Argument2

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小女的第一篇argument，套了模板，不知道这样套模板会不会出事。
2月11日考，但因为课业压力大，也没法推后。刚放假，刚开始准备。所以求各位牛牛鼎力帮忙了。


argument 2

2. The following appeared in a letter sentby a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners inDeerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearbyBrookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yardsshould be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted.Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order toraise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set ofrestrictions on landscaping and housepainting."


Myargument writing:

Merely based on unfounded assumption anddubious evidence, the statement draws a conclusion that Deerhaven Acres shouldadopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting followingthe experience of the Brookville community seven years ago. To substantiate theconclusion, the arguer points out evidence that average property values havetripled in Brookville after a set of restrictions being adopted which are focuson how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriorsof homes should be painted. At first glance, the author's argument appears tobe somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it omits somesubstantial concerns that should be addressed to substantiate the argument. Inmy point of view, this argument suffers from at lease three flaws.

Firstly, the author claims that the averageproperty values will increase again if a set of restrictions on landscaping andhousepainting are adopted, because it is seven years ago that average propertyvalues have tripled in Brookville after adoption of such restrictions. Theauthor assumes without justification that the background conditions haveremained the same at different time. The assumption is unwarranted becausethings rarely remain the same over extended periods of time. There are likelyall kinds of things difference between people's living habit and appreciationof the beauty. For example, people may not pay attention to the landscaping orhousepainting any more when they choose a community but focus on something elselike convenience of transportation(?).

Secondly, even if the background conditionsare the same between seven years ago and nowadays, the arguer recommendationrelies on what might be a poor analogy between Deerhaven Acres and Brookville.The analogy falsely depends on the assumption that the background conditions inboth Deerhaven Acres and Brookville are similar. However, it is entirelypossible that Deerhaven Acres and Brookville exist (?) big differences on (?) alarge amount of(?) aspects. For instance, residents in Deerhaven Acres possiblyprefer to considerate the educational qualification (?) around rather than thelandscaping and housepainting, while Brookville is contrary(?).

Thirdly, even though the backgroundconditions are similar between Deerhaven Acres and Brookville, the set ofrestrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colorsthe exteriors of homes should be painted cannot confirm to be the reason ofaverage property values' increasing based on the fact that the increasing ofaverage property values occurred after adoption of the set of restrictions. Thesequence of the two events, in itself, does not suffice to establish acause-and-effect relationship between them. It might have resulted from someother events instead: the Brookville community is close to(?) a super marketwhich is so convenient for(?) people living there ---- to just a possibility.

To sum up, this arguer fails to substantiateits claim that Deerhaven Acres should adopt their own set of restrictions whichare on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors theexteriors of homes should be painted, because the evidences cited in theanalysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make theargument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more informationwith regard to the reason behind triple values of property in Brookville sevenyears ago as well as the similarity of the two regions and the two periods.Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, itwould have been more thorough and logically acceptable.



My keywords:
1. seven years ago
2. nearby B vs. D
3. since then