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Do you agree with the following statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes or should work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?1.Some people have the habit of doing things slowly and precisely to make sure everthing is under control. But there is also a number of people who prefer to finish their work swiftly at the risk of making some errors. As for me, i would like to give serious consideration to perfect my job.
2.The slow speed of working indicate that i can put lot of thoughts into every step of my work and the work would be hardly to go wrong. I, in fact,normally spend more time on my assignments than other classmates do, for  i am always under the impression that perfect job  not only give myself a sense of accomplishment, but also show other people, especially my professor, a good impression. other students may finish their work in a higher speed than i do, but they undoubtly can not say their work is correct. i can assure that my work is spotless, for i do my best in each part of work.
3.On the other hand, it is hard to sure that the method of accomplishing works quickly and facing kind of risks is not a great idea. i believe that life is a adventure. When you would like to cross the street, you risk being hit by an oncoming car. If you realize what you are facing on that monment, would you decide not to even walk? The answer is clear that a great number of people would still corss street. Because corsssing street can save you precious time at which you can finish more valuable works. The speed alreay become a key word in our modern world, especially in business circle. customer always want to be served more quickly and efficiently, so if you are slower than others, you can even not survive in a highly competitive company.
4.To be honest, when you slow down your pace of working, it means you have more copious time to improve your assignments in every direction. on the contrary, If you want finish your job at once, it is undoubted that you can not sure what you accomplish is excellent.
5.When you are clear about what risk you are facing and about how to give a guarantee for you job, you can strike a balance between accelerating speed at the risk of making mistakes and slowing down to make sure everthing is correct. Just like predator approaching their prey, moving slowly at first concentrated,then speeding up to charge at their aims, you konw when to slow down and when to speed up

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Do you agree with the following statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes or should work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?
Some people have the habit of doing things slowly and precisely to make sure everthing(everything) is under control. But there is (are) also a number of people who prefer to finish their work swiftly at the risk of making some errors. As for me, i would like to give serious consideration to perfect my job.3 x  U1 h* I+ m& [3 P, A" S; A' l
2.The slow speed of working indicate(indicates) that i can put lot of thoughts into every step of my work and the work would be hardly to go wrong. I, in fact, normally spend more time on my assignments than other classmates do, for  i am always under the impression that perfect job  not only give myself a sense of accomplishment, but also show other people, especially my professor, a good impression. other students may finish their work in a higher speed than i do, but they undoubtly can not say their work is correct. i can assure that my work is spotless, for i do my best in each part of work.
3.On the other hand, it is hard to sure (make sure) that the method of accomplishing works quickly and facing kind of risks is not a great idea. i believe that life is a adventure. When you would like to cross the street, you risk being hit by an oncoming car. If you realize what you are facing on that monment, would you decide not to even walk? The answer is clear that a great number of people would still corss street. Because corsssing street can save you precious time at which you can finish more valuable works（这个例子感觉有点怪，不如你说有急事，想很快过马路，是不是会更好一些？）. The speed alreay（already） become a key word in our modern world, especially in business circle. customer always want to be served more quickly and efficiently, so if you are slower than others, you can even not survive in a highly competitive company.
4.To be honest, when you slow down your pace of working, it means you have more copious time to improve your assignments in every direction. on the contrary, If you want finish your job at once, it is undoubted that you can not (be) sure what you accomplish is excellent.
5.When you are clear about what risk you are facing and about how to give a guarantee for you job, you can strike a balance between accelerating speed at the risk of making mistakes and slowing down to make sure everthing is correct. Just like predator approaching their prey, moving slowly at first concentrated,then speeding up to charge at their aims, you konw when to slow down and when to speed up（最后一句话感觉没说完）
首先我觉得你可以查一下sure这个词的用法，和它的同义词同义词组，感觉你用的不太准确。另一点可能举例不是特别的恰当，可以再考虑考虑从例子的哪个方面说能更清楚的论证论点。最后一点，感觉你第一段论点没有表达很清楚，读到后来才明白你支持因情况而定。共同努力！

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版主建议写完自己先放到word里面把简单的拼写和语法改掉：）

结构和观点都不错哈，我个人感觉这篇算比较难立论的

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In modern society, no one can avoid being influenced by television commercials which has managed to penetrated into our daily life. The misleading effect of commercial in television and radio, many people think, should pay an main responsibility for unhealthy eating habits. However there is still a group of people hold the different view on unhealthy diet habit. As for me, i prefer to agree that this unhealthy way of eating can be caused by other reason.


First of all, parent behavior can be one of those reasons. It is not difficult to imagine that those parents who has a wrong lifestyle can raise a child with healthy eating habit. In fact, few family can realize how important the healthy eating habit is. For instance, cartoons is always intriguing for kids and even adults, so when cartoons is begin at dinner time, many children are so fascinated even move their meal to eat in front of TV. The recent scientific healthy research shows that this way of eating can not only harm your health, but also reduce your family time, of which few parents are aware. a great of adults even make the same mistake, therefore i believe that the self-cultivation and the emphasis on  healthy eating habits can play an important role.


On the other hand, the epidemic of weight control also make its own contribution to harmful eating habits. Contemporary people pay more attention to themselves body size and ignore which way would be correct to keep fit. most of those people regularly are willing take a tiny bowl of fruit salad without give any consideration to the basic nutrition the body needs. According to a recent healthy survey, the pursue for beauty is already rated as the major factor to affect human health, especially to women. So i hold the view that if they want to have the healthy way of  living, the concept of beauty should be converted.


Thirdly, with the application of technology, computer is no longer alien to us, especially to children.it undoubtedly bring many benefit to us. We can search needed information instantly and have a pleasant chat with our friends anytime. But, meanwhile, it also bring us a great variety of disease. it is  frequently reported that a number of kid are addictive to computer on-line games a day without a meal eating. It is indisputable to admit computer game or other interesting program once make you forget a meal. As a result, the effect of computer can equally not be neglected.


In conclusion, i tend to agree that advertising is one of main cause of unhealthy eating habit, but there are still other reasons for this wrong way of living. If we want to have a good eating habit, we need to emphasis on each point of view i just mention.

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There is a accepted idea that in a team work, those people who can not take critics from other partners are normally can hardly succeed. But there is a small group of people holding the different view success can be equally take by people who has the nature of being reluctant to accept other judgement for themselves. As for me, tolerance and acceptance must be a important factor for success.

First of all, i think that every person has some disadvantage and has something they can not accomplish. Furthermore, in daily work, they can hardly find out these flaws by themselves but other people can find it in a easy way. For example, my brother, Kaly, who is thirteen years old, he very like to play basketball with his friends. Once i go to watch his she'll competition and i find out a lot of deadly flaws in his team during the basketball game. As their opponents are more stronger, they lose several points all the way, so they do not trust each other and pass ball to each other. In the half time, i tell my brother in a critical tone that if you do not trust your partners, you absolutely will lose the game and you should pass ball to your friend to create more chance to points. he took my advice and win the game in the end. Therefore, i think if my brother do not accept my advice in time, he are unlikely to win that game.

Second, i think triumph are unaccessible to those who do not like being criticized because they do not realize how to use criticism to approach success, to get what you want. in business field, we often need to cooperate with different person who has different nature. They always tell you what you should do and what you should do not do and criticize your way of working ,Normally few people can tolerate this attitude. But if you choose to ignore their different opinions, you would not make a contract with them. As a result, your annual sales are equally not be achieved.

All in all, learning to receive others criticism is a fairly important method to succeed. This way can remind you of yours disadvantage and teach you how to get along with different person.