悦苓的作文贴

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沙发~要坚持到考试！

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作业之前有几个问题：
这篇文章写得真是烂，要不是笔者自己，简直不想写。
1，这个题目什么意思啊？有人会没有理由地对别人粗鲁，问你同意不同意，这是个现象哪有什么统一不同意的？完全不懂。
2.不知如何下手，是写成社会学分析呢（应该不可能吧·····），就说不对，没有这种现象，还是写成什么？不明白啊····
3.以后有问题是在帖子里提出还是在群里啊？亲爱的帮我改的小朋友(*^__^*) ？

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10月24日 20100821NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? There is never a reason for people to be rude (impolite) to another person. Use specific reasons to support your answer.


There’s an old saying in China by Confucius that everybody was born kind. Generally, I agree with him to the point that there’s never a reason for people to be kind to another person at the first stage of life. But being rude to others? I guess there must be something in the behavior.
I don’t know if you have ever seen the tenderness of new born babies. They are fragile, dependent of their mothers. Have you ever seen the sincere smile of kids? Those who stop to help homeless people and lost animals mostly seen in streets are children too. Children behaviors symbolize the nature of people. If rudeness is a genetic thing that does not need any reason like the desire for food of mankind, it is impoliteness rather than kindness that should be found common in kids.
However, sometimes, we just seem to get annoyed out of nothing! We just get frenzy! But that’s usually not the case. The truth is, we are pissed off directly or potentially. Maybe the anger was impressed for a long time till this eruption. My father’s secretary Ms Sue seems always very gentle and obedient till her suddenly quit and burst out. She cried and cried and complained about the heavy burden she had to undertake which my father didn’t realize at all before this.
Well, despite the rudeness resulted from impressed anger, it’s rather common to see the rich shouting to and laughing at those who seems inferior to them. You may wonder the reason for this kind of rudeness .Though shameful to mention, I cannot deny that this kind phenomenon is rather common in China nowadays. Some people who seems richer than others speak publically in cyber space that they look down upon workers and farmers, such as the woman-in-Yage recently. Well, from my point of view, such rude also has a reason----the environment.  Environment involves the family atmosphere in which they were brought up, education they receive about being civil. When they were born, according to the famous philosopher, in no way could they behave this way. But day after day, if they were got to know bad friends who were rude to others, one day they may really forget the nature of kind and became a part of them.
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欢迎讨论！

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3# liang0603 多谢意见啊O(∩_∩)O哈哈~
关于对题目的理解是会有分歧，我再想想······至于时态，我那里就是用的过去式······至于语法，有些地方是错了，有些地方可能是你不太熟悉啦，其实是可以那么说的啦，比如直接就用involve sth，而不需要with，还有point of view就是一个固定说法。有些地方是省略，不需要那些连词，比如你加的一些地方（连词，或是从句的标志）

互相指出问题，共同进步~\(≧▽≦)/~啦啦啦

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4# yangyueling 你在国外生活过？

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文笔很好啊 呵呵

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6# xianhuo 确实有写偏的嫌疑，唉·····GRE后遗症啊，我也觉得托福的作文应该是很浅的，结果还是扯淡了····

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5# liang0603 木有·····我说的那些固定用法是自己的想法，其实不一定对O(∩_∩)O哈！

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6# xianhuo 哦，对了，第一段不是说人性本善还是本恶，而是说人一开始都是善良的，说明人的本性就是对人好，说明人是没有理由对别人粗鲁的。如果确实有人对别人粗鲁，那也是因为成长环境导致的，还是说明粗鲁不会是没有理由的（后面两段说的）