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Independent writing
Do you agree or disagree that people should buy things in their own country,even  the price is higher than the same thing made somewhere else ?




Depending on the personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea that people should buy the things in their own country, even the price is higher than same thing made somewhere else.
meanwhile others prefer to buy the same thing which is cheaper , as far as I am concerned, I disagree that the people should buy things in their own country ,even the price is higher.

However, it is unfair to say which is better than the other if we do not see both sides of the point in the following aspects. Some people believe they should buy
the things made in their own country, because they find their behavior like this will help the
internal. factory to compete with that of countries .These people point out the fact that many companies have been threatened by other countries’ company. However, other people stand on a very different ground, they believe that they choose what they like or what
they really need. They firmly point out that they should choose those things with low prices, even they are made in other countries.

In my view ,the disadvantage of peoples‘ inclination to buy own things is obvious. In this way , the market will develop in an abnormal way ,which affects the economic to some extent. And in the end ,we may have no good things to buy ,which is caused by ourselves. What a terrible scene!

Personally, I come to the notion that there are three main reasons why I support that people should buy what they really want .Firstly, the international market is forming , as consumers ,we should obey the normal market rule. We should choose the things which are good and at reasonable price when we go shopping in the supermarket. We are all the normal consumers. Secondly ,we should provide a fair environment for all the companies ,even though we may want to support things made in own countries. The environment is more fair ,the economic will perform with more energy. Lastly, chances should be given for those internal companies to promote the technology in the process of competing with the other countries. The power of competing drives the whole world to make progress .For example, the high subway ,the Internet ,and so on.

There are still many other reasons that can account for my fondness for it, but the obvious ones have been presented as above. Taking into account all these reasons, I strongly commit to the notion that people should not buy the things only made in own countries ,even with a higher price.


本人作文水平十分一般，谢谢您的修改，不胜感激！

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自己顶一下，觉的自己的思路有些绕，有人说写的越直越好，还请前辈指点呀