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People benefit more from travelling abroad or travelling in our own country
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      It is commonly believed that travelling is greatly beneficial to us. However, there comes the question that which is better, travelling in our own country or in a foreign country. Some people may incline to travel abroad. But as for me, I'd like to travel in our own country.
      In the first place, travelling in our own country can largely inspire us and we will have a better understanding of our country. After all, we have grown up in this countrysince we are born. When you see those wonderful inventions our ancestors ever made and splendid cultural relics left, we can greatly inspired and take pride in it.Hence you will have much passion to realize your own ideas and be positive. Take me for instance. Last summer,I paid a visit to the Palace museum. When I enter it, my eyes are fixed on those rare historical relics. I'm moved and proud of our ancestors for their witness. In contrast, foreign country that is new to me makes little difference to me . From this angle, travelling in our own country should take the first place.
      Another reason for my ideal is that travelling in our own country is more relaxing compared to travelling abroad. Admittedly, foreign country seems fresh to us . Nevertheless, there is great culture gap between different country, especially in language. It is always difficult for a new visitor to blend in the new country. As a result, you’ chances are you feel lonely which influences your journey. However, if you travel in our own country, ,you’ll feel at home wherever you are for that you are so familiar with it. You are able to communicate with local people straightly without the help of those translators. You will be confident, warm and comfortable. Obviously, in this case, travelling in our own country bring us more benefit
      From what we have discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that fresh though foreign country is, travelling in our own country brings us more benefit .
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