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14# yuanruicong 10 月6日20100821NA
Do you agree or disagree withthe following statements? There is never a reason for people to be rude(impolite) to another person. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Politeness is one of the most importantcharacteristics in China.After thousands of years, in today's society, a polite person also earns therespect from others and one could(would)feel comfortable when works with them. So, in my opinion, one should be politewith every people without any reason.


Currently, with the rapid development, our society is full ofcompetition. If one wants to reach the top of(in)a company, he should have(should have 是本应有的意思，或者换一个词组？)not only the excellent expertise but also a good attitudetowards surrounding people. How to have a good relationshipwith workmates and boss is the eternal topic for a person who wants to be删去 success. This is also common in the university. As for me, forinstance, when I worked with a polite classmate in my team, I always have agood mood to practice and we can finish the programs more efficiently. Moreover, to be polite people（考虑这一句放在earn the respect from others后面会不会更好一些，变成whenhe or she is a polite people）, it is nodoubt that one can earn the respect from others and it is beneficial to improve his personal reputation. Thus, wecan see, politeness should be the innerpeace（这个是内心平静的意思，或者换成greatvirtue）for every person.


Secondly, being polite is the characteristic from the ancient China.There are lots of examples of predecessors such as Confucius,one of the most famous educationists in Chinese history, tell us politeness isa basic essence of one person. When I was a child, my grandparents told me thatno matter what happened you should always keep politeness to everyone aroundyou. No pain, no gain. Only in this way, others could treat you through thesame manner which is good for your life. I keep this sentence（删去）in my mind so that I can solve some（the） problems of interpersonal relationship relativelyeasier.



Finally, we should treat every one with a polite attitude no matter the richor the poor. There is a terrible phenomenon that some people choose their attitudeaccording to the（删去） one's status who they talked with（删去）. We should know that we are all themembers of a big family, and we are brothers and sisters with each other. Weshould try our best to give the poor our help such as donate to them（donation），inorderto help village children go to school. There are some other things which attract most people's attention. Some special patients,especially who got AIDS, need extra help and concentrate(这句不懂，或者换成specialcaring？) from our society. However, some people keepdistance with them and made them feel hopeless.

Therefore,keeping a polite attitude and having a kind heart can bring a person a lot（alot of benefit）. At the same time, they are also paving a flat way tosuccess.
不好意思，因为不能上传附件，所以直接贴出来了～请多指教，也帮改一下我的作文

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10 月6日 20100821NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? There is never a reason for people to be rude (impolite) to another person. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Politeness is one of the most important characteristics in China. After thousands of years, in today's society, a polite person also earns the respect from others and one could feel comfortable when works with them. So, in my opinion, one should be polite with every people without any reason.

  Currently, with the rapid development, our society is full of competition. If one wants to reach the top of a company, he should have not only the（the？不太对吧） excellent expertise but also a good attitude towards surrounding people. How to have a good relationship with workmates and boss is the eternal topic for a person who wants to be success. This is also common in the university. As for me, for instance, when I worked with a polite classmate in my team, I always have a good mood to practice and we can finish the programs more efficiently. Moreover, to be polite people, it is no doubt that one can earn the respect from others and it is beneficial to improve his personal reputation. Thus, we can see, politeness should be the inner peace for every person.
（说的第一个原因有点太绕了）

  Secondly, being polite is the characteristic from the ancient China. There are lots of examples of predecessors such as Confucius, one of the most famous educationists in Chinese history, tell us politeness is a basic essence of one person. When I was a child, my grandparents told me that no matter what happened you should always keep politeness to everyone around you. No pain, no gain. Only in this way, others could treat you through the same manner which is good for your life. I keep this sentence in my mind so that I can solve some problems of interpersonal relationship relatively easier.
(这个例子很好)

  Finally, we should treat every one with a polite attitude no matter the rich or the poor. There is a terrible phenomenon that some people choose their attitude according to the one's status who they talked with. We should know that we are all the members of a big family, and we are brothers and sisters with each other. We should try our best to give the poor our help such as donate to them to help village children go to school. There are some other things which attract most people's attention. Some special patients, especially who got AIDS, need extra help and concentrate from our society. However, some people keep distance with them and made them feel hopeless. （Aids这个说得很好）

Therefore, keeping a polite attitude and having a kind heart can bring a person a lot. At the same time, they are also paving a flat way to success.


lz你的should语气太多了。。。嗯嗯。。。可以适当变换一下句式~

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18# abigail123

感谢呀 你指出后，我也发现should略多啊。。。

一起加油~

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17# neochenyao

感谢指正 一起加油~

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小美，谢谢你帮我改过的作文，真的很感谢啊~~后面我集中去看听力和阅读了，很久没有写了。但是今天看自己作文贴的时候，看到你帮我改过的作文了，很不好意思，我以为不会有人回复了。最近我不怎么写作文，不过你需要修改就联系我哈，我会尽快帮你改出来~~O(∩_∩)O~再次感谢