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发表于 2011-7-26 16:34:08 |显示全部楼层
作文题目是(TPO19):同不同意一下statement:
In order to well-informed, a person must get information from many different news source.



We can easily see that well-informed persons are also good communicators in the society. How can these persons do like that? How can they get to know such amazing scale of information? I agree that the best way to become a well-informed person is to obtain information from variety kinds of news sources.

The elders are good resource for us to get the information about the past. In spare time, we can talk about the past with our grandparents under trees. That is a good chance to view the past culture. Through your grandparents’ eyes, we seem to stand in a real world they described. Besides grandparents’ guidance, parents are also good source for the development of person’s well-informed. We can acquire the latest or important information about my country so that we can know what happen around the country or even around the world. Other elder persons can also lead you to a well-informed person due to their different kinds of knowledge.

The median like Internet newspaper and television can also be good ways to become well-informed person. In today, people like to open the television after work. Through the televisions, we can acquire the information about the latest news. When the Olympic games took place in China, the people out of China watch the games through TV at the same time like the people in China. At the same time, internet become more and more important in people’s life. If a person want to get information, the only thing they do is just to “google” on the internet. That will use you a few second to search, you will see large number of the information result on the screen after finishing searching. Besides internet and television, we can obtain the daily news from newspaper. Because of the median, we can easily to become a well-know person around our friends.

Admittedly, we will become well-informed person easily under the convenience in today. However, the median or the person you meet might not all provide the right information to you. Misleading or unhealthy information sometimes appear during the process when you get the information. The one who want to become a well-informed person must judge the information what you get.

In conclusion, we must try to pay attention to every chance to acquire the information. Different ways to get information can let you think thoroughly and become well-informed.


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发表于 2011-7-26 19:08:17 |显示全部楼层
我只是想知道  6.7号生日的人叫Carol的频率这么高么?

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发表于 2011-7-26 21:45:38 |显示全部楼层
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lz作文题目是(TPO19):同不同意一下statement:
In order to well-informed, a person must get information from many different news source.
lz第一段表明了自己的观点,但接下来却没说为什么,只是列举了两大类获得信息的途径。
个人感觉这是硬伤,lz举的两个例子无法说明为什么lz 支持某观点。
所有的捷径都是弯路

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发表于 2011-7-27 08:10:04 |显示全部楼层
3# wrath

多谢楼上的指导,但是,我对于这个题目,找不到头绪,LZ有什么高见啊?应该写些什么比较好呢?
by the way,如果有朋友需要准备T的,一起叫过来加入作文组吧,这里人烟貌似太稀少了。。呃~~~~

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发表于 2011-7-27 08:18:30 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 zqz41932 于 2011-7-27 08:36 编辑

我想加入~~可是怎么加入个法呢? 楼主留个QQ啊。。。

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发表于 2011-7-27 08:38:25 |显示全部楼层
有兴趣的朋友加我Q啊,我QQ:438450112。到时我们建立个群,以后互相修改就很方便了!有兴趣的朋友都可以一起加入啊!为了26+奋斗啊!

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本帖最后由 wrath 于 2011-7-27 11:17 编辑

4# zhangbao0607
额 如果是我写这个题目的话
第一段 套用点开篇模板 表明观点 譬如 我支持 这个statement
二三两段 分别举两个例子 一正一反 说明
正面例子 someone who get information from many different news source  then  he/she naturally become a well-informed one
反面例子 someone who refuse to get information from many different news source then he/she failed to become a well-informed one
最后一段小结 下  再扣下题
这是我的思路仅供参考


所有的捷径都是弯路

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