发篇作文，改了下G时的套路，希望高人指点~~

苇叶笛声UID: 2876158

2009.4.3
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The best way to improve education is to raise teachers’ salaries.



Never can we avoid to ask the following questions when our topic comes to education, the question that how can we improve education levels. When answering the question, many people have made the mistake of focusing on improving the teachers' salaries, always holding that since they are the executor in education, treat them better is the most important solution. As far as I am concerned, nonetheless, researching to take more scientific approaches to educate students is much more useful.

Before giving my arguments, it is necessary for us the make it clear that what is the the standard of wonderful education. Only by concentrate on its objects--the students--can we measure its success or not, and so many aspects should be taken into consideration: their knowledge, their mental health, their ability in learning, social communication and so on. In the following, I would like to analyse these aspects to substantiate my point of view.

First and foremost, in respect of the knowledge, methods is far more important than the participation of teachers. For example, when I was a junior student, the principle of education is to fill us with large amount of knowledge. In this way, we could get high marks in tests, but when we faced a new theory, we had any access to it. In other words, the wrong principle and approaches of education make us become the volume of knowledge. However, it is how rather than what to learn that make sense for our future study. According to this experience, I'd like to emphasize on the importance of a good methods in teaching knowledge.

Subsequently, it is also a vital goal of education that help students to build a good mental health. To achieve this goal, a scientific method is essential in doubt. Classes concerning mental health would be adopted, and access to the help should be facilitated when students are facing with psychological puzzles. How skilled a teacher is, it will not take effect if a wrong method is adopted.

Before come to my conclusion, it is essential for me to point out the last argument of my viewpoint, that is good methods should be taken to help the students to develop their abilities to handle with social work. In this means, good chances to communicate and get touch to companies, governments, and other social departments should be provided. It may have nothing to do with improving scores of the students. But to their future careers and lives, it will be a  specious experience.

In a nutshell, with all aspects of the standards of a successful education--knowledge, mental health, and social work abilities--taken into analysis, I can confidently give the conclusion that the researching on making out a scientific and efficient method of education if far more important than raising teachers' salaries.

苇叶笛声UID: 2876158

求高手指导啊

wdvrdx111UID: 2870800

建议LZ好好看下OG里面的作文要求··怕是有不少内容是属于ETS不喜欢的写作方式···
T的话，还是应该用鲜明的论点以及和翔实的例证来进行文章的架构，一个劲地说道理缺乏说服力··
不过还是考过G的同学··文字功底可以，个别词汇表达什么的再研究研究，越精确越好·

苇叶笛声UID: 2876158

3# wdvrdx111
谢谢建议啊~具体的文字那些有问题啊？劳烦指出啊~~