我的第二篇文章，感觉还可以，希望高手指点，不胜感激

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老师的工资应该依据学生的学术表现




Some people think that teacher’s salaries should be based on their student’s academic performance. However, some aspects such as the criterion of academic performance, the intellectual level of students and different contents of disciplines are all to be discussed before I accept the claim.
For one thing, what should be the exact standards of academic performance? Should we base our judgment on the numbers of professors among the students, the significant breakthroughs in one domain or the number of papers that published on the famous academic magazines? It is so difficult to confirm the standards that distributing salaries accordingly seems almost impossible.
For another, different people have different talents; one may be excellent in one field while badly performing in other. Qian Zhongshu, a famous Chinese scholar, a specialist in English study in China and published so many works on English literature, got a zero when he entered Tsinghua University. How can we evaluate his academic performance with such great achievements in English as well as such inability in math? The students taught by a teacher may also have different academic ability even in the same field such as foundations and ability in grasping what the teacher teaches, and it is unequal when an experienced teacher’s salary is decreased by the poor performance of his or students.

What’ more, the world is made up of so much aspects such as science, aesthetic, entertainment and so on; only when they reach a balance can we enjoy it fully. If we just pursue academic achievement, it is no hard to imagine what our world will be with its entire people busy with calculating perplexed formulations everywhere. Some academic may be harder to make without the inspiration of other domains. For example, Einstain, the famous physics who came up with the theory of relativity, was also so fond of violin and refreshed his mind at the process of playing it. In order for the better development of our society, we should play the same emphasize on all the subjects and teachers teaching different subjects should be paid salaries at the approximate equally level.
In summary, considering the impossibility of making the criterion and the necessaries of every discipline, it is not scientific to base the teachers’ salaries on the academic performance of the students; we should treat teachers equally and raise more appropriate methods to distinguish their performance.

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还不错，也可以直接贴了

ligongcaofei123UID: 3309636

直接贴？不是很懂，这个写的真的可以吗？:D