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你们是怎么上传的ｗｏｒｄ文档呀，新手上路，多多指教

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6.9独立作文

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Education is one of the most important aspects for our county's future. However, what is the best way to improve the quality of education has arise a widely argument. Some one point out that the higher teachers' salaries is the best way that can improve the educational quality, while others cite lots of other approaches which are better in improving quality of education. From my point of view, increasing teachers' salaries is far away for the best way of making a better quality of education.

First, it is the(不用特指 可以去掉) students other than teachers that decide the quality of education. It is undoubted that higher qualities of students（不能说学生的高质量吧，well-developed academic ability我觉得会比较合适） means higher（我觉得high就可以了，也没有要比的） quality of education. However, higher salaries of teacher may not lead to higher qualities of students. Some of teachers may pay much attention to their students after getting more money.（疏漏寡闻没有看懂，能否交流下？） However, without proper way of teaching, students' study will not be improved.（第一段楼主的意思是要表达教育质量的高低关键在于学生，那最后一句是否有点说跑了呢？）

Second, with higher salaries, teachers may not do more to improve the quality of education. It is said that higher salaries can result in more attention for（to,没有attention for的用法） students. However, some teachers may don't（直接may not就可以，没有may don’t的说法） change their teaching method. One of my elder teachers had never tent(用过去完成时比较恰当) to put new elements in his classes since he has teaching such way for years.（第二段是要讲加薪未必会真正提高教育质量是吧？那这个例子有些不恰当，因为只是说一个老师一沉不变，那可能是因为他从未加薪呢？加了薪就变了呢？）

Third, there are other better approaches that can improve the quality of education. For example, purchasing（去掉，不是说买更多仪器的这个动作行为可以引起学习兴趣） more experimental instrument can improve students' interesting in doing experiments. With more interest, students can learn more, and the quality of education can be improved.

If higher salaries of teachers can't benefit students, it will not improve the quality of education. What's more, other ways can do better than higher salaries in improving educational quality. As a result, I am(两个动词？去掉) totally disagree with the point that the best way to improve quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries.

文章逻辑很不错，框架也很清晰，就是感觉好迷你，点是全的，就是没有阐述得很清楚。我觉得这样的话还不如去掉一个点把剩下两个说得更具体详细。

caochezhiUID: 2450324

6.15独立。非常抱歉上传晚了，谢谢修改。

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6.16 独立。 麻烦修改，谢谢啦！

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6.17 独立Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement?It is often nota good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of oldfriends?
谢谢修改！

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Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement?
It is often not a goodthing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of oldfriends?

As the development ofour society, it is easier for people to move to new city or new country. However,someone states that change living place will lead to inconvenience because youwill lose your old friends. While, others who disagree with this statement arguethat it is not so bad to move to new city or new country. From my point ofview, moving to a new environment will not cause too much shortcoming(shortcoming是可数名词).


First, you can keeptouch with your friends when you move away. In team of the convenient communicatemethods nowadays, it is likely that you can still take（talk？） with your old friends,know what they are doing and share your happiness with them even though you don’tlive in the same city or county. What's more, you can go back to see your oldfriends by airplanes or trains if you miss your friends very much. Imagine thatyour closed friend go（come？） from other city, even other country, to see you, you willbe moved completely. As a result, you will treasure your friendship much more. Onthe other hand, some friends don't tauch with each other because they think thatthey live in the same city and can see each other at anytime. However, theydon't communicate with each other for a long time. So, it is not the distancethat makes you lose your friends（我喜欢这句！）.
Second, if you move to anew city or new country you will undoubted make friends with more people. WhenI went to the university I know nobody there at all. For the reason that myclassmates come from different parts of county, we have a great culture gapbetween each other. I was confused about how to make friends with those peoplewho were so different with me at the first year. However, at the time of ourgraduation, I have a lot of closed friends. Even though we are still differentin diet and some habit, we know each other very well and have a great number ofcommon interests. For me, moving to a completely new place will enhance youfind more friends（enhance & fand两个谓语？）. And you can get numerous benefits from those new friends,which may outweigh the disadvantage of lose some of old friends.
Third, you can obtainother benefits if you move to new place. It is undoubted that your ability ofadapt to new environment will be improved. What's more, you can learn newthings that you can't even know if you stay in the old city. Also you will havea better understand（understanding） about the whole world. For example, one of my friends studyabroad. He was shaken by the different policy, different culture and differentway of thinking when he first arrive the new country. However, he is totally gets （is & get两个谓语？）used to all the different now. He often tells something to me, which make meconfused but he can understand it completely because of his colorful experiment（多姿多彩的实验？） in the new country.
Considering that you cankeep in tanch with your old friends and make new ones if your move to a newplace, what's more, you can learn more things that are beneficial for（to） you,moving to new city or new county is not so bad. So I disagree with thestatement that it is often not a good thing to move to new city or a newcountry because of the lose of old friends.

90后她爹UID: 3102772

Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement?
It is often not a goodthing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of oldfriends?

As the development of oursociety, it is easier for people to move to new city or new country. However,someone states that change living place will lead to inconvenience because you（前一句说的还是people，尽量避免在托福作文中的人称转换） will loseyour old friends.（这句话和本段第一句话之间没关系….第一句说的是一个现象，然后第二句就someone however地反对并表达观点了，就是说他们之间没有转折的关系！） While, others who disagree withthis statement （some…others的句型就表示两者的观点不同了，用再陈述一遍。） arguethat it is not so bad to move to new city or new country. From my point ofview, moving to a new environment will not cause too much shortcomings.

First, you can keep touchwith your friends when you move away. In team of the convenient communicatemethods nowadays, it is likely that （be likely to,好像不加that句子） you can still take withyour old friends, know what they are doing and share your happiness with themeven though you don’t live in the same city or county. What's more, you can goback to see your old friends by airplanes or trains (by后面加交通工具用原型) if you miss your friends very much. Imagine that your closed(close就是形容词，亲密的) friend go from other city(应该是leave,go的意思不明确), even other country, to see you, you will be moved completely(感动就是感动，没有彻底地感动和不彻底的感动之分，只是感动的程度会不一样，应该用deeply). As a result, you will treasure your friendship muchmore. On the other hand, some friends don't tauch with each other because theythink that they live in the same city and can see each other at anytime.However, they don't communicate with each other for a long time. So, it is notthe distance that makes you lose your friends.

Second, if you move to anew city or new country you will undoubted(undoubtedly) make friends with more people.Forexample, When I went to the university I know nobody there at all. For thereason that my classmates come from different parts of county, we have a greatculture gap between each other. I was confused about how to make friends withthose people who were so different with me at the first year. However, at thetime of our graduation, I have a lot of closed friends. Even though we are(were) still different in diet and some habits, we know each other very well and have a greatnumber of common interests. For me, moving to a completely new place willenhance you(明明是for me, 怎么又有you了…..) find more friends. And you can get numerous benefits fromthose new friends, which may outweigh the disadvantage of lose some of oldfriends.

Third, you can obtainother benefits if you move to new place. It is undoubted that your ability ofadapting to（去掉） new environment will beimproved. What's more, you can learn new things that you can't even know if you stay（去掉） in the old city. Also you will have a better understandabout the whole world. For example, one of my friends study abroad. He wasshaken by the different policy, different culture and different way of thinkingwhen he first arrive the new country. However,(又however了，没有对比的意思，要不然可以前一句说他一开始很不自在，做什么都不习惯，然后however, 他现在完全融入这个新的环境了) he is totally gets used to all the different now. Heoften tells something to me, which make me confused but he can understand it completelybecause of his colorful experiment in the new country.

Considering that you can keep in tanch（touch） with your old friends and make new ones if your (you)move to a new place, what's more, you canlearn more things that are beneficial for you, moving to new city or new countyis not so bad. （本句话没有主语，开始一个considering下来，后面没有相应的人称呼应）So I disagree withthe statement that it is often not a good thing to move to new city or a newcountry because of the lose of old friends

90后她爹UID: 3102772

22# caochezhi Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement?
It is often not a goodthing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lose of oldfriends?

As the development of oursociety, it is easier for people to move to new city or new country. However,someone states that change living place will lead to inconvenience because you（前一句说的还是people，尽量避免在托福作文中的人称转换） will loseyour old friends.（这句话和本段第一句话之间没关系….第一句说的是一个现象，然后第二句就someone however地反对并表达观点了，就是说他们之间没有转折的关系！） While, others who disagree withthis statement （some…others的句型就表示两者的观点不同了，用再陈述一遍。） arguethat it is not so bad to move to new city or new country. From my point ofview, moving to a new environment will not cause too much shortcomings.

First, you can keep touchwith your friends when you move away. In team of the convenient communicatemethods nowadays, it is likely that （be likely to,好像不加that句子） you can still take withyour old friends, know what they are doing and share your happiness with themeven though you don’t live in the same city or county. What's more, you can goback to see your old friends by airplanes or trains (by后面加交通工具用原型) if you miss your friends very much. Imagine that your closed(close就是形容词，亲密的) friend go from other city(应该是leave,go的意思不明确), even other country, to see you, you will be moved completely(感动就是感动，没有彻底地感动和不彻底的感动之分，只是感动的程度会不一样，应该用deeply). As a result, you will treasure your friendship muchmore. On the other hand, some friends don't tauch with each other because theythink that they live in the same city and can see each other at anytime.However, they don't communicate with each other for a long time. So, it is notthe distance that makes you lose your friends.

Second, if you move to anew city or new country you will undoubted(undoubtedly) make friends with more people.Forexample, When I went to the university I know nobody there at all. For thereason that my classmates come from different parts of county, we have a greatculture gap between each other. I was confused about how to make friends withthose people who were so different with me at the first year. However, at thetime of our graduation, I have a lot of closed friends. Even though we are(were) still different in diet and some habits, we know each other very well and have a greatnumber of common interests. For me, moving to a completely new place willenhance you(明明是for me, 怎么又有you了…..) find more friends. And you can get numerous benefits fromthose new friends, which may outweigh the disadvantage of lose some of oldfriends.

Third, you can obtainother benefits if you move to new place. It is undoubted that your ability ofadapting to（去掉） new environment will beimproved. What's more, you can learn new things that you can't even know if you stay（去掉） in the old city. Also you will have a better understandabout the whole world. For example, one of my friends study abroad. He wasshaken by the different policy, different culture and different way of thinkingwhen he first arrive the new country. However,(又however了，没有对比的意思，要不然可以前一句说他一开始很不自在，做什么都不习惯，然后however, 他现在完全融入这个新的环境了) he is totally gets used to all the different now. Heoften tells something to me, which make me confused but he can understand it completelybecause of his colorful experiment in the new country.

Considering that you can keep in tanch（touch） with your old friends and make new ones if your (you)move to a new place, what's more, you canlearn more things that are beneficial for you, moving to new city or new countyis not so bad. （本句话没有主语，开始一个considering下来，后面没有相应的人称呼应）So I disagree withthe statement that it is often not a good thing to move to new city or a newcountry because of the lose of old friends