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Do people think they will be happier if they have fewer possessions? I bet most people’s answers are no. Because most people think that the more they have, the happier they will be. They try their best to be excellent so as to get everything they desire for. However, in some cases, people feel happier although they possess fewer.

It can not be denied that people spare no effort in order to fufill their dreams. Only in this way, they have the sense of satisfaction and feel pleased about their lives. Students work hared and concentrate on their studies because they want to do well in their academic performance so that they can be praised by their teachers. Employees finish their tasks on time so as to gain the rewards from their supervisors. In these people’s minds, there is a motto “ the more you have, the happier you are” , which acts like a alarm to encourge people to crave what they want.

It is likely that the people who possess more, the more respect and high social statues they have. The famouos people and elites are the people who enjoy their lives greately not just because they have enough money but also they win ordianry people’s respect and admire vastly. As a result, these can benefit them a lot and motivate them to do more excellent jobs.

However, people can also live happily although they have a little possession. In the poverty parts of my country, most children do not have the chance to go to school. What is worse, they do not even have enough food to sustain themselve. Surprisingly, according to a interview, these substance poor children say they live a happy life and satisfy with what they already have. Their health body, happy family and their friends’ accompany are just enough to them. They show their gratitude

To sum up, most people feel happier if they possess more while some people possess fewer but also live a happy life. From my perspective, whether people could live happily or not is determined by their attitudes towards what they have instead of how much they have.

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Do people think they will be happier if they have fewer possessions? I bet most people’s answers are no. Because most people think that the more they have, the happier they will be. They try their best to be excellent so as to get everything they desire for. However, in some cases, people feel happier although they possess fewer.
It can not be denied that people spare no effort in order to fulfill their dreams. Only in this way, they have the sense of satisfaction and feel pleased about their lives. Students work hard and concentrate on their studies because they want to do well in their academic performance so that they can be praised by their teachers. Employees finish their tasks on time so as to gain the rewards from their supervisors. In these people’s minds, there is a motto “ the more you have, the happier you are” , which acts like a alarm to encourage people to crave what they want.

It is likely that the people who possess more, the more respect and high social statues they have. The famous people and elites are the people who enjoy their lives greately not just because they have enough money but also they win ordianry people’s respect and admire vastly. As a result, these can benefit them a lot and motivate them to do more excellent jobs. 这句和主题有关吗?
此段说的不是很明确

However, people can also live happily although they have a little possession. In the poverty parts of my country, most children do not have the chance to go to school. What is worse, they do not even have enough food to sustain themselve. Surprisingly, according to a interview, these substance poor children say they live a happy life and satisfy with what they already have. Their health body, happy family and their friends’ accompany are just enough to them. They show their gratitude( F9 I( f& z& }6 D3 ~4 N
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To sum up, most people feel happier if they possess more while some people possess fewer but also live a happy life. From my perspective, whether people could live happily or not is determined by their attitudes towards what they have instead of how much they have.

我觉得把观点在表明一点更好,因为前面不知道你为什么说了肯定的,又说了否定的。知道最后一段才知道,所以前面先摆明观点更好,还有注意单词的拼写错误
You are what you do !

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发表于 2011-4-25 22:30:58 |只看该作者
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Watching movie is a prevalent way for people to release their pressures and have relaxtion. Which type of movie do you think is worth watching? From my perspectives, not only the movies that can teach us something about real life and but also other types of moive such as the science fiction films that will help us to broaden our imagination are worth watching.

Watching movie that can bring benefits to people’s lives is of enormous significance. Such kind of movies can not only take people to wonderful journeys to know the world better but also give them inspirations. For instance, one of my favouriate moives is “Journey to the West.” It describes a plot that four monks have a long journey to the west to get the truth. On the way, they face a lot of difficulites, hardships and temptations. However, they never give up and stick to their goals. At the end, they reach their destination and achieve their goals. I learn from the moive that faith makes a person strong and I work harder than ever before in my studies and never lose my hope for the future.

A positive movie or a movie that can provide a lot of valuable experience and knowledge for people is likey to give people encouragement and motive them to fight for themselves. The Forrest Gump, a famous and successful movie, can help people to get out of the shadows and have confidence in themselves if they were in great depression. The Raise of the Great Nation, a well-known Chinese movie, is like a living encyclopaedia, offers people an opportunity to know the great history of China. Therefore, a movie that can broaden people’s knowledge is indeed worth wathcing!

Admittedly, other types of movie such as the science ficiton film is also worth a wath. It can not be denied that watching such a kind of movie, our skills such as the imagination skills, creativity and innovation skills will have dramatic improvement. A walk to the Moon, a popular science fiction movie, helps us realize the magnificence of the giant galaxy and the amazing explore of the Moon.

To sum up, movies that can not only teach us something invaluable about our lives but also that can enhance our innovation and creativity are worth watching. In order to enjoy our lives greatly, it is unwise for us to narrow our alterantive that we just the watch the movies that teach us about the real life.

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发表于 2011-5-17 17:10:31 |只看该作者
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Nowadaysmovies and television programs are the most prevalent ways for people to broaden their horizons and to release their great pressures. What should be shown for audience is a crucial problem. Some people states the opinion that movies and televisions should always show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished. From my perspective, apart from that, how bad people become good people should also be displayed.

It is our society’s ethic discipline that good people are worth rewarding and bad people should be punished. Under this guidance, it is more likely for people to obey the laws and rules in order not to commit a crime. Also, it is beneficial for the society’s stable and people can enjoy their lives comfortably and safely. What is important, the whole society will get obvious improvement and development because of people’s awareness of obeying the laws. Under this circumstance, movies and televisions that show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished play important roles in it.

Besides, these kinds of movies and television programs can act as a model which may encourage people to follow the good aspect of the characters. For example, The Volunteers, a famous Chinese movie, records two volunteers who devote themselves to the charity and give their help to the children who live in poor countryside. After watching such a movie, many audience take part in the volunteer works. According to a survey, the number of volunteers in China last year has soared to 500 million. On the other hand, people tend to avoid challenging the laws and rules by witnessing someone being punished due to the mistakes. If someone is fined and sent to jail due to his drives after drinking the alcohol, it is likely for people not to copy this rude behavior and to follow the traffic rules.

It is essential for the movies and television programs to perform some stories about how the bad people change their rude behavior and turn to become a good person. In this persuasive way, it is more likely for the audience to know the importance to behave properly after making the mistakes. It can not be denied that everyone would make a mistake, and the mistake itself is not bad enough. The most terrible and worst thing is that people who commit a crime still make the same mistake again and do not know how to behave correctly. Therefore, if the movies and television programs inform people that even a crime can be a good person if he or she knows how to modify his or her behavior.

To sum up, movies and television programs are the influential media that can affect people’s behavior. In this way, it is necessary for the movies and television programs broadcast the proper and even noble behavior of the characters to the audience.

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发表于 2011-5-18 12:38:40 |只看该作者
Nowadaysmovies and television programs are the most prevalent ways for people to broaden their horizons and to release their great pressures. What should be shown for audience is a crucial problem. Some people states the opinion that movies and televisions should always show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished. From my perspective, apart from that, how bad people become good people should also be displayed., J4 M; V1 u# ^  b
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It is our society’s ethic discipline that good people are worth rewarding and bad people should be punished. Under this guidance, it is more likely for people to obey the laws and rules in order not to commit a crime. Also, it is beneficial for the society’s stable and people can enjoy their lives comfortably and safely. What is important, the whole society will get obvious improvement and development because of people’s awareness of obeying the laws. Under this circumstance, movies and televisions that show audience good people being rewarded and bad people being punished play important roles in it.
Besides, these kinds of movies and television programs can act as a model which may encourage people to follow the good aspect of the characters. For example, The Volunteers, a famous Chinese movie, records two volunteers who devote themselves to the charity and give their help to the children who live in poor countryside. After watching such a movie, many audience take part in the volunteer works. According to a survey, the number of volunteers in China last year has soared to 500 million. On the other hand, people tend to avoid challenging the laws and rules by witnessing someone being punished due to the mistakes. If someone is fined and sent to jail due to his drives after drinking the alcohol, it is likely for people not to copy this rude behavior and to follow the traffic rules.8 P. y& H( ^: h1 U' O$ L
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It is essential for the movies and television programs to perform some stories about how the bad people change their rude behavior and turn to become a good person. In this persuasive way, it is more likely for the audience to know the importance to behave properly after making the mistakes. It can not be denied that everyone would make a mistake, and the mistake itself is not bad enough. The most terrible and worst thing is that people who commit a crime still make the same mistake again and do not know how to behave correctly. Therefore, if the movies and television programs inform people that even a crime can be a good person if he or she knows how to modify his or her behavior.7 F4 f6 E  N# F0 B3 |
To sum up, movies and television programs are the influential media that can affect people’s behavior. In this way, it is necessary for the movies and television programs broadcast the proper and even noble behavior of the characters to the audience.

语言没有任何问题,小错误什么的也没有,不错!但是我个人的看法啊,这个题目是问你是否同意这个观点,然后文章是围绕着是否同意以及原因写的,所以我觉得第三段,有点展开了讲的,但是我个人认为好像离题远了一些,如果把握不好这个度的话很容易让考官理解为你离题了。
最后结尾落脚点应该还是回到 good people being rewarded and bad people being punished,而不是 the behavior of the characters.
个人意见,如有异议,欢迎联系,共同进步!
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