issue234 我再写！多脑河网吧38号机作品：人们偏爱限制而不是绝对自由

木耳UID: 123036

44分钟写完。之后察了一遍，加了三句话。发现so many拼写错误。Faint!! 快考了，还有这么多错！

Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice although they would probably deny such a preference.

In any democratic society, freedom is necessarily one of the most important essences, which include freedom, justice, love and so forth. But in human' civilization, there was never absolute freedom at all. And for almost all people, although they would probably claim that they prefer freedom and would fight for it, they may really prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice in that individuals always want to know what is 'right' and 'wrong' through restrictions and regulations. Moreover, absolute freedom of choice means one should think over every choice carefully and thoroughly; yet most people lack such ability to make choice by their own decisions.

On the one hand, as the highest social animals, human beings have standards and rules to direct their behaviors. And it is not the society's demand to rule everyone's actions but also the individuals need to distinguish right from wrong based on restrictions and regulations. It is often the case that a little kid would ask his/her parents who is the good guy and who is the bad in a movie; and when the parents answers him or her, the little kid would ask another question subsequently" But why?" It is just a very proper illustration that human beings have the need to know what they should prefer and what not. And to get the answer, they always rely on restrictions and regulations. Moral and ethical standards in every society is just serves as this function. Furthermore, generally speaking, to be a respected and able individual is everyone's goal. And a basic qualification for this is that one should have high moral and ethical level. Therefore, people always give up the absolute freedom of choice voluntarily and conforms to the restrictions and regulations. Simply put, to choose restrictions and regulations is based on human's will to become noble.

On the other hand, in fact, in this world, many people lack the ability to choose. Individuals would always feel confused and anxious when facing the absolute freedom of choice in that they cannot think over every option carefully to weigh the advantage of and disadvantage of each of them thoroughly. Some people often complain that the society should be blamed for this situation; but actually, everyone should responsible for his/her choice and actions. The young men’s perplexity in this complex and clamorous world is just a case in point. Always, they have no idea concerning what they should do in the future but rely on their parents and the society to choose for them. Then they would feel reassured and relaxed. In China, when a high school student is going to enter college, he or she should choose a major for him or her, which become a hard task for almost everyone in that they can not find out what is the best for him/herself as well as the society. So when students fall into such an embarrassment, they tend to search solutions in restrictions and regulations such as parents ideas and some so-called experts' advice. In a word, when the world becomes more and more complex and full of options, people ironically prefer restrictions and regulations since too many choices in some sense means no choice to most of the people who prefer not thinking and investigation but reassurance and conformity.  

It is the fact that freedom of choice is no existence. Moreover, most people would feel better when they in the control of restrictions and regulations. It is our human nature and no one can change it.

imongUID: 140258

Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice although they would probably deny such a preference.

In any democratic society, freedom is necessarily one of the most important essences, which include freedom, justice, love and so forth. (再读一遍?essence不要用important，include加s，freedom include freedom?)But in human' civilization(the civilization of human being), there was never absolute freedom at all( absolute freedom has not ever existed最好去掉逗号合起来，句子很短就不要再分了). And for almost all people, although they would probably claim that they prefer freedom and would fight for it, they may really（really不好） prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice in that individuals always want to know what is 'right' and 'wrong' through restrictions and regulations. Moreover, absolute freedom of choice means one should think over every choice carefully and thoroughly; yet most people lack such ability to make choice by their own decisions.各个句子之间的关系有些乱

On the one hand, as the highest social animals, human beings have standards and rules to direct their behaviors. And it is not （少了only，如果后边是but also）the society's demand to rule everyone's actions but also the individuals need to distinguish right from wrong based on restrictions and regulations. It is often the case（often the case不爽） that a little kid would ask his/her parents who is the good guy and who is the bad in a movie; and when the parents answers him or her, the little kid would ask another question subsequently" But why?" （用kids，复数就可以避免his/her）It is just a very proper(?) illustration that human beings have the need to know what they should prefer and what not. And to get the answer, they always rely on restrictions and regulations. (重组顺序，Restrictions and regulations are relied on when people are to get such answers,更清楚，而且重点在前面)Moral and ethical standards in every society is just serves as this function. Furthermore, generally speaking, to be a respected（respectable?） and able individual is everyone's goal. And a basic qualification for this is that one should have high moral and ethical level. Therefore, people always give up the absolute freedom of choice voluntarily and conforms to the restrictions and regulations. Simply put, to choose restrictions and regulations is based on human's will to become noble.

On the other hand, in fact, (这样的结构不要滥用，像刚才的generally speaking放在furthermore后边就很难受)in this world, many people lack the ability to choose. Individuals would always feel confused and anxious when facing the absolute freedom of choice in that they cannot think over every option carefully to weigh the advantage of and disadvantage of each of them （of them多余）thoroughly. Some people often complain that the society should be blamed for this situation; but actually, everyone should responsible for his/her choice and actions. The young men’s perplexity（？年轻人的迷茫？不太对劲） in this complex and clamorous world is just a case in point. Always, they have no idea concerning what they should do in the future but rely on their parents and the society to choose for them. Then they would feel reassured and relaxed. In China, when a high school student is going to enter college, he or she （when students… they… ）should choose a major for him or her, which become a hard task(hard task不爽，exacting/tough work/job?) for almost everyone in that they can not find out what is the best for him/herself as well as the society. So when students fall into such an embarrassment(不是尴尬，bewilder的名词是什么？), they tend to search（seek） solutions in restrictions and regulations such as parents ideas and some so-called experts' advice. In a word, when the world becomes more and more complex and full of options, people ironically prefer restrictions and regulations since too many choices in some sense means no choice to most of the people who prefer not thinking and investigation but reassurance and conformity.

It is the fact that freedom of choice is no existence. Moreover, most people would feel better when they in the control of restrictions and regulations. It is our human nature and no one can change it.

比我好多了，我现在又失写了，正在努力调整，还有不到一个礼拜了，受不了啊

xbdebbUID: 142129

Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice although they would probably deny such a preference.

In any democratic society, freedom is necessarily one of the most important essences, which include freedom, justice, love and so forth. But in human' civilization, there was never absolute freedom at all. And for almost all people, although they would probably claim that they prefer freedom and would fight for it, they may really prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice in that individuals always want to know what is 'right' and 'wrong' through restrictions and regulations. Moreover, absolute freedom of choice means one should think over every choice carefully and thoroughly; yet most people lack such ability to make choice by their own decisions.

On the one hand, as the highest social animals, human beings have standards and rules to direct their behaviors. And it is not the society's demand to rule everyone's actions but also the individuals need to distinguish right from wrong based on restrictions and regulations.(not , but also are not properly used )  It is often the case that a little kid would ask his/her parents who is the good guy and who is the bad in a movie; and when the parents answers him or her, the little kid would ask another question subsequently" But why?" It is just a very proper illustration that human beings have the need to know what they should prefer and what not. And to get the answer, they always rely on restrictions and regulations. Moral and ethical standards in every society is just serves( serve is a verb , server as that is ok )  as this function. Furthermore, generally speaking, to be a respected and able individual is everyone's goal. And a basic qualification for this is that one should have high moral and ethical level. Therefore, people always give up the absolute freedom of choice voluntarily and conforms to the restrictions and regulations. Simply put,(ha ha you also like using this ) to choose restrictions and regulations is based on human's will to become noble.(?)

On the other hand, in fact, in this world, many people lack the ability to choose. Individuals would always feel confused and anxious when facing the absolute freedom of choice in that they cannot think over every option carefully to weigh the advantage of and disadvantage of each of them thoroughly. Some people often complain that the society should be blamed for this situation; but actually, everyone should (be)  responsible for his/her choice and actions. The young men’s perplexity in this complex and clamorous world is just a case in point. Always, they have no idea concerning what they should do in the future but rely on their parents and the society to choose for them. Then they would feel reassured and relaxed. In China, when a high school student is going to enter college, he or she should choose a major for him or her, which become(S) a hard task for almost everyone in that they can not find out what is the best for him/herself as well as the society. So when students fall into such an embarrassment, they tend to search solutions in restrictions and regulations such as parents ideas and some so-called experts' advice. In a word, when the world becomes more and more complex and full of options, people ironically prefer restrictions and regulations since too many choices in some sense means no choice to most of the people who prefer not thinking and investigation but reassurance and conformity.

It is the fact that freedom of choice is no existence. Moreover, most people would feel better when they in the control of restrictions and regulations. It is our human nature and no one can change it.

木耳,你不必用那么多she he,  they is a  simple one
你的思路总是很清晰 一方面从道德要求,一方面从事实上来论.

木耳UID: 123036

非常感谢imong和xedebb，焦头烂额之中还抽出时间帮我该作文。我仔细看过了，文章中确实还有许多不恰当的地方，尤其是你们都提到的he/she的问题，还有学许多句法词法的问题，受益匪浅！

imong不要着急，你的实力大家有目共睹，不会有问题的。我觉得你是不是有些过尤不及了？也许适当放松一下会好许多。快考试了，要说提高也没有多少余地了，保持平稳最重要。

xbdebb，同样感谢你。你的文笔比我好，作文的思路这几天也有明显的进步，一定会考好的。记得考完把经验发上来，我可在你后面一天啊！

果酱面包UID: 142490

imong 和 xbdebb都改的好细呀。我觉得木耳哥哥是不是把第一个观点改成 human beings need standards and rules to direct their behaviors. 这样突出了standards and rules 的重要性。我这么说是不是有点叫板了？：P

木耳UID: 123036

面包mm（jj）说得不错，第一段开头不是很鲜明，你的说法很不错，我再改一下。