【Daily Writing作文特训小组】放飞的小鸟—作文贴！鼓励加油必胜

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All school teachers should berequired to take courses every five years to update their knowledge.

Should teachers update their knowledgeat intervals? For a long time, this is a serious issue for intensedebate in our society. Accompanied with fast social development, moreand more people, including me, suggest that teachers should keepstudying as soon as possible.

First and foremost, taking coursesregularly can help teachers to keep up with social development.Particularly, in our time now, everything changes so fast. Moreover,huge amount of new knowledge in many disciplines has shown up day byday. For instance, the high-tech of clone has just appeared in recentyears though many old professors in biology still deny it; many newelements in chemistry have come to our world due to the PeriodicTable; mathematical experts are now crazy about challenging manyaxioms, though seeming to be silly; sociological scientists areengaged in searching for new models to settle down many problemsexisted in our society. Under such circumstance, how can a teacherfollow the step steps of the socialadvancing without studying all the time?  

What’s more, updating periodically isnot only necessary to meet the need of self-development but alsoresponsible for their students. Unlike the students in the past,young men nowadays are more eager to know something new rather thanreceive old mechanical knowledge. If a teacher does not keep study,how can he/she explain a new complicated phenomenon to the students?I can never think a better example to illustrate this point. On dayin my biology class, my teacher was talking about gene genes.Suddenly, a boy stood up and asked: “dear teacher, could you pleaseexplain what happened when a man’s cell meet an animal one such asa deer?” Then, my teacher got angry, stopped him and insisted thatit was ridiculous. However, this was not! Recently, a baby of a manand a deer has really shown up in the experiment lab in London.Concerning this case, my teacher is definitely irresponsible.

Finally, in the psychologicalperspective, learning more is a great drive for a teacher to do agood job, as British Poem Chaucersaid, “Glad to learn, glad to teach”. If teachers can take somecourses to update knowledge, they may get excited, probably willingto share with others. So, they are more likely to teach theirstudents with the new knowledge they have got through studying. Oneinvestigation in my school has shown that the teacher who learnsomething new will feel exciting when they are in class, while otherswho have no idea about new knowledge may feel tired and boring.

Insum, if there is one teacher can keep efficiency without furtherstudy-which I take leave to doubt- then he/she must be living in thepast. Hence,regular upgrading process is really necessary for teachers nowadays,not only a great wealth for themselves but also more responsibilityfor their students.

因为我的作文很烂，所以也不知道要改些什么，我的感觉是写的很不错，有gre 的感觉， 膜拜了

april0515UID：2997208

  改好啦 很不错~  希望得到回改~ 15# lisq9989

little_catyUID：3014175

哈哈，又见到了,我也来改了~

lisq9989UID：2110509

哈哈，又见到了,我也来改了~
little_caty 发表于 2011-8-5 22:40

改的很好，谢谢

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8.9独立+综合

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8.10综合

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Recently, more competing theories have been raised to argue the use of the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico. However, the speaker in the lecture does not agree with any of them since the evidences discussed below.

First and foremost, the speaker insists that these settlements cannot be used as residential housings, even though someone argues that they seem similar as the ( big apartment, 我记得好像是这个吧)one in the southwest societies recently. The crucial evidence of the speaker lies inside the settlements. He explains that if these settlements could be used as dwelling house, then there must be many fire places in them in order to do some cooking. However, the inside situation shows that even the largest settlement, seems to be fit for 100 families, only has a fire places which can meet the need of 10 families. Therefore, the residential assertion can be only unsound.

The（A） second theory contends that these settlements were for storing use, maize for instance. But the speaker still regards it unsupported due to the requirements for maize storage. As he points out in the lecture, if the old people did use the settlements to store maize, then there must be some trace of maize left behind and also some maize containers. However, recent excavations have not found any of them in these large settlements. Hence, the theory of storage is absolutely unsubstantiated.

Finally, facing with the third proposal that considers the settlements as a ceremonial center, the speaker shows his different opinions. He asserts that provided these big houses were used to hold a ceremony, some other material-some building materials like sand, stone and construction tools-have to be found during excavations. Unfortunately, no similar findings have been exposed to public yet. Considering the broken pots inside these buildings, the speaker suggests that it is totally possible that it is the constructor who left them inside, after finishing their eating of course. If that's true, then this assertion can be also untenable.

From all the evidences above, the speaker shows a skeptical attitude to all the hypotheses that have appeared in these days. Perhaps, more evidences are needed to reveal such a mystery.

写得很好，我觉得如果考场上能达到这个水平肯定就是满分了。加油！谢谢你帮我改作文，等你的好消息！

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楼主牛人啊~~

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多谢楼上两位鼓励，我觉得综合写作挺像GRE的ARGUMENT的，很多句子都可以套过来用，但是我也是看听力，有的记的好的，就可以写出来，有的只能靠猜测。anyway, 3x

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8.12 独立



说明：同组的同学你们好，由于今天的题目我上周已经写过，正好昨天的题目我没有参与写，就把昨天的题目写了，麻烦你们帮我修改一下，谢谢

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独立  改

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详情见文档~

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8.15 独立+综合

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我上次不知道怎么没有排上，看了看你们的文章，顺便修改了一下，也欢迎看看我的。

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基于本人只写了独立，所以也只帮你改独立啦。见谅见谅！
   写得非常好哦。受教了。以后多交流哦！