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冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

7月30日综合

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

7月30日 独立
我怎么感觉我这个作文我两年前就写过> <

愤怒公爵UID: 2929648

7月30日综合，改好了，不知道怎么发附件，就直接在帖子里面回复了

20080823NA A teacherwho is serious and strict is more efficient than a teacher who uses humor andwho is easygoing.

A humorous and easygoing teacher is alwaysa most popular teacher but is not always the most efficient teacher in aschool. If I were ask learning from which type of teacher, serious and strictor humor and easygoing, can you absorb knowledge more efficient and effective?(这个长句，我都晕倒了，好) My answer will be definitely the former.

开头好直接啊，是不是可以加一些修饰呢？

Those people who assert that humorous andeasygoing teachers are more fruitful in education may believe that theirinstructions are more acceptable because of their cordial characteristic. In aclass, students not only can learn from the reference book, but even（but also） canlearn from the funny instances made by humorous teachers, which give a hand to studentsto understand the class. However, students, particularly young children wholack self-control, may focus their attention only on jokes instead of the realknowledge that（个人偏好，定语从句加先行词更地道一些）
they should learn. Can we draw atelling conclusion that it is the easygoing type of teaching slows students’study progress?

As for me, taking the class of a strictteacher makes me feel I can concentrate more on class and, what is moreimportant, I will strict with myself. Teachers who are serious and strictalways present more content in a class, making use of time used by the humorousteacher for making jokes. I used to learn from a strict and knowledgeableteacher in high school. Her strict logic thinking and substantive instructcontent push us immerse into the Math world not only in the whole class butalso after class. All of the student in my class got abetter grade and became enthusiasm about Math. Therefore, as a conclusion madeby a professor in Peking University, student may study happily with pushoverteachers, but strict teachers can bring about more to students.

Moreover, rather than merely the schoolwork, other excellent characteristics from a rigorous teacher are also valuableand worth appreciate. A rigorous teacher will never be strict with his or herstudent without be strict with him or her own. Always, at the same time when I benefitfrom the rigorous school work, the characteristics of serious teacher alwaysinfluence on me a lot, such as diligent working attitude, great working passionand responsibility towards students. Is not it the most efficient education thatnot only teaches you scientific knowledge but also how to be an all-around developedperson and build up your personality?

第三个论点感觉与第二个论点重复，不过写得很好。

Admittedly, amiable teachers are seeminglymore accessible. Strict and Serious teachers are the person who can bring aboutyou some hand-on and real-world education. Thus, Strict and Serious teachersare more efficient and effective in teaching.

楼主牛人，我都找不到什么大错，只能根据文章总体排了，楼主词汇量好广啊，楼主托福都考多少分啊？整篇文章不是典型的三段论，但是论点都很完整，容易理解，有说服力，逻辑清楚，写得不错！！

愤怒公爵UID: 2929648

7月30日 TPO18

The article provides three methods to point out the decline of Terreya taxifoha and keep Terreya from extinct. However, the lecture with examples states that all of these three solutions cannot satisfy the desired goal.

Reestablish Torreya in the same area where it prosperous for thousands of years is the first option challenged by the speaker. As global warming contributes to increasing temperature in the region and thus climate change in North Florida is influenced, the dryer and dryer microclimate which used to be suitable for growing Torrey would not provide proper condition for Terrey.

The speaker points out the severe consequences will occurs if migrate Torreya to an entirely different location, which is an(another可能好一点) option mentions in the article. The lecture demonstrates with a vivid example of another human assisted migration of another plant. The tree spreads too quickly in the new area and kills almost all of the native species which is already in danger of extinction.（原文中是some of them 你这样写变成全部了） Thus, in order to protect those native plants and avoid unimagined outcome, migrating Torreya to a new place is not a plausible solution.（你超越了原文的想法啊，原文中只是UNPRIDICTABLE）

Finally, the speaker marks that rear Torreya in research centers cannot be successful. There are two criteria need to guarantee Torreya survive, which is large habitat and genetically diverse. Natural habitat can meet the criteria but research centers do not have the capacity.(感觉没有写完呢，capacity后面加定语 to contain a large population).

楼主强人啊，基本无语法错误，并且一看词汇量就很好，楼主英语基础一定很扎实。
不过这篇文章感觉不是很完整。开头和结尾稍加修饰可能更好一点、

师走99UID: 2857041

改的太晚了，不好意思哈~
7.29独立

julijoneUID: 2843727

7月30的独立
水平明显逊于楼主 改得不是见谅

julijoneUID: 2843727

独立很好 就不改了

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

82# 愤怒公爵
谢谢你的建议，我综合写得很不好，互相学习啦！

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

83# 师走99

我看了一下，和你不是一组的哇><

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

85# julijone

你已经改过独立啦，你是不是要说综合不改了？
我综合都不会写呢，写的特别不好，还是麻烦改一下吧！多谢啦~~

season08UID: 2667789

冰雪疯鸟童鞋，我怎么样才能跟你一组呀，嘿嘿？

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

8月2日 独立
今天的作文写得好烂><