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发表于 2011-8-18 11:28:25 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-18 12:52:07 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-18 21:29:58 |只看该作者
因为自己没有TPO14,所以用TPO20的综合代替了,求拍
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发表于 2011-8-19 10:15:12 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-20 12:07:30 |只看该作者
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Extraordinary means lonely. Genius’ different before they succeed is why people would think them special. As successful person would think and live different, in order to succeed, people should keep their own specialty instead of imitate others to be normal.

First of all, succeed require its hunters to think forward and act first. Successful people would found out the potential risk and opportunity before those happened to avoid or grasp those. For supporting example, there is no better than Mayun’s legendary.  As just a high English teacher in high school, he found the prosperous future of internet business when internet is not widespread in China. Although all his relatives and friends against him to quite his stable position for chasing his “no future dream” called Alibaba, he insisted his choice and started his online business empire. Even when most of his employees quitted and no one want to borrow him money, he finally get through those troubles and become one of the most successful businessman in China. As one of his fans, I learned a lesson that chasing dream means hunt for object and opportunity use your own eyes even you are the only one can see it.

Secondly, we should follow the right principle instead of just do what everyone does. Most of the time, the reason why only small part of people can win at last is only they do the right thing. In my experience, As I choose to study when most of my peers waste their time on playing computer game and watching television, I got the highest score; as I followed professors’ lecture carefully when others miss the class or did not pay much attention, I can study more efficiently after class; as I tried my best to find internship in the summer when others just use that time to travel or date with their girlfriends, I got the best job in my class. Do the right thing when all others are confused is how people run faster in their career. Choose the right living style now is to choose successful life in the future.

Admittedly, some people may doubt my point as they think be different means less friends. As we all know, find common topic is a good way to make friends and networking is crucial for succeed. Although this argument seems reasonable, we can find its flaws after examine the characteristic of real friends. Real friend is the person reliable and trustworthy instead of just someone to play with, acting like others can just bring normal friends instead of real friends. So act like others cannot benefit in finding useful friend.

All in all, be different is the right way to chase for succeed. Even though it may be tough at first, in order to succeed, it is worth to do it.

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发表于 2011-8-20 20:08:01 |只看该作者
帮你改了,还是不错
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发表于 2011-8-24 21:48:02 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-24 22:28:48 |只看该作者
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哥们为什么你23号的文章实质内容是24号的,小弟我这怎么改啊。。。
青山遮不住,毕竟东流去。

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发表于 2011-8-25 17:11:10 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-27 09:41:44 |只看该作者
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money in improving internet access than public transportation.

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peoples communication easier and relationship less closer. Although improving internet access can facilitate people to chat with friends, read news and watch video more easily, internet cannot replace the feeling of meeting friends face to face and travel to the place to see the beauty in own eyes. Moreover, although online working is possible now, public transportation is still important for the society function well.


First and foremost, internet elongate inter-person distance while public transportation shorten it. As study show, internet is causing more than 1million computer addiction in China annually. With the convenient of using Skype to chat with friends and relatives, YouTube to enjoy video and website to read news, a large amount of citizens chose to stick to computer instead to make friends and exercise outside. However, internet’s chatting make some of them feel shy and embarrass in having conversation in front of real people. Moreover, computer’s radiation harmed a lot of children’s eyes and lack of exercise decreased their health. Additionally, when people wants to meet their friends and do exercise closer to a nature environment, public transportation is needed. So, switching the money from improving internet to improve public transportation is to encourage people to go outside to enjoy the fun of making friends and exercising.

Secondly, public transportation is more important in residences’ life and companies business. Think about what is happening in New York subway at the end of business hour every day. Those crowding employees and rushing officers just want to catch the train on time. If they missed the train, they need to wait another half hour after their tired several hours work. If the government can invest more money to add more train, they do not need to be so nervous about if they can catch the train. Moreover, consider about this condition, if you are a boss, how would you feel if you cannot deliver your commodity on time and need to pay more money for the delay. Even though citizens can order goods and do business online, those goods are still needed to by deliver with transportation in real world. So, better public transportation can make society function more efficiently.

Admittedly, internet is also important as a crucial way to commute information. Nevertheless, information cannot compare to real people and real goods. Therefore, improving public transportation is more crucial than improving internet.

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