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2.29 ISSUE 138
"Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

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Does the discovery or progress only come through mistakes? I concede that mistakes can facilitate pursuing new discovery or progress, however, they are not the major fact of that. Instead of this, the attitude of continuing to seek truth plays a more significant role.

Admittedly, mistakes can help us find out what is unworkable and hence we can approach the right solution. On today’s typical television or radio talk show, we can be easy to find that many mistakes or inadequacy, such as the need of abortion, are discussed by specialists and residents. Both the participators and the viewers learn something meaningful through such programs. In fact, these discussions serve to find out what can be done to social problems or mistakes. The end result is that there can be progress in our society.

However, only through mistakes is not enough for having discovery or progress. Any discovery or progress results from ceaseless efforts to overcome one setback after another. Mistakes are made because there is something wrong with the objective truth. The development of discovery or progress is endless and needs to be confirmed over and over again. For the supporting example one need look no further in the development of heliocentric theory. At the very beginning people thought themselves were the center of universe, which was the reason why there was geocentric theory at first. Based on his observed result and affirmation of faint, Copernicus convinced that the earth goes around the sun and finally his theory was accepted by the society after a long and tough struggling with malicious remark. Understandably, because Copernicus didn’t give up his belief and sustained the abuse from the society, he finally got a big progress in astronomy.

The right attitude towards mistake is to face them, and learn on them. At the personal level, by concluding ways of solving mathematical problems, students can learn how certain solutions can be used to explain certain kinds of problems. At the same time, some students can get nothing if they just ignore or avoid their mistakes. At the community level, as my teacher said, the development of the society is based on the perfection of the social system, especially of the justice system. The continuing amendment of justice system can make the law more and more impartial, while a deeply flawed justice system may be a warm place for corruption or other social problems.
Finally, at the global level, all the countries around the world should move together and face global warming.

In sum, unless someone is willing to use ceaseless efforts to overcome one setback after another, I concede that there can be discovery or progress through mistakes. Otherwise, hoping to get new progress by leaving mistakes alone is unrealistic. After all, without the spirit of constant craving, mistakes are of little value.

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3.1 ARGUMENT 188  

A new report suggests that men and women experience pain very differently from one another, and that doctors should consider these differences when prescribing pain medications. When researchers administered the same dosage of kappa opioids — a painkiller — to 28 men and 20 women who were having their wisdom teeth extracted, the women reported feeling much less pain than the men, and the easing of pain lasted considerably longer in women. This research suggests that kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required, whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication. In addition, researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.

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In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, the argument suffers from three flows.

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based on a mass of samples. What's vital for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefully detection. Only a few samples can lead to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether the universities should provide a limiting number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot in social discussion. If there are one thousand people take part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.

In addition to looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men, the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island has grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was sure better to women. If the argument contains the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.


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1. by夏诺多 Argument 188~~

In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, the argument suffers from three flows.(开头很漂亮，学习了)

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based(isn't based on) on a mass of samples. What's vital(感觉怪怪的。。) for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefullycareful或者prudent detection. Only a few samples can lead(建议only后移，too few samples can only lead to) to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether the universities should provide a limitinglimited number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot用debated比较好 in social discussion. If there are one thousand people taketaking part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable(does the poll still remain reasonable?) ? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.这个表述很不错

In addition， looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men(the majority of men), the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island has grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? 这个例子很贴切The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was suresurly better to women. If the argument contains the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.写得很有条理，先概述题目并提出反对，然后从样本容量小，男女适用性和不用检查所有药物三方面进行论述，例子也很贴切
看得出楼主模板功底很扎实，估计已经形成了自己的风格了
这片应该能拿高分～
学习鸟～～～

2.by Adolph.hu.85

In this analysis, the arguer advocates that the kappa opioids should be only prescribed to women and the different effects of all medicines between men and women need a reevaluation. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the result from a survey that effects of kappa opioids on 20 women was (were) better than 28 men. In addition, the time of pain easing lasted respectively longer to women. However, these alone neither constitute a reasonable argument nor provide convincing support to the conclusion. In my point of view, (建议拿掉) the argument suffers from three flaws.

The biggest problem with this argument is that the research to kappa opioids does not be based on a mass of samples. What's vital for any scientific researches is that a convincing conclusion must be made after carefully detection. Only a few samples can lead to a vague and oversimplified conclusion. For instance, a poll over whether (if) the universities should provide a limiting number of seats to students to improve education quality is hot in social discussion. If there are one thousand people take part in the poll, but only one percent of them give their feedback, is the result from the poll reasonable? No matter what conclusion comes to the one percent, it is meaningless, for a small amount of opinions do not own representativeness.

In addition to looking at the small amount of samples in the survey, the conclusion about men should be given to (去掉) another kind of pain killer is groundless. The doctor provided the same dosage of kappa opionds to all the patients and reported that the easing effect was better to women. However, this is not the main reason for that the men should be provided with totally another pain killer. Unless the arguer provides other evidence as to the kappa opiond is really useless in huge numbers of men, the view is unfounded.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out another flaw that undermines the argument. Should the researchers reevaluate the effects of all medicines on men versus women because kappa opioids shows a probable effect difference? Nowadays the housing prices in Hainan Island have grown largely from one thousand to about twenty thousand per square meter in RMB. The government had to study this abnormal phenomenon and came up with relevant polices to control housing prices. Can we say that the rapid growth in every place in the world all should be studied and controlled? The growth of the economy or the float of shares in real estate industry can also cause the rapid growth in housing prices. It is equally unreasonable to research the different effects of all drugs between men and women.

In summary, this argument is not persuasive as the reasons it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidences that the kappa opioids has already been tested in a large amount of patients and the easing effect was sure better to women. If the argument contained
(虚拟应该更好点) the given factors discussed above, it could have been more reasonable and adequate.
楼主这篇真是美文，我的任何夸赞都显得多余。如果能更仔细点不出小错误的话，几乎可以当范文。尤其是切入点找的非常准！可以说说最近在看那些argu资料吗，偶也学习学习^_^

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万分抱歉，这两天实验较多所以昨天只来得及改了一篇~~下午就能给你了~~ 5# 照无眠

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十分感谢~~非常受用的说~~ 2# sophie-zy

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十分感谢~~
我的Issue很糟糕，对行文和ets的官方解读不是很了解，附上的帖子很赞~~ 3# 照无眠

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3.2 Issue 112 "Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."

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The speaker advocates that the education system involving the exploration of students' emotions will benefit students more than that which underlines reasoning and logical thinking. I hold the same view with the speaker, as the education system including emotion-explored study will be more complicated and be profitable to students not only in the further development of reasoning and logical thinking, but also in the mental health.

To begin with, teaching students to explore their emotion can help them know deeper about themselves. Students can go deeply into what they really like, and this cognition gives direction about their future. Nowadays many students are worried about what they can do after graduation. They face three choices: coming into the society, going abroad for further study or having master research within home country. As the saying goes: One man's meat is another man's poison. So when facing this vital question, which can be used as a reference? Only after knowing intimately about himself can one makes a reasonable and adequate choice. Based on this analysis, I maintain the exploration of emotion is requisite and such education to students helps to found reasoning and logical thinking, for students have to consider overall and in depth.

The exploration of emotion is focused on the mental health, for it can teach students on how to control their emotion. If we just emphasize reasoning and logical thinking but despise the foundation of mental health, it would cause extremism. For supporting reasons, one needs look no further than the cause of learning disabilities and the debate over human clone. Observing from my personal experience, LD sometimes is caused by fear and anxiety to study. Continuing to stress the importance of reasoning and logical thinking, teachers and parents would ignore any symptoms of LD and eventually students themselves are suffered by the severe mental problem. Furthermore, the moral issue over human clone is really hot in today's social discussion. The lack of emotion-explored education can create someone called science madman. One of the most extreme example I saw is some scientists cloned human embryos secretly and used them into cancer research. It is totally a kind of devaluation to human beings. Their view of value was totally destroyed by only following scientific consequences. If the science madmen give more concern on the exploration of emotion, such tragedy may be avoided. Reasoning and logical thinking lets us know what is the world, while the exploration of emotion forces us to consider how the world goes.

However, over emphasizing on education of emotional exploration is unreasonable and would hinder the development of reasoning and logic thinking. Issac Newton is one of the most famous scientist in the world, but when getting old, he seldom had progress and even came up with that "God is the only impetus". Because Newton was addicted to theology, his reasoning and logic thinking was blocked.

In sum, both the reasoning and logical thinking and the exploration of emotion promote the development of student's capacity. Over emphasizing anyone will cause problems which had already been discussed above. Consequently, due to analysis and reasons mentioned before, I contend the same view with the speaker.

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3.2 Issue 112 "Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."

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The speaker advocates that the education system involving the exploration of students' emotions will benefit students more than that which underlines reasoning and logical thinking. I hold the same view with the speaker, as the education system including emotion-explored study will be more complicated and be profitable(beneficial；profitable是利润的 一般讲经济才用 和资本、投资有关) to students not only in the further development of reasoning and logical thinking, but also in the constant concedrn of mental health. 英文中并列句两边的并列部分一般要求工整 名词短语结构对应名词短语结构 动词短语结构对应动词短语结构 如 对“逻辑思维日后的发展，以及保持对心智健康长久的关注有益”。而不要是对“逻辑思维日后的发展，以及心智健康有益”。

To begin with, teaching students to explore their emotion can help them know deeper（more） about themselves. Students can go deeply into what they really like, and this cognition gives direction about(on) their future. Nowadays many students are worried about what they can do after graduation. They face three choices: coming into the society, going abroad for further study or having master research（receive master education） within home country(at home即可). As the saying goes: One man's meat is another man's poison. So when facing this vital question, which（what） can be used as a reference? Only after knowing intimately(clearly) about himself can one makes a reasonable and adequate choice. Based on this analysis, I maintain the exploration of emotion is requisite and such education to students helps to found reasoning and logical thinking, for students have to consider overall and in depth.
论证有emotion exploration可以更多了解自己 做更正确决定这步 但是没有说明这怎么锻炼了全面、有深度的逻辑思维 感觉少后一半

The exploration of emotion is focused on the mental health, for it can teach students on how to control their emotion. If we just emphasize reasoning and logical thinking but despise（ignore比较客观公正 despise是主观鄙视、看不起） the foundation of mental health, it would cause extremism. For supporting reasons, one needs look no further than the cause of learning disabilities and the debate over human clone. 乍一看没看懂 看完后面例子现在懂了哈 就是两个例子一起预告有点别扭 Observing from my personal experience, LD（这是什么？） sometimes is caused by fear and anxiety to study. Continuing to stress the importance of reasoning and logical thinking, teachers and parents would ignore any symptoms of LD and eventually students themselves are suffered by the severe mental problem. Furthermore, the moral issue over human clone is really hot in today's social discussion. The lack of emotion-explored education can create someone called science madman. One of the most extreme example I saw is some scientists cloned human embryos secretly and used them into cancer research. It is totally a kind of devaluation to human beings. Their view of value was totally destroyed by only following scientific consequences（principles?）. If the science madmen give more concern(s) on the exploration of emotion, such tragedy may be avoided. Reasoning and logical thinking lets us know what is the world, while the exploration of emotion forces us to consider how the world goes. 第一个例子没太明白

However, over emphasizing on education of emotional exploration is unreasonable and would hinder the development of reasoning and logic thinking. Issac Newton is one of the most famous scientist in the world, but when getting old, he seldom had progress and even came up with that "God is the only impetus". Because Newton was addicted to theology, his reasoning and logic thinking was blocked.（例子缺乏背景阐述 所以让人不太懂 NEWTON在情感上怎么被over-educated了？就是变老了？？）

In sum, both the reasoning and logical thinking and the exploration of emotion promote the development of student's capacity. Over emphasizing anyone will cause problems which had already been discussed above. Consequently, due to analysis and reasons mentioned before, I contend the same view with the speaker.

我就不客气了哈 句子和结构基本清楚
逻辑上既然主论点是关注emotion教育要多于reasoning的 那么分论点先说emotion的优点--再说少了它完全reasoning不可行--最后说over emphasizing它也不行的方式 似乎和reasoning完全没有比较 没有联系 只能论证emotion很重要 不能说明为什么比reasoning教育重要
语言上最大的问题是很多用词不太准确 导致了句子不达意 影响了表达效果和文章的整体质量

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谢谢组长的修改~~我想用用新词，但是背的时候只有意思，没有用法。。。组长在这方面有什么建议吗？ 11# cecyleyueyue

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