求大虾好心人帮忙改改作文啊~

jamesctangUID: 3034095

我是真的不会写啊，憋了好久才写一篇啊，麻烦各位好心人帮忙从结构、句式、用词这些方面修改下啊，还有就是怎么才能更充实点呢？谢谢啦~


People should never be satisfied with what they have, they should always want something new or? something different Do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give reasons for your choice.


Some people asserts that we should never be satisfied with what we have owned and achieved,while others hold the opposite oppinion.As far as I am concerned,the question whether we should try either new or different things,however,depends on the result of our choice.
To begin with,for positive aspect,not content with the current condition,we will have incentives to pursue higher goals.If a employee,for instance,is not gratified with his immediate position,he may consider to work harder so that he will be acclaimed by his boss and even get an opportunity for promotion,and so forth.In this sense,we may be drived to strive for higher goals as well as better life,as long as we dare to dream and want to try.
In addition,not only individual but also the whole society can get benefits from the idea that we shouldn’t feel easily pleased with what we already have,but keep trying different things.In order to illustrate this view,take Tommas Edison an example,it is his unsatisfaction of the use of oil lights then that encouraged him to invent bulbs that are widely used around the world today.Unsatisfaction,therefore,plays an important role in enhancing the development of the society.
On the contrary,if the motivation to try new things are not aiming at self-achievement or contributions to society,but rather such factors as jealousy and vanity,then unsatisfaction may have negative effects.One major problem is that people may get confused and fail to value their present life and to enjoy it,because all they consider are to acquire as much as fresh,fantastic and luxurious things to show off.Although the sense of vanity can offer people temporary delight,it inhibits their ability to enjoy what they have at hand.
On balance, as long as attempts to try new things can bring us benefits,we should try various things bravely without hesitation;otherwise we’d better think it twice before carrying them out.

weaselUID: 2739489

请大家改作文最好的，最有效率的途径是加入或者自己成立一个作文互改小组，一来一起复习能够互相督促互相鼓励，二来互改起来周期稳定，时效性强

weaselUID: 2739489

分加完了，谢谢小蝎子