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Is it easier to be success in the past than it is today? 091010NA
Nowadays , pursuing success has become a hot topic . People find different ways to become(gain/obtain…) success such as going abroad to study , working in the government (agency), running a business . But the question about is it easier to be success in the past than it is today is always debated . (But whether it is easier to be success in the past than today always questioned.?)Some people who hold the opinion that with the development of the economy there is more ways for people to become (动词多换换说法吧 不要雷同)success think（长句不是这样用的，chinglish） today is easier to be success（successful） than it is in the past . （in contrast with that,）many people hold the objection which could be summarized as follows . (建议在研究下某些词的词性)

First of all , although there are many opportunities for people to be success , there are also a lot of competitors . The opportunities are distributed for every person is small . Use my father as an example , during his years , there are so few people realize to earn money through doing business , they just work as the bosses told （chinglish）. Some wisdom people try different jobs such as selling some goods , doing small business can obtain success . In the contrast（on the contrary） , current people are so competent , they have a higher education , innovative ideas . It is so difficult to be success in the challenge(名词，challenging、competive) society unless you are more clever and industrious .  So it is evident that it is easier to be success in the past than it is today .
Secondly , people in the past do not have some forward concepts （你是想说超前意识还是什么？）,because lack of knowledge or information to be success , they do not know how to do in order to be success , so the less people who have advanced idea can easily get success . My uncle said twenty years ago , there are so fewer people go abroad to study , it is not so difficult like nowadays . People who go abroad to study can get a lot of benefits contain decent job , higher salary ，while returning back. However , today people can acquire different news quickly . They can learn about different currents all over the world just by clicking the mouse . For some businessmen , they can easily receive their competitors' information or even some commercial secrets（你的例子很……） . It is no deny that some businessmen complain that doing business is more and more difficult . 4 Q9 O4 M' u+ a1 D' a! B+ P# D

Maybe it is more convenient for people to receive the messages they want today , maybe it is more freed for them to pursue their success . But I reckon that the difficulties in today are much more than in the past if some factors such as competitors and small opportunities are taken into consideration （能不用被动就不要用被动，take into account 是不是更好点）. So I think that it is easier to be success in the past than it is today .
1.        词性不清，
2.        词汇量少，句式单一

liwu1028UID: 2921130

5月21日 独立写作

Movies and televisions should always show audience good people are rewarded and bad people are punished .
Nowadays , televisions have become an indispensable part of our life . Most of time we get together with families to watch television programmes to relax and relieve the pressure from work . But when asked about whether movies and televisions should always show audience good people and bad people are punished , people have a dilemma . According to my personality and experience , I cling to an unshakeable belief that movies should show some reality . Among countless factors which contribute to my position are following conspicuous ones .

First of all , if movies show the positive too much , it may lead people to idealize the society , they may feel uncomfortable about the real world . Especially some programmes as a form of education to children , they will be mislead by these programmes , they will not have the sense to keep away from the negative things , it is dangerous for them . Take my brother as a example , his parents always tell him bad people will be punished . One time , his bike is  stole but he thought the thief will be punished because the bad man should be punished , but the policeman could not help him to find the thief , he felt so depressed that disbelief his parents . So the importance to show the real world is crucial in movies and televisions .

Furthermore , most of people watch televisions just for fun , they want to watch interesting programmes which are unusual and extraordinary , so the programmes should be innovated . Some attractive movies are unexpected instead of a happy ending . In the famous movies ,      director plan some good people die in order to luring the audiences' attention . Spectators obtain excite from the movies . It is no doubt that it is a successful movies . If the movie just show some people be rewarded and bad people be punished , I reckon it will lose a great number of viewers . So a entertainment movie should be fascinating .

Of course , there are some advantages for movies to show good people are rewarded and bad people are punished . It will help people to become a positive one . But it is just a small part , we can not believe people will contribute to society just because watch some programmes . So the benefits can not compare to the originality movies when the entertainment and education are taken into consideration . So I reinforce my stand point that it is not necessary to the programmes always show a perfect ending .

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5月21日综合写作  tpo7
The lecture is mainly discussing some reasons that favor the ecocertified product , whereas , this is disparate from the reading passage , which disagree this product . The lecture by the professor , unquestionably , casts doubt on the reading .

First and foremost , the speaker contends that consumers do not treat the advertising same , they will distinguish between the companies that sell their own products and the ecological certification agencies . They trust the ecocertification agency , so they want to buy the product which is labeled . In contrast , the reading passage asserts that consumers do not belief the advertising . Therefore , the lecture is opposite to the writer's expectation .

Furthermore , the speaker indicates that just when a price is much higher than another one , otherwise the consumers will not take the price into consideration . The label product is higher than the normal one 5percent , so the consumer will think about the other factors instead of price .In addition , they have a strong sense of protect environment .  Running counter to the belief in the lecture , the reading points out that American consumers tend to be strongly motivated by price , they will choose the cheaper one . This point is directly contradicted by what the lecture mentions .

Overall , the speaker raises the issue that it will occur the foreign competition , if the local products are not perfect , the foreign products will compete with the local products , and they will attract a lot of consumers . so it is necessary for the local products are labeled . This point disagrees the point in the reading that American wood business just sell the product to the local people , it is no need to certification .

So the contents in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has totally different opinions on the topic made in the reading .

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Movies and televisions should always show audience good people are rewarded and bad people are punished.

Nowadays, televisions have become an indispensable part of our life. Most of time we get together with families to watch television programs to relax and relieve the pressure from work. But when asked about whether movies and televisions should always show audience good people and bad people are punished, people have a dilemma. According to my personality and experience, I cling to an unshakeable belief that movies should show some reality. Among countless factors which contribute to my position are following conspicuous ones.

First of all, if movies show the positive too much, it may lead people to idealize the society, they may feel uncomfortable about the real world. Especially some programs as a form of education to children, they will be mislead by these programs, they will not have the sense to keep away from the negative things, it is dangerous for them. Take my brother as an example, his parents always tells him bad people will be punished. One time, his bike is stole but he thought the thief will be punished because the bad man should be punished, but the policeman could not help him to find the thief, he felt so depressed that disbelief his parents. So the importance to show the real world is crucial in movies and televisions.

Furthermore, most of people watch televisions just for fun, they want to watch interesting programs which are unusual and extraordinary(重复了 去掉一个即可), so the programs should be innovated . Some attractive movies are unexpected instead of a happy ending. In the famous movies, director plan some good people die in order to luring the audiences' attention. Spectators obtain excite from the movies. It is no doubt that it is a successful movie. If the movie just shows some people be(are) rewarded and bad people are punished, I reckon it will lose a great number of viewers. So an entertainment movie should be fascinating.

Of course, there are some advantages for movies to show good people are rewarded and bad people are punished. It will help people to become a positive one. But it is just a small part , we can not (cannot) believe people will contribute to society just because watch some programs . So the benefits can not (cannot) compare to the originality movies when the entertainment and education are taken into consideration. So I reinforce my stand point that it is not necessary to the programs always show a perfect ending.