Daily Writing Camp--笔记哥

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12月1日独立
101203NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage childrento do their work independently.
12月2日独立
101218NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Two persons cannot be friends if one is richer than the other.
12月3日独立
110402NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When you choose a university, which kind of universities do you prefer, universities whose graduates can find good jobs or universities where there are famous professors?
12月5日独立
100508NA
In order to be more financially responsible when we are adults, we should learn how to manage money at young ages.
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12月6日
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main purpose for people who have jobs is for money rather than social status.
12月6日综合写作 为TPO15
12月7日
100130NA Do you agree that the government should support the scientific research even it has no practical use.
12月7日综合写作 TPO16

Heather890704UID: 3167004

亲，12.2号我们一组哒~~我的已经上传啦~~期待你的大作哦~~

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2# Heather890704

上传了，求大侠狠批！~~
中午上传的时候，网站打不开，不知道为什么。
不过现在可以打开了。

Heather890704UID: 3167004

恩，改好啦~~

咱一起加油啊！！冲过去就好了！！

Heather890704UID: 3167004

hi，上次帮你修改作文的时候有个地方我不确定。It goes without saying that...的用法，是OK哒~~是我无知啦。学习啦~谢谢。不过我琢磨了下下，觉得用在那句子中还是as an old saying goes that...比较合适。你说呢?

加油~~

liang0603UID: 3182007

加油！共勉！12.3号我们是一组的，作文互评哦。

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5# Heather890704

感觉 It goes without saying that 和 as an old saying goes that 差不多~~都是引用名人名言的方式~

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7# heyx

OK，got it,thanks~

闫颜UID: 2788503

你的分论点很新啊，好羡慕，我都是想不到要写哪些理由的，思路总是很卡啊！！加油哈！！

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12月5日100508NA  In order to be more financially responsible when we are adults, we should learn how to manage money at young ages.
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Nowadays no one can avoid financial life. When it comes to financial responsibility, most of parents argue that children are too young to recognize the notion of financial responsibility. It is the fact that children people /adults(语意会改变哦) lack the ability to manage money. In my opinion, children should be encouraged to cultivate management of money for several reason following.

First and foremost, learning how to manage money during the teenage can give children more time to practice. If parents teach children how to prepare for money management during the teenage, even though children are often attracted by many temptations such as toys, (两句调换过来会比较通顺,这是改好的)children will learn from their parents and other people to develop their self-discipline and self-control. Children will have more experience to resolve the individual financial risks when they become adults, which(指代不清) are beneficial through all their life. It is the critical advantage for children to manage money at young ages.

In addition, habits formed at early age are stable. The favorable money management founded in the teenage will make a lifelong benefit. A financial responsibility is（delete 了like） a good personality, so people should cultivate their children at young ages. The young generation inherits from the old generation to recognize not only the principle of management but also the hardship of earning money, which will make them more treasure money and less squander.

Last but not the least, people who learn to manage money early, get confidence in financially independence and other staff management. That children learn to make a scheme and plan ahead will make them successful in individual's independence, financially（materially） and mentally(物质上和精神上 会比较协调吧). Take a time management for example. Those who have learned financial management at young age will also have a good commend of time control, for they can put principle of money management into time control.That is helpful(which is helpful.)

In summary, it obviously appears that we should learn how to manage money at young ages in order to be more financially responsible when we are adults.

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sorry 下午才有时间看 有点匆忙
写得很好啦~ 主题很清楚 论点很有力（最后那个赞！）

闫颜UID: 2788503

因为我没有写这篇，只是改了一下语法上的东西。写的很好诶！！加油！！

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终于可以插入附件了
辛苦你啦~

groundheadUID: 3191150

你好哇，我知道你说的对，我也想多看点好的作文，但是好像木有找到，有什么推荐的吗？谢啦 12-06by groundhead.doc (30.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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14# groundhead

有一本书好像叫 新东方•挑战TOEFL作文满分， 你去网上查查有没有电子版的，可以拿来看看。其他的，你可以看看本帖，前人写过的文章，有一些写的还挺好的~