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TPO 20 综合写作


In the lecture the professor raises counterarguments to each of the three points mentioned in the reading passage about the damages in the Yellowstone National Park caused by the "let it burn" policy. Contrary to the reading, the professor asserts that natural fire is necessary for ecological cycle and the "let it burn" is a good policy.

First of all, the article claims that the big fire causes astronomical damage to trees and vegetation in Yellowstone. The lecturer, by contrast, argues against this view and states that vegetation burned will be covered with new plants which create a more diverse plantation environment. For example the fire can give a chance for smaller plants to grow because it eliminates those tall trees.

Another crucial point the writer makes is that wildlife is seriously affected in the fire owing to the destruction of habitat and the break of food chains. The lecturer, however, disagrees with this idea and contends that not only do animals recovered after the fire but they were provided with new opportunities because of the fire. For example, smaller plants which appeared after the fire formed new habitats for animals such as rabbits. With the increase of these animals came their predators, a phenomenon which actually strengthen the food chain.

Finally, while the author maintains that the fire negatively affected local economy by reducing the value of Yellowstone's tourist attraction, the professor argues that the fire can't affect economy seriously because such kind of destructive fire barely happens. Its happening was due to the combination of a large variety of unusual conditions which was impossible for most of the time. Furthermore, the fire has not happened since 1988, so the fire has very limited effect on the local economy.

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hey我看到你在别的帖子上给我留的言~~我愿意改你第一篇写的那个limit hour的那个~~我正好13号的作文每当天写也没占座，你能帮我改下那个吗？我贴在你的这里了哈~

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这是我的13号的作文！谢谢！

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唔改了...写得不错...
100312 已修改` moonlightlane 100312 ...revised by zuragh .doc (25 KB, 下载次数: 22)

2011-8-15 01:11:10 上传

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拜读了你的文章，佩服之极啊。加油~~~

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hey~改过的第一篇


另：把文章贴出来不好，万一将来赶上考试的时候刚好写过这篇作文，然后被搜出来跟你这篇原练习文章雷同的话，岂不很冤啊。。如果等级够的话，还是用附件传吧！

moonlightlaneUID: 2764105

8# season08 嗯谢谢提醒，删帖子是要找斑竹吧。。另外怎么传附件捏。。

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7# xieqy0326
you flatter me...谢谢修改了！
PS 你知不知道怎么联系斑竹删帖子啊~如果考试撞上这篇就悲剧了

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5# season08
没问题今天就改~~

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5# season08
改好了，希望对你有帮助！

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传附件就在高级回复的最下面有一栏写着 “黏贴附件”这几个字，点它就行了，位置就在提交按钮的上面

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hey~~~我看了你给我的修改，改得好细致啊！！！多谢指出我的错误~~我就是写欢快了就不怎么管逗号和句号和连接词的语法问题了。。。。。。。。。。><
希望下次还能跟你互改作文哈~

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14# season08 留我你的邮箱吧，作文直接发你邮箱，这样更安全
我的wangzichao6@gmail.com