【daily writing 作业】Igoon

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15# FlyingFie thank you!昨天有点小忙，所以没上寄托，感谢！

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14# 秋雨荆州 谢谢，昨天忙，所以没回改！

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3月29日 110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

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已改 18# Igoon

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19# 秋雨荆州
谢谢你的修改！受教，共勉！

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19# 秋雨荆州 查了一下remain的用法，其中有一个如下：
   be left or still present after other parts have been removed or used or dealt with 剩下; 剩余; 遗留: After the fire, very little remained of my house. 火灾过後, 寒舍所剩无几. * If you take 3 from 8, 5 remains. 8减3剩5. * The fact remains that she was lying. 事实表明她说的是假话. * leave the remaining points for our next meeting 余下的各点留待下次会议再议.


而你说的后面加表语应该是这个用法吧？
   continue to be; stay in the same condition 仍然是; 保持不变: remain standing, seated, etc 一直站着﹑ 坐着等 * He remained silent. 他保持沉默. * Let things remain as they are. 一切保持现状吧. * In spite of their quarrel, they remained the best of friends. 他们尽管吵过架, 却仍不失为最好的朋友.

不知对否，你看下巴。

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恩，同意，哈哈~说明还是你写的是正确的~学到了，谢谢！ 21# Igoon

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3.29已改，加油！！

欢迎回改

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3月30日 101203NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children
to do their work independently.

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终于回复，继续上传！

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igoon明天见~哈哈~ 25# Igoon

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It is widely acknowledged that we are always confronting tasks through our lifetime. And absolutely we are facing various works when we are children. Accompanied with this, there is a choice for parents to decide to help their children to accomplish their works or not. As far as I am concerned, parents should encourage the children to solve the problems all by themselves rather than give them a hand.
开头太罗嗦，直奔主题就好 绕来绕去有凑字数的嫌疑
There is no doubt that solving the problems independently would certainly enhance the level of skills. The process would force the children to consider what them have learned and search for the proper solutions as best as them can, regardless of how hard the works is. And definitely as my father said: when in tough, progress comes, the level of problem-solve skill would be promoted. This can be seen from our lives, when we accomplish our tasks, we would feel that we learned more and became more skillful.

减少讲大道理，加入例子。比如谁谁小时候遇到什么事情，以前是怎么解决的，后来父母让其独立解决后得到了怎样的锻炼。。。从而。。能提高。。。

Besides, by resolving the problems on their own, the children can obtain the ability to face difficulties independently. When it comes to the tasks, majority parents may consider them as something out of the reach of their children. On this view, most of them would like to help their dear babies. However, it is nothing but depriving the opportunity for the children to use their knowledge and skills to solve problems all by themselves, which is essential for their development. Without such ability, I can not imagine the one can obtain great achievement in the future. Take our daily lives for example, it is no doubt that the successful people is the one who are eager to solve problems by themselves and are strong enough to stand the tough.

The most important reason is that the children can also gain self-confidence by the process to solve the problems independently. Various occurrence around us tell us that the one without self-confidence definitely fail to earn great success in the future. And indeed it is a truth. According to our experience, the process to search solutions without help of parents can make children start to realize their personal power and
hence become confident. As time goes on, the accruing experience enable these children to notice that they are such ones who can face immediately difficulties and then sel-confidence comes. For example, it may occur to us that the children we have met varied from one to another. Some of them are confident compared with others. And such ones are undoubtedly full of experience to find solutions to their problems all by themselves.

Admittedly, it can not be denied that the helps from the parents can enable children to find solutions readily. In terms of what we mention above, we can easily find out the great advantages to allow children to solve problems. With such helps, the children would not only lose may chances to practice themselves, but also bring patient risk to their future development.

To sum up, although someone would assert that help from parents are prerequisite for children, I would say no to them and persist that such helps should swipt away to let the children solve problems independently according to the benefits.
看了下，发现最大的问题就是缺少例子。无论是身边的小例子还是杂志报道上的例子都是可以使论证更加生动完整的
其次，语言可以简练些

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27# 奔跑蜗牛 thank you~~

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26# 秋雨荆州 哈哈，下午没仔细看，匆匆一瞥，嘿嘿~~多谢问候啊~~好好加油！国内读研混日子，赶紧去国外吧:D

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25# Igoon