issue130 "How children are socialized...)

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130."How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

简要提纲：
I.        引言+paraphrase 题目意思+ 观点 （现代的家长和教育家缺乏对孩子的控制方法和教育方法）
II.        观点阐述一：缺乏控制方法：西方缺乏控制；东方国家过度控制
III.        观点阐述二：缺乏教育方法
IV.        总结二、三段

There is a Chinese saying: children are the future. It aptly depicts the significance of the young generation who will turn into the mainstay of the society in the future. However, being weaker and less resolved than before with regard to curbing and shaping the children, today's parents and educators seem to lack the power and relative skills and methods to socialize them.

The prime problem is that nowadays parents and educators are more and more distinctly showing their bewilderment of how to treat with the children and which attitude they should have towards them. In the western world, with an increasing claim for children's equality to adults, "children rights" has been involved in political issues rather than purely educational and family concerns. Parents in a western country, especially in an European country find that the traditional spanking is out of the question, even whether they may shout at the children is open to doubt because who knows the dreadful potential psychological experience it will bring them. In contrast, the situation in eastern countries, which is the apparently (ostensibly) opposite, may result in worse. Holding the tradition of over-respecting the older generation, parents believe they have the absolute power to control their children and in whatever way they consider effective including abusing and physical punishment. But the result is disappointing to them in that they gradually realize that when they grow up, the children may on the contrary release the characteristics which the parents try to prevent in their early ages.

Despite the shortness of power to control the children, educators also become more and more confused of what to teach to the children.  In order to equip the future generation with the knowledge and values necessary to bring a better society, a legion of things are needed to be decided and then put into reality in terms of the educational methods. Whether to meet the needs of the children or the needs of the society? Which is better: giving the children rights to develop themselves according to their characteristics and interests or imposing on them a series of uniform curricula and standards? All these are still not known clearly and under wide debates.

In sum, though many of the parents and educators have recognized the importance of children, considering their inadequate knowledge of how to treat with and what to educate the children, there is still a long way to go in the educational domain and the whole public.

自评：
优点：长短句分配比较合理
缺点：1.从全文结构看，观点二的阐述空泛，没例子（写的时候怕时间不够）
2.从各段看，第二段虽然主题句提到了家长和教育者，但全段都在说家长，有些偏颇
3.稍微超时：50分钟完成

我9月15日考，以现在的程度应该怎样有效地提高呢？谢谢大家！！