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[求助] 刚刚完成的第一篇独立作文,憋了两个小时,估计还是高中水平,求指教。 [复制链接]

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发表于 2011-7-7 00:50:47 |显示全部楼层
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Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to works for a small company. Which would you prefer?Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

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Some one may prefer to work in a small company because they like challenge. But I would choose a large company. Since I have been working in a company that is the most important player in the market,I think working in a large company is benefit for my career.

First, a large company could offer well training for employees. The company has enough human resource and money to run training project, which is useful and important for new employee who has just graduated form school. For example, before I worked with my colleague, I must take a special course to learn acknowledge which should be familiarly for working,such as the culture of company, how to write a document, what should do if I have some problem. When I finished this training, a senior engineer, as my supervisor, would give me directly teaching for the works. So the suitable training for employees is one of important reason why I would like work for a large company.

Secondly, the duty of each employee is clearer. Do not like a small company, a large corporation has enough professional team. Engineers should not worry about how to know what is the most needed of custom, for there would be a special team to collect and analyze the requirement of custom. Then engineers could focus on what they were good at. But in a small company, the engineer may need to contact with custom directly because of lacking enough worker.

Finally, in most condition, large corporation could pay more salary to the workers. I think most people would not refuse a higher salary.

Working in a small company may have some advantage such as more chance of promote, more experiment for different position. But thus advantages were not absorb me to work in a small company. If I have the chance to make a choice, I still prefer to work in a large company.
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发表于 2011-7-7 00:55:21 |显示全部楼层
奇怪,贴上来的内容会缺少一些空格。难道和Mac下的office不兼容?
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发表于 2011-7-7 01:32:14 |显示全部楼层
咱们俩水平应该差不多,我也刚写了一个,你可以去看看

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发表于 2011-7-19 10:16:56 |显示全部楼层
1. "But" CAN NOT be used in an independent sentence. Use "however" or "nevertheless" instead.
2. You have three good reasons but didn't develop them well. Use more explanation or details about your experiences.
3. In conclusion, you CAN NOT have a NEW idea which didn't describe in your body paragraphs. (i.e. Working in a small company may have some advantage such as more chance of promote, more experiment for different position.)

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RE: 刚刚完成的第一篇独立作文,憋了两个小时,估计还是高中水平,求指教。 [修改]

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