

In a word, I disagree with the quote that teacher should be paid according to how well students perform since it may bring so much negative influence and no benefits. I believe paying teachers equally is the best choice for schools.

结构清晰，文章大骨架很好。
语法最好补，看一两个解释就好了。
建议你在用词搭配上还要从阅读中积累。、
感谢你对我文章的评改，尤其是建议部分受益颇深。最近比较忙不好意思这么晚才给你改。

laura88sUID: 2777004

2011-01-13
综合：TPO5& b8 ]8 H!

The lecture discusses the fact that people can't determine how the "great houses" were used.5 p) P, c. ]$ e' S) @& w$ `/ A
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First, the listening passage believes that the Chaco structures can't（cannot）be residential, because there are not enough rooms for hundreds people. What's more, there are few fire places, and if it was an "apartment building", there should had many fire places. This refutes the belief in the reading passage that in the Chaco, many people have been living for centuries. 8 m8 g/ l1 j! I) u7 ^
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Second, the lecture argue that the Chaco structures aren't (are not) food stores, because in a food store, there should be many uncovered maize and counters, but the Chaco structures don't have these characters. This strongly doubt the author's viewpoint.

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Finally, the professor points out that nothing could improve the Chaco structures were ceremonial centers, because the pots found in the buildings may be construction materials hadn't been used up. Furthermore, the materials used in meals may be in people's regular trips. (挂钩和阅读文章相冲突的关系)

再穿插一些自己paraphrase的话进一步说明作者是如何反驳阅读文章的观点就更好了，比如 which means XX is unlikely.....

great与众不同UID: 2558121

2011-01-14
综合：TPO6

The reading passage takes the viewpoint that communal online encyclopedias is much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias, but the listening passage hold the opposite point.

First, the professor said that communal online encyclopedias looks like to have more mistakes is as a result of it is easy to correct in online, and triditional encyclopedias also have many mistakes, but it's hard to correct. This refute the belief in the reading that a communal online encyclopedia often lack acacemic credentials.

Second, according to the lecture, communal online encylopedias are reliable. There are only few special people like to change information in the communal on line encylopedias, they can't influence a lot. This doubt the idea of the passage.

Third, the professor argues that the communal encyclopedias creates no false impression of what is important and what is not. It just because some information is most popullar to people. More people care about a region, more information about this region will appear on Internet. It reflect the great interest of people, and it's a stronge advantage of communal online encyclopedias. This challenge the opinion of the reading that the communal encyclopedias creats a false impression of what is important and what is not.

gamyUID: 2748678

再听下听力听力段子，感觉有些出入……
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